【坐稳】12.24起作文寂静（已结贴）

Chelseatong

1.14考到了11. 咖啡店做调查

题目跟机经描述没有差别。

感觉可以提供多一个思路，仅供参考，也不一定make sense。

argument觉得比起自己卖3000杯drinks，100多complaints是很少的。
但是我觉得，饮料的数量不可以直接拿来跟人数做比较。比如3000杯饮料来自300个customers，那么100多的占比就很高了。

awillleadaway

谢谢阅TT君~！辛苦了哦~！么么哒~！

Tiffany要去美国

mandychocolate 发表于 2016-1-12 23:47
今天早上ＡＷＡ考到這篇~

A fitness magazine that regularly features pictures of bodybuilders using s ...

感谢分享~~

mandychocolate

今天早上ＡＷＡ考到這篇~

A fitness magazine that regularly features pictures of bodybuilders using state-of-the-art exercise machines, frequently sold out. To help maximize fitness levels in our town's residents, we should, therefore equip our new community fitness center with such machines!

lillianniu

感谢楼主！！！！

heiteng

谢谢～～～

monica1315

明天考，拿机经的第三篇练了手，有人给我看看，这样写能上5.5吗？
还有，会因为大量套模版而扣分吗？

The following appeared in a memo to the Saluda town council from the town’s business manager.
“Research indicates that those who exercise regularly are hospitalized less than half as often as those who don’t exercise. By providing a well-equipped gym for Saluda’s municipal employees, we should be able to reduce the cost of our group health insurance coverage by approximately 50% and thereby achieve a balanced town budget.

作文
The argument that the cost of the health insurance can be reduced by providing a well-equipped gym for the employees omits some important concerns that must be addressed to substantiate the argument. The statement that follows the description of the result of a research simply describes the comparison of the hospitalization between those who exercise regularly and those who don’t exercise. This alone does not constitute a logical argument in favor of a gym, and it certainly does not provide support or proof of the main argument.

Most conspicuously, the argument rests on an unfair assumption that a well-equipped gym and regular exercise are mutually exclusive alternatives and there is no room for a middle ground. In a weak attempt to support its claim, the argument describes the result of a research. But if  Saluda’s municipal employees do not conform to go to the gym, the gym will not solve the problem. Therefore, this argument is unwarranted without ruling out other choices.

Secondly, the Saluda town council will not possibly reduce the cost of our group health insurance coverage by providing a well-equipped gym for the employees while it is entirely possible that the cost of a well-equipped gym is prohibitively high, even resulting in heavy financial burden. In short, without comparing the expenses the author’s notion is premature at best.

Finally, the author falsely depends on gratuitous assumption that 50% of the cost of the group health insurance is due to the hospitalization of the employees who don’t exercise. However, no evidence is stated in the argument to support this assumption. In reality, this is not necessarily the case and it is more likely that the employees are in emergency. For example, they have a car accident or eat poisonous food. Therefore, this argument is unwarranted without ruling out such possibilities.

Because the argument leaves out several key issues, it is not persuasive. If it includes the items discussed above instead of solely illustrating the correlation between the gym and cost cutting of the health insurance, the argument will be more thorough and convincing.

Tiffany要去美国

mandychocolate 发表于 2016-1-10 09:54
Over the past decade, the price per pound of citrus fruit has increased substantially. Eleven years  ...

非常感谢！！！ 赞啊

mandychocolate

Over the past decade, the price per pound of citrus fruit has increased substantially. Eleven years ago Megamart charged 15 cents a pound for lemons, but today it commonly charges over a dollar a pound. In only one of these last 11 years was the weather unfavorable for growing citrus crop. Evidently, then, citrus growers have been responsible for the excessive increase in the price of citrus fruit, and strict pricing regulations are needed to prevent them from continuing to inflate prices.


Cirtus Fruit 原文 大家加油！

breezelj

谢谢作文君