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TWE147 请NN们给打分,谢谢了.->修改标题by Zeros,见谅!

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发表于 2005-7-19 05:28:00 | 只看该作者

TWE147 请NN们给打分,谢谢了.->修改标题by Zeros,见谅!

When it comes to the issue as to if your school received a gift of money, what do you think is the best way for your school to spend this money? People are likely to provide varying responses. As far as I am concerned, I believe my school should purchase some sports equipment. In this essay , I will justify my reasons through details


The most important reason for my view is that if we have more sports equipment we can do more excise, which is very good for our health. Taking more excise is beneficial than any medicines and can enhance our immunity system by improving our physical conditions . For this reason we will avoid some illness through more excise. Therefore it is a good choice to purchase some sports equipment.


The second reason for my view is that taking more excise can reduce our psychological pressure and erase our anxiety in our life. With more and more pressure from our school we should pay more attention to the relaxation. Taking  excise can help us forget all the annoyance and let us feel full of energy. So it is very important  to us to own more sports equipment.


The third reason for my view is that we can enjoy higher team work spirits with some sports. For instance, when we play football we should carry out effective and useful cooperation and work toward a common goal, which greatly improve our teamwork orientation. Thus we can benefit a lot from more sports equipment was purchased.


many people may say it will take a lot of our time and there will not be enough time for our acdamic courses. My reason is that we cannot study all the time and this is like a short break. And after excise our mand will be refreshed, thus it will not waste our time and on the opposition it can improve our efficiency.


In summary, as suggested by the previous reasons , I strongly confirm that my school should purchase some sports equipment if we receive a gift of money.


沙发
发表于 2005-7-19 09:59:00 | 只看该作者

1.I believe that my school should purchase some sports equipment. In this essay , I will justify my reasons through details


2.Taking more excise is beneficial than any medicines and can enhance our immunity system by improving our physical conditions


3.The second reason for my view is that takkiing more excise can reduce our psychological pressure and erase our anxiety ....


4.when we play football, we should carry out effective (当时间状语从句在前时,应用豆号隔开)


5Thus we can benefit a lot from more sports equipment which was purchased.


6.And after excising ,our mand  will be refreshed,


主要问题是一句话中不能同时有两个谓语.


板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2005-7-19 10:30:00 | 只看该作者

谢谢了

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