今天收到成绩， 作文6.0. 感谢和模板

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The first plain reason, I am presenting here, is that A is instrumental to XXX today, no issue is more important than XXX, and on no account can we ignore the importance of A.

你们觉得这句话会不会太罗嗦呢?我不是想评论楼主的摸版,尤其后段,is that A is instrumental to XXX today, no issue is more important than XXX, and on no account can we ignore the importance of A. ,第一段就写了做A有什么好处,后面再写,怕不怕会被扣分啊?我想用楼主的摸版为蓝本,设计我的摸版,想各位大大指点一下,最好举个实例个我看看那就更好啦```望复

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My model：

Today, our (school, government, people...)confronts two optionsne is to do A;the other is to do B. those who prefer the former choice hold the opinion that doing A is instrumental to …;those who advocate the latter choice, on the other hand, argue that doing B is conducive to …. Personally, I prefer the latter one, and I will reason and provide concrete evidence to support my viewpoint as follows.

    The first plain reason, I am presenting here, is that A is instrumental to XXX today, no issue is more important than XXX, and on no account can we ignore the importance of A. A man without..., most of us believe, is an unfortunate victim of adversary environment, deprived of a wide assortment of twentieth-century opportunities. Accordingly, so great is people's passion for..., that they are becoming more willingly to do A. For example, convinced of the paromount value of XXX, I devoted myself to doing..., and got back... in the form of .... A fairy proportion of people, however, have not done... and consequently, has not enjoyed the same level of success as I have. suppose what if all of us do...? how can we...?

    In addition, behind my preference lies an equally important fact that...is conducive to YYY. YYY is one of the key word in modern life, and it is hard to find an area that cannot trace back to YYY in some way. Statistical reports from LACE>USALACE> have demostrated that those who do A always receive far more money than /gain a higher status than /developed better than those who don't. In orde to do so, we have no alternative but to do A. take me as an example. In my hometown ...has done and has brought significant wealth to our... we should follow the example and achieve.... Morever, by using the money we earn from A, we can spend some on doing B. Only in this way can we do effectively and satisfy both needs.

    Last but not least, doing A is also beneficial to some other areas. For example...

    Admittedly, doing B has its undeniable merits, such as.... nevertheless, the advantages of A carry more weight than those of B. so the most striking conclusion is obvious.

    To sum up, given the reasons discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we can safely and wisely reach the conclusion that …  In fact, not only do I prefer to A, but also prefer to do A as soon as possible.

皮杰

祝贺！请问你个部分的成绩是多少啊？