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issue

“It is difficult for people to achieve professional success without sacrificing important aspects of a fulfilling personal life.

 

The author cites in the argument that it is very difficult for people to succeed without sacrificing important aspects of a fulfilling personal life. This conclusion is reasonable in different aspects. 

First, if one wants to achieve professional success, he or she would have to spend much more time than others in training himself, practicing professional skills, learning useful experiences, thinking of new methods to make progress. So the time spent with his or her family would certainly be reduced. For example, during the Olympic Games, many athletes who have obtained the gold media say that they haven’t gone back home for more than two years, even during the Chinese traditional Spring Festival. For succeeding in the Olympic Games, they have sacrificed the time that should be spent with their family, this is an important part of a fulfilling personal life.

Second, on the contrary, a fulfilling personal life is not always opposite with the professional success. In an analysis among a number of successful managers, the researchers have recently pointed out that a regular life is more favorable for a manager to succeed, this conclusion changes people’s traditional opinion that those who work day and night without rest are the people who would be most likely to achieve success.  

To sum up, it is difficult for people to achieve professional success without sacrificing important aspects of a fulfilling personal life, but this depends on the career, and people should learn to balance the career with personal life.   

 

 

 

 argument

The following appeared in an article in a health and fitness magazine.

“laboratory studies show that Saluda Natural Spring Water contains several of the minerals necessary for good heath and that it is completely free of bacteria. Residents of Saluda, the small town where the water is bottled, are hospitalizes less frequently that the national average. Even though Saluda Natural Spring Water may seem expensive, drinking it instead of tap water is a wise investment in good health.”

 

In this argument the author concludes that even though Saluda Natural Spring Water may seem expensive, it is a  wise investment in good health to drink it instead of tap water. To support this conclusion, the authors cites the result of aboratory studies that Saluda Natural Spring Water contains several of the minerals necessary for good heath and that it is completely free of bacteria ,and the fact that Residents of Saluda, the small town where the water is bottled, are hospitalizes less frequently that the national average. However, this conclusion is not convincing because it relies on several dubious assumptions.

First, the author cites that one of the reasons of drinking Saluda Natural Spring Water is the result of aboratory studies that Saluda Natural Spring Water contains several of the minerals necessary for good heath and that it is completely free of bacteria. But it is doubtable that a kind of Spring Water completely free of bacteria is good for health. According to the science study, certain kinds of  bacteria is good and necessary to the health. So the water completely free of bacteria isn’t certainly good for the health.

Second, the author has cited that Residents of Saluda, the small town where the water is bottled, are hospitalizes less frequently that the national average, this fact could not be the evidence. The healthy conditions of the residents of Saluda could be resulted from several different factors, for example, the area of grass and trees is wider in the town than in other regions, the problem of pollution in the town is less severe, or the habits of healthy living of the residents. These factors above are all important, the author hasn’t proved that the spring water is the key point of the good health of the residents, also hasn’t proved that other factors could be ruled out.

To sum up, this argument is not completely sound. The evidences used by the author to support the conclusion are weak. To strengthen the argument, the author should provide evidence that the spring water contains kinds of bacteria

Good for health, and prove that the water is the most important factor that results to the good health of the residents in the small town.

 

 

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