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The schooling system in the US is
modeled after the European system; all children begin school around the age of
6, and complete 12 grades if they successfully pass all of the academic
requirements prescribed and thus get promoted each year. However, the professor
argues that the system has inherent flaws that prevent it from allowing
children to learn to their full potential.

    

    

First, the professor points out that some
children are more ready than other children to enter school at the age of six.
Due to differences in mental, physical and social maturity, while some seven
year olds are not yet ready for formal schooling, some five year olds are.
Thus, the traditional system of forcing children to enter school at the age of
six may not be sound; some simply are not ready to enter school and learn. This
problem is compounded when the students become teenagers.
                

    While females usually
exhibit higher maturity than their male counterparts during their teenage years,
females attend classes with males of the same age. As a result, the learning
processes of the females may be impeded; students who are performing better and
faster learners have to sit in the same class room as those who need additional
work to understand a previously taught concept. Hence, the more mature students
often get bored, and the less mature students may often feel discouraged as the
material presented may be perceived as being too hard. As a result, putting
students into the same grade by age may not be a good idea.

Second, the professor
points out that the promotion system also has inherent problems. The students
who are forced repeat a year usually exhibit low self-confidence and are
usually bored from having to repeat all of the material in the same grade.
Although the intent was to have the students relearn a concept that they did
not understand previously, they may just become bored all together and not
bother with learning. The lack of self-confidence may also hamper the ability
and willingness of those students who have to repeat a grade to learn in class.
Hence, the results of this system may be counter-productive.

According to the professor,
the concept of having students who do not meet a minimum standard for a particular
grade to repeat the year is counter productive. Also, the notion of having kids
grouped together by age is inappropriate. In his lecture, he points out the
various flaws that exist with the current education system.