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eric_guoyi

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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

The title statement is a much debated question in that it affects every student in their daily lives.People may prefer one to another, although some have no poinion about it. To agree or disagree with it is a matter of balancing between its pros and cons. But is I am concerned, if one has considered the following perspectives, he or she could only agree with the title statement that it is a good idea that students have jobs.

First, there is no doubt that some part-time jobs may be closely related to what the student learn through books. In this case, one can apply what he or she learn through classes in practice. Suppose one statistics student may experiement with the new algorithm when he collect data for his or her company. it is very clear that there is a mutual reinforcement between the understanding of study and the work ability. Then, one can only agree some part-time jobs may contribute to study.

Second, if destitute students have part-time jobs, they can earn some money to support the tuition fee on their own, their parents may feel  relieved. In fact, there still some students lack of responsibility belittle hard study and laborious work. I do not think such ones can devote themselves to their careers.

Moreover, when one has part-time jobs, new question that how arrange he or her time effectively now confront him or her. As a consequence, one can get the means of saving time gradually. Of course some people argue that spenting too much time on work would result in the absence of study. Whereas some societies look to the past for guidance, we cast our nets forward. Earning an ability of arranging time is more valueable than saving limited time for study.This can be only brought by doing part-time jobs exclusively. Any deviation from it will cause manipulation of the good.

It is true that whether doing part-time job is right is still not answered, But it can be only a matter of time in the future, I think.

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b以下是引用eric_guoyi在2005-8-24 20:30:00的发言：

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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

The title statement is a much debated question in that it affects every student in their daily lives.People may prefer one to another, although some have no poinion about it.(This sentence gives little information) To agree or disagree with it is a matter of balancing between its pros and cons. But is I am concerned, if one has considered the following perspectives, he or she could only agree with the title statement that it is a good idea that students have jobs.

First, there is no doubt that some part-time jobs may be closely related to what the student learn through books. In this case, one can apply what he or she learn through classes in practice. Suppose one statistics student may experiement with the new algorithm when he collect data for his or her company. it is very clear that there is a mutual reinforcement between the understanding of study and the work ability. Then, one can only agree some part-time jobs may contribute to study.

Second, if destitute(DESTITUDE is seldom used to modify a person) students have part-time jobs, they can earn some money to support the tuition fee on their own,(this way) their parents may feel  relieved. In fact, there (are) still some students lack of responsibility belittle hard study and laborious work. I do not think such ones can devote themselves to their careers.

Moreover, when one has part-time jobs, new question(s) that how (to )arrange he or her time effectively now confront him or her(The Passive Voice sounds better). As a consequence, one can get the means of saving time gradually. Of course some people argue that spenting too much time on work would result in the absence of study. Whereas some societies look to the past for guidance, we cast our nets forward. Earning an ability of arranging time is more valueable than saving limited time for study.This can be only brought by doing part-time jobs exclusively. Any deviation from it will cause manipulation of the good.

It is true that whether doing part-time job is right is still not answered, But it can be only a matter of time in the future, I think.

Dear eric_guoyi,

i only changed the obvious mistakes in your essay. Actually there could be many improvements if you read more articles, especially the academic ones.

Best,

Zoe

eric_guoyi

Thank you very much!