第一次写作文，给大家看看TWE002

autumoon

就是写的父母是孩子最好的老师的那个。好多年没写过作文了，手很生。另外觉得有点言之无物阿：（。牛牛给指导一下。我不太会用复杂的词，所以看上去有些childish.大家拍拍

I totally agree with the statement that parents are the best teachers. There are too many reasons why they are the best teachers.They love you, they know you, they understand you, and they will always be there to support you. Undoubted, they are the best teacher you ever met.

 

 

 

 

First of all, they are the persons who know you best. They are strongly connected with your life ever since you are born. You learn the first word from them. You learn how to speak and write from them. They are the first teachers. Besides knowledge, you also learn how to behave, how to be a good person, how to make yourself learned. You learned a lot from them than what you learned from the books. And you learned a lot of knowledge from them, which you couldn't learn from other ways. They are the best person, they teaches you with the knowledge which could benefit throughout your life.

 

 

Second, they are the best teachers, because they will always be there to encourage you, whenever, whatever, wherever you are. They will be there. When you fail, get frustrated, they will be there for you. So you could get a rest for your heart, you could be encouraged to go ahead and finally succeed. Aren't they the best teachers? They help you with all their hearts and souls.

 

 

They are the best teachers. You grow up with them. Their will never be any teacher other than them who could help you so much. In your life, whenever you get in trouble, you can ask them for help. They would give their help, advices, money, even life when necessary, to you. They could always give more than what you need. Aren't them the best teachers who help you to live a good life?

 

 

Last but not least, they will teach you to love, love you families, love your friends , and love those need your love. They bring you into the world with love. They teach you how to love by giving their love to your in your everyday life. With love, they enlighten your life. With love, you could never feel lonely. With love, there is nothing in the world could discourage you. You learn how to love others, you give your love. Isn't it the best lesson you ever have? Nobody could have taught you how to love more than your parents.

 

 

Parents teach you everything they know, present you everything they have, encourage you wherever you are. No other teacher could have taught you so much. They are definitely the best teachers throughout your life.

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-1-12 3:13:17编辑过]

Joypan

文章中别用第二人称.

maloney

今天改兩篇，不想再動了。明天有心力再看是否為你服務，還有建議LZ，寫TWE不要寫光著屁股第一段，就是一開始就I agree with or I disagree with，這樣實在很不好看。

lynnlinda

muahaha..光屁股

lynnlinda

这篇文章写成totally agree不是很容易但是把这个观点写好了会特别出彩.

可惜LZ有许多ideas但是没有足够的例证.

所谓best,我觉得是要和其他的进行比较才能说明的.要说为什么其他人不能be there for you when u get frustrated, 不能teach u to love.用具体的事例或者逻辑分析给出例证.LZ可能是由于手生,通篇每一句话看起来都像topic sentence,充满苍白的歌颂

我自己不是牛牛,也没琢磨出来怎么把parents are best teachers说圆了...所以前面只是大道理,没法给出具体意见.LZ可以参考一下范文,在感觉无话可说的时候看看别人的ideas往往有所帮助^_^

lynnlinda

顺路贴自己的作业,望赐教

While in some cases parents prove to be good teachers of children, in balance I would not agree with the point that parents are the best teachers. My position will be confirmed as follow.

Truly, parents usually act as the primary mentor and model of children, and a most immediate and responsible teacher. As the child's most familiar and beloved people in the world, they develop the child's language skill, principles of well behave, and the most basic knowledge of science and society. In most cases, children tend to obey parents' instructions more than others'. In this sense, parents do a good job as teachers.

In spite of this confession, however, parents do not always worth the award of "best teachers", since the education of children is such a complex activity that other teachers besides parents are involved. Firstly there are some kinds of knowledge children have to learn from other people. None of parents become master in all fields or always thoughtful enough to communicate with children efficiently. Thus children may find it necessary to ask for suggestions from their professional teachers about science, to ask their peers about the latest fashion, to ask older children about the confusing issues appearing as they grow up, and so on. Consequently, in subjects unfamiliar to parents, and in circumstances when parents could not understand the children's feelings, other teachers may be more efficient.

Moreover, there are extreme circumstances when parents could not play their roles of teachers at all. They may pass away too early to teach the children, and the duty of education falls upon other teachers in society; they may have principle moral problems themselves, consciously or unconsciously lead children to a wrong track of their lives and thus become worst teachers; and they may fail to communicate with their children for some reasons and end up with unconcern as strangers. These circumstances, though rare, are not impossible.

In sum, education of children is a complex process and the belief that parents are the best teachers could not stand still under all circumstances.

我也是光屁股开头,吼吼吼