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这是我刚凑好的模板 3号就考试了 刚开始弄作文 希望大家能帮我修改修改  另外 大家有啥建议能给我提提么 现在作文完全没有头绪……万分感谢

开头 The conclusion of the argument is that     .To reach the conclusion the author employs several lines of reasoning. To begin with, the auhtor points out that     . In addition, the author reasons that     .Although the author’s claim seemst to be somewhat valid, scrutiny reveals numorouse potential problems that render the auhtor’position untenable.

 

结尾 In sum, the author’argument is not compelling. To strengthen the conclusion that    ,the author would have to provid concrete envidence that    .Moreover ,to better assess the arugument, we need additional detailed information about     .If the author considered the above problems, the argument would be better.

 

一、                            因果

The author commits a fallacy of causal oversimplification.The lines of reasoning is that because A occurred before B, the former is responsible for the latter.(He uses a positive correlation between A and B to establish a causal relationship.However, the fact that A coincides B does not necessarily prove that A caused B ). For exmaple,perhas C is the cause of B.Further, the resaoning cannot be valid unless other possible causal elements have been considered and ruled out. Thus, without specific analysis of the exact source of B, it is groundless to attribute B to A.

 

二、                            样本

1 特殊----一般

The envidence the author cites is insufficient to support the argument.Common sense and observation tell us that a specific exmaple is logically unsounded to generate a genreral conclusion. In this case, the reasoning cannot be valid unless it can be shown that A1 is the representative of the all A. It is possible that   A1的特殊性. As the result , in face of such limited envidence, the conclusion B is unwarranted.

2时效(调查是否够近)

Because the author neglects to indicate how recently the survey was actually conducted,the envidence he cites is insufficient to support the conclusion. Therefore, whether the samples are close enough to prevent the generalizetion from invalidating by changes in times remains unkown.For example, the survey conducted in last month is more reliable than that in last year.

3调查人数、对象

The poll cited by the author is too vague to be informative. Lacking information ahout the number of people surveyed and the number of respondents, it is impossible to access the validity of the results. For example, if 200 persons were surveyed but only 2 responded, the conclusion that  would be highly suspect.(The claim does not indicate who conducted the poll,who reponded,or when,where and how the poll was conduvted.)Until the above information is provided, the results of the survey are worthless as envidence for the conclusion.

 

三、                            错误类比

The argument rests on the assumption that B is analogous to A in all respects. However, it is highly doubtful that strategies drawn from A are applicable to B. In this case, we can see the differences between these two clearly overweigh the similarities, for exmaple,A    ,however,B    .Accordingly, B is unlikely to experience the same consequence if it adopt the strategies of A

 

四、                            忽略时间造成的改变

The author commits a fallacy of “all things remain unchanged over time”. The fact that happened X Xyears ago is not a sound envidence to draw a conclusion that  .The author assumes without justification that the bachground conditions have remained the same at different times or at deffient location.However,it is not clear in this case whether the current conditions at A are the same as the used to be two years ago.Thus it is impossible to conclude that  

五、                            either-or

The author assumes that A and B are mutually exculusive alternatives and there is no room for a middle ground. However, the author provide no reason for imposing an either-or choice. Moreover.the argument fails to rule out the posibility that adjusting A and B might pruduce better result.

六、                            无理假设

The author rests on a dubious assumption that    However, on further informatin is cited to butress the assumption and to establish the correlation.In fact, it is quite likely that   .Therefore,without additional detailed analysis of the relationship between A and B, the author cannot reach the conclusion convincingly.

七、                            充分必要

必要The author’s proposal depends on the assumption that there are no viable alternative means to achieve B except A. Yet the author fails to substantiate this assumption. What’s more B is due to a combination of factors,that is to say , there are a host of other  ways to reach B . Perhaps C would be even more effective than A. Without accounting for these potential factors, the author concludes too hastily that …is the best way to achieve goals

充分

The author assumes that A is all that is requied for B. Although A is an important element in determining B,it is hardly the only element required. Other factors are equally important. In the case of B ,factors such as C and D play a significant role as well.

 

ISSUE

_________?In geneal, I agree with the author’s assertion that________.  However, the author unnecessarily extends this broad assertion to an irreversible extreme while neglecting some other crucial factors which may greatly influence the issue. All in all, my points of agreement and contention with the author involve the case-by-case analysis as discussed below.

On the one hand, I agree that this assertion, though suffers from some inevitable drawbacks, has some merits in the light of common sense and observation in daily life. Accordingly, it is indisputable.in some degree. After all, _______. In other words_________. One could effortlessly imagine that­______

Moreover,___________. Take____ for example. All these evidence demonstrates beyond any doubt that_____.

On the other hand, realizing that a more rational and accurate judgment need to incorporate different aspects of the issue as adequately as possible, I have to point out that the author overstates ______’s comparative significance, and neglect to take into account other essential factors. Firstly, the author overlooked_____________, that is to say,____________. Secondly, ________, which might has been noticed by people. Hence, I tend to concede that in some certain circumstances the practice that______ is partially inappropriate

In sum, seldom can other issues be more complicated than issue about__________. Consequently, judgment can only be drawn in a subjective way rather than in objective and definite way. And so different are the personal experiences, emotional concerns and personalities among people that thousand individuals might maintain thousand opinions. As to me, _______