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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement？？  Getting university education is the most important factor for success in life。

 

Some people hold the opinioin that getting unversity education is very crucial for our success in life, however, seldom people contradict the view. At the first galance, considering the expensive tution, I could take the chance to give up the university education. Nevertheless, I agree the statement due to the obvious reasons below.

 

The first and foremost, the educatioin from the university can bring us more advanced knowledge and help us to complete ur own ideas. In the senior high school, the teacher just taught us the general points in all the course. We know the superfical aspects but not understand the theory or the fact of the course. Even when we face the theory, we cannot learn to apply them in the practical filed. For example, we just know the chemistry elements in the senior school, but the characteristics which may used for the chemical products were just studied in the unveristy from the professor. Thus, in order to completing our knowledge system and making them practical into industry or scientific research, to get the better education is important, especially for the success of scientists and engineers.

 

Furthermore, as we know, the advanced and latest technique and science result are always from the first-rate university, and there are usually fanmous and big companies and firms around the university to support the education here. Thus, it is benefit to find jobs for the grauduated students from the university. For instance, the state of Californian in USA, one of the most important IT and software industry basefields, have several noted unviersities or college., such as the UC Berkery,UCLA, UCI,Standford and so on. The students who graduated from these university can easily gain a good chance into the greatest company like the IBM, APPLE, Google, and most of them obtain the opportunities to achievce their success there.

 

The last but not least, entering one unversity to go on your study is not only to improve yourself, but also the ways to recognize many new friends, new partners, even meet the new chances in your life. For example, there stands many unions, or organizations everywhere, one side, they can help you to communicate with your classmates, share with others’ ideas, inspire your mind, another hand, through this, you also find several chances on your life to the triumph

 

From what have been talked about, to consider the advantages in all aspects, I strongly agree with the statement that it is essential to receive one better education from the unveristy for our success.

 

 

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