下周就考了，写一篇作文，请教一下各路大侠

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写得很残，但是总是写不出更好的东西，请各位指教一下，给点建议，谢谢！！

Youth is wasted on the young.

     Youth is not only a period of age, but also an positive attitude to the whole world and the life. Youth can be interpreted as the young age. It can also be seen as a state that a person being active, energetic and optimistic to life. In this sense, youth is not, and will not be wasted on the young. I will discuss my point of view below.

     Initially, the young who are considered with youth cherish this period of time very much. At this aspect, youth is regarded as the characteristic owned only by the young. Even it means the young, there are lots of young people who make good use of their youth. For instance, the famous musician Morzart, he was talented in music when he was a little child and he developed his intellegence on music during his young age. He accomplished lots of compositions that were consieder great sucesses. He was successful and celebrated when he was only 25 years old. He made success rather than sasted time. Another example, a student, an ordinary person without any extremely intellegence, worked very hard in his school time and developed himself a lot of useful ability, such as communicating techniques and leading skills, ect. He didn't spend his time wastefully when he was young. Lots of people also make use of their youth efficiently and carefully.

     From another perspective, youth is not only a young age but also attitude to the world and life. When we say this, a person who is always positive, energetic and active never regards himself old even he is 80-year-old. He is indeed young in his mind. He owns youth and will never wastes it. Take my grandfather as an thereotype, he always told us that he was young. He did sports every morning and he was energetic all the time. He played games with us , told stories to amuse us and taught us to be optimistic to the difficulties we came across. Even till the time he died, he kept smiling. Everyone onws youth if he wants himself to. Youth is not wasted on the young.

     From the evidence above, I concern that youth can be cherished and regainned in any age. And it will not be wasted on the young.

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向楼主提一个小小的建议： 当努力写出一个好句子（暂且认为 句子结构复杂且长的句子比较好） 一定要回头检查一下 句子的主谓宾是否搭配得当。这样才能使好句子，成为加分的句子。
楼主可以再检查一下这篇文章，看看是不是有些这方面的错误呢
加油！

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谢谢指点！！