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Question:>>

`Because businesses use high-quality advertising to sell low-quality products, schools should give students extensive training in how to make informed decisions before making purchases.~>>

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion expressed above. Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.>>

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Your Answer:>>

Recently, people are more and more concerning about the relationship between the advertisement and the quality of the products. Some people assert that the products which use high-quality to help sales always have a low quality, so we should receive training in how to make informed decisions before making purchases when we are at school. But some people think it is unreasonable to consider products with high-quality advertising are definitely own a low-quality. To evaluate the proposal mentioned above, I estimate the both sides of the

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argument and find that there are several flaws I could not agree with the former one, listing as follow:

呵呵确实是和argument的语言风格很象不过每个人都这样所以无所谓的。

Firstly, there are numerous instances to demonstrate products with high-quality advertising also own a high-quality themselves. For example, Dove is a German brand famous for its high quality products, and its advertisements also have won lots of prizes on the international advertising competitions. Customers always consider the advertising of Dove improve the sales of its products but have no hurt这里是不是应该有个介词？ the benefits of customers.

Secondly, if the condition exists that some products with high-quality in advertising may have low quality themselves and thus the advertising hurt the benefits of customer, it is also questionable that whether people should gain training of adjusting the quality during school and whether the training schools give to student could actually help to the issue. As we know, purchasing is a practice activity and there is no principle to follow during the purchase. People sometimes buy something just because they love it without any reasons, and that will make the extensive training in how to make informed decisions before making purchase pretty difficult and logically fallacious. It may have no help to prevent people from making wrong decision in purchasing.

Last but not least, it is confusing that who should be the teacher to teach students to make right decisions. An economical housewife or an expert of advertising? It is absurd to allow any person without demonstration that he or she will never make wrong purchases to hold the training, and in fact anyone could not assert that he or she never faulty purchase something.

have faulty in purchasing 好象比较符合语法

As a resulting of weighing the advantages and disadvantages of both sides, I

这个是什么用法呢？

should commit that though the ides that businesses use high-quality advertising to sell low quality products and the suggestion that schools should give students extensive training in how to make informed decisions before making purchases has a little meaning on the issue, it is generally wrongly conceived. People should learn how to make purchasing decisions during the shopping practices and remember the flaws they have made to get a better decision next time. The plan to train those abilities at school will fail definitely.

第2篇460多个字吧，应该够了。但我稍稍觉得自己有点写偏题了...大家觉得呢...

我可以很负责任的告诉你绝对够了。写的很不错没有偏题。我的提纲如下仅供参考：

28. “Because businesses use high-quality advertising to sell low-quality products, schools should give students extensive training in how to make informed decisions before making purchases.”“因为企业使用高质量的广告出售低质量的产品，学校应该给学生额外的培训教他们如何在交易前作出见多识广的决定（？）。”
1.首先这个前提就是不符合一般常识和经验证据的.事实上一般只有生产高质量产品的厂家才会做高质量的广告.而生产劣质产品的企业会选择生产使用较差的原料,厂房同样的也会选择较为低廉的广告.而反过来高质量的广告一般会带来更好的收益而使得厂家可以生产更高质量的产品.
2.此外学校也不是做这种额外培训的适合场所.有这个时间学校应该更多的关注学生道德水平的提高和专业知识以及技能的提高.在学校这种场所给学生进行这些培训,学生会觉得世界充满了欺诈和不道德这是不利于学生成长的.

而且第2篇边写边觉得，我怎么又用这个词儿了阿，刚才在第一篇里面就是用的这个句型...等等，可能是因为模版还没总结，觉得自己的语言组织能力还没被激发...有待提高...

真的已经很好了，issue第一次就可以写到这样，真的很难得。假以练习和时日，分数不可限量。

还有，我觉得我每次第一段复述题目大意时都写了超长的...这样会不会不好啊？？第一段太长，没把重点放在后面论述自己的观点上？？

可以适当的减少不过问题不大。

p.s.还有个问题，需不需要提前在30分钟结束前按“next ”的按钮保存阿？还是时间走完了之后他会自动保存，不用手动保存的阿？确认一下，这样如果多余时间我就可以专心检查了...

不需要，考试的时候自动保存的。

谢谢，欢迎拍砖~~：）

还要说一次真的很不错，赞一个！

再次提醒改标题。因为你时间比较紧，本来是应该等你改了标题才给你看的呵呵。

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-6-14 20:51:08编辑过]

happyfish0517

谢谢JJ，标题改了...可惜我时间不多了，还有两周上考场了...假以时日和练习...我尽量！！谢谢鼓励！~

P.S. and in fact anyone could not assert that he or she never faulty purchase something.

本来这句我以为faulty可以做副词的，改成faultily可以吗？？

judydongxueni

呵呵，faulty好象不可以做副词所以改一下应该比较好吧。已经可以了，不用假以时日了。