各位大虾帮我批一下我的作文可以吗？感觉这篇写得好烂啊，不知道行不行~~~~~~

etim717

各位大虾帮我批一下我的作文可以吗？感觉这篇写得好烂啊，不知道行不行~~~~~~

题目是是会说重要还是会写重要

In today's world, people’s attitude about the importance of speaking and writing are diversified. While some people hold the opinion that to speak well is more important than to write well, some people just think the opposite way. As there is strong argument for both opinions, it is hard to determine which is more important than the other. Both abilities have their own relative merits.

First, to speak well is an indispensable asset for people to succeed in their studies. To present your ideas orally is the best way to get the perfect timing. For exmaple, when a team of sociology students are discussing the best way to survey a certain group of voters who is casting votes on about their political biases, and you want to convince your classmates to use the approach which you think is the best, the best way for you is to speak to them about how feasible and effective your approach is orally. You can tell them how the survey should be organized and how the poll should be carried on, as well as how to interview the voters objectively. It is only through imparting the knowledge to your classmates orally can you achieve your objective. On the contrary, by the time you have written down all the advantages of your proposal, the voter may have already lost their patience and the timing is not perfect any more.

Second, to write well is also a prerequisite for people. To write formally and politely is the key to success of business when you are doing businesses. For example, when you need to do a proposal of a whole project or an advertisement campaign, the best way to do it is to write a formally using every evidence and examples to support your proposal. It is also more convincing to write your opinions down than to orally presenting your opinion. Since your boss may be too busy, they might ignore your oral presentation, however, the power of formal letters transcends that of oral presentation. When they are finished with the work at hand, your boss will have a careful consideration of your proposal and may approve it.

In conclusion, both writing well and speaking well is vital in today's world. It is impossible to determine which one is better than the other. We better learn both abilities in order to succeed in our lives.

alexwithibt

最好选一个说.不要2都说好.

First, to speak well is an indispensable asset for people to succeed in their studies. To present (clearly
            express) your ideas orally is the best way to get the perfect timing. For example, when a team of sociology students are discussing the best way to survey a certain group of voters who is casting votes on about their political biases, (what way is the best for us to effectively survey……) and you want to convince your classmates to use the approach which you think is the best, (accept your opinion) the best way for you is to speak to them about how feasible and effective your approach is orally.(It is better for you to precisely and logically speak out your aspects, and subsequently make them convince that your approach is most feasible and effective, rather than…..) You can tell them how the survey should be organized and how the poll should be carried on, as well as how to interview the voters objectively. It is only through imparting the knowledge to your classmates orally can you achieve your objective. On the contrary, by the time you have written down all the advantages of your proposal, the voter may have already lost their patience and the timing is not perfect any more.

 

Second, to write well is also a prerequisite
            for people (for people
            多余).