When it comes to the question of whether high schools should consent (change to allow, because consent goes more close to "agree") students to choose the courses which (delete or change to that) they would like to learn, there is no such things as a consensus. 这个COMPOUND SENTENCE的脑袋太大,呵呵。建议修改一下。而且主句表达有点,按照ETS的说法,AWKWARD。 Some people believe students at high schools should perceive(应该是PERSUE吧) a various education (VARIOUS EDUCATION 组合错误WRONG COLLOCATION) to extend knowledge before they attend college, while others claim that students who study at high schools is old enough to make a choice of want to learn by themselves, not others ought them to. (最后的CONTRAST PARALLEL PAIRINGS在意思上并不构成比较,因为你的句子的意思我理解是“有些同志觉得高中的XDJM应该多选择科目以便在大学之前拓宽知识面,但是其他领导坚持喊:高中的GGMM们都已经年纪不老小了,可以自己决定自己学什么了”。呵呵,这个第一段是脸面,还是需要仔细看看的。改改吧。)