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lucy8762

    

148. Do you agree or disagree with the following
statement? Playing games teaches us about life. Use specific reasons and examples
to support your answer.

    

    

People say that, people who play games all day will
lost their goal. Nowadays, some people hold the idea of playing games teaches
us about life, but others have formed a different picture about this. After
concerning the advantages and disadvantages of playing game, I agree with the
former one.

    

    

First, playing games might helps to discover ones
talent. Forrest Gump, who is the protagonist in the 1993 Hollywood blockbuster,
Forrest Gump, is a good example in that. He was born with an IQ of 75 and has a
deformation in his legs. So, when he goes to school, he becomes the target of
people laughing. Of course, school bullies often hurl stones to him. And Gump
must run fast so that he can avoid the stones. And one day, a college coach
found his talent in running and he becomes an excellent football player
finally. So, playing games is a good choice for people who want to find their potential
talent.

    

    

Additionally, it may teach player something which is essential
for our daily life. Recently a survey from China Social Science Academy found
that people who like playing the games which need some other people to attend
have the cooperation spirit more likely than that ones who do not like it. As
we all know, cooperation spirit is one of the important aspect in today.
Obviously, we can benefit from playing games.

    

    

Last but not least, we can meet some friends in the
same interest though playing games. It is the case for my friend, Lucy who I
met her in basketball playground. It's plain to see that playing games is a
good way to make friends.

    

    

Let's put this in the same nutshell. Playing games can
let us know the things we good at, tell us some precious things and may get a
bridge to make friends.

    

 小女子在此叩谢各位了！！！！！！！！！！！

lucy8762

怎么没人理我啊？？难道真的差到看不下去？？

alexwithibt

写的挺好.特别是2,3段的例子.

我改了2段. 第4段最好能多写些. 否则, 就不要写第4段那2句话了.

People say that, people who play games all day will lost their goal. Nowadays, some people hold the idea of playing games teaches us about life, but others have formed a different picture about this. After concerning the advantages and disadvantages of playing game, I agree with the former one.

 

(In the past, we our common people were always misled by a prevailing notion that playing games would lose our primary goal, for young children, their performance was invariably judged by how much time they spent on their study. However, modern pedagogy investigation demonstrates that playing games does not shad our attention, rather enhances us to approach goal efficiently. )

Last but not least, we can meet some friends in the same interest though playing games. It is the case for my friend, Lucy who I met her in basketball playground. It's plain to see that playing games is a good way to make friends.

 

(Last but not least, we may occasional meet someone during playing games, play together, share similar interests, and ultimately construct lifelong friendship, as it occurs in my case that 最好写一个你自己的例子…………..  It is obvious that …………..)

lucy8762

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