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Do you agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a guide

Imagine that you open up your map,but you can’t find your destination.Then you take a taxi,and it takes you to the entrance of rich restanrant which you definitely can’t offer it.When you want to call somebody for help,you find that your cell phone is gone and you will be caught in a particularly heavy shower because the weather start to change.Sounds familiar?If you have met these cases,you will agree that traveling in a group led by a guide is the best way to travel.
Parts of the joy of the traveling is the sense of relaxing when seeing a completely new place without concerning your schedule and being afraid of missing something exciting. If there is a guide in your group of traveling,you will be lucky to be free to enjoy the scene in the journey and share it with your travel companion.You will get the benifits of another pair of eyes and ears from the the guide,because he/she will provide the direct and detailed information which make you know the place where you are easily.One time,when I was hiking in Nanjing with a group,I encountered a small statue beside the street.Had the guide not been there,I would not have known that it is a famous statue which has more than 1,000 years history.  
Traveling in a group with a guide not only enrich the experience of the travel.but also make it much safer.The person traveling along aways become the target of some bad ones like thieves,rapists and murderers.Sometimes,to save money ,the person traveling alone will choose to live in a dorm which are cheaper.Apart from the noise and the inconvenience of sharing the same room with others,you have to be constantly vigilant to prevent other people stealing your belongings.While,if there is a guide in your group,he/she will arrange the safe place to live for you.And when you are enjoying the scene of a beautiful place,a guide, maybe sometimes your companion in your group will become the rule who will help you watch your valuables.
Finally,traveling in a group with a guide will save you a lot of money and time.My experience of traveling told me no matter where you are,the guide of the group will find the best hotel for the most appropriate price. No matter when you feel hungry the guide will find the cheap and delicious native dinner for you. No matter what kind of native scenic spots,the guide will save you so much money to buy a ticket in discount.
In conclusion,maybe some people like the feeling of traveling alone without other’s disrupting.
However,in my opinion,enjoying the scence of the new place, meanwhile enjoying the time when you are in a group with a guide give you the complete happiness.

lisy

Imagine that you open up your map, but you can’t find your destination. Then you take a taxi, and it takes you to the entrance of an expensive restaurant, in which the price is not you can afford. When you want to call somebody for help, you find that your cell phone is gone and you are caught in a particularly heavy shower because you forget to look ar the weather forecast. Sounds familiar? If you have met these cases, you will agree that traveling in a group led by a guide is the best way to travel.
Part of the joy of the traveling is the sense of relaxing when experiencing a completely new place without concerning your schedule and being afraid of missing something exciting. If there is a guide in your group of traveling, you will be lucky to be free to enjoy the scene in the journey and share it with your travel companion. You will get the benifits of another pair of eyes and ears from the guide, because he/she will provide the direct and detailed information which make you know the place where you are easily(?). One time, when I was hiking(walking? Hiking金山词霸上是徒步旅行的意思，不过American从来不这么用，Hiking应该是在野外) in the street of Nanjing with a group, I encountered a small statue beside(?) the street. Had the guide not been there, I would not have known that it is a famous statue which has more than 1,000 years history.  
Traveling in a group with a guide not only enrich the experience of the travel, but also make it much safer. The person traveling along always become the target of some bad ones like thieves, rapists and murderers. Sometimes, to save money, the person traveling alone will choose to live in a dorm which is cheaper. Apart from the noise and the inconvenience of sharing the same room with others, you have to be constantly vigilant to prevent other people stealing your belongings. While, if there is a guide in your group, he/she will arrange the safe place to live for you. And when you are enjoying the scene of a beautiful place, a guide, sometimes your companion in your group, will become the rule(?) who watch your valuables.
Finally, traveling in a group with a guide will save you a lot of money and time. My experience of traveling told me, no matter where you are, the guide of the group will find the best hotel for the most appropriate price. Whenever you feel hungry the guide will find the cheap and delicious native dinner for you. No matter what kind of native scenic spots, the guide will save you so much money from finding a discount ticket.
In conclusion, maybe some people like the feeling of traveling alone without other’s disrupting.
However, in my opinion, enjoying the scene of the new place, meanwhile enjoying the time when you are in a group with a guide give you the complete happiness.

改了一些小错误，有些错误其实你把它放到word里面自动就出来了。

总体来说不错，要是句式能变化多一点就完美了。

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