angela的写作贴~~板砖神马的随便上哈

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angela的写作贴~~板砖神马的随便上哈

Aaaaaaangela

7.16
With the rapid development of modern society, the ways people dress have varied strikingly. It is against this background that a considerably fierce controversy has arisen as to whether the way a person dresses is a good indication of his/her personality or character. An extraordinarily large number of people maintain the perspective that how a person dresses reflects his or her personality or character. Nevertheless, from my personal point of view, the way a person dresses can not be used as a good indication of his or her personality or character, for how a person dresses can be influenced more by the situation, the mood or an individual’s financial condition, rather than his or her own personality or character.

First and foremost, the way a person dresses may be an adjustment to a specific situation, not a reflection of the individual’s personality. For example, at a wedding ceremony, men are supposed to wear suit to look formal and women wear dresses to show their elegance. These are the some of the wedding customs. If someone is in casual wear, he or she will look weird. But the fact that people wear suit and dresses does not necessarily mean they are all as formal and as rigid on a ceremony as they actually are in everyday life. In the light of this statement, the way a person dresses is not a good indication of his or her personality or character.

Moreover, how people dress may reflect their mood instead of their personalities or characters. For example, my friend Jim once got a bad grade on his final examination and got a few harsh words from his teacher. He was so depressed and sad that when he got home, he had no mood to try on his new clothes and kept wearing the same uniform which was supposed to be washed a few days ago. When I went to comfort him, I saw him in a bad shape. The uniform was dirty and untidy, which made him looked totally different from the happy and optimistic boy he used to be. After a long conversation with me, he finally pulled himself together and became energetic again. A few hours later, after he did a change, he was totally different again. From this example, it is not hard to conclude that the way a person dresses is not a good indication of his or her personality or character, because how a person dresses may be influenced by his or her mood. Just because Jim wears untidily does not mean he is a lazy and pessimistic person. He is probably just in a bad mood.

Last but not least, how a person dresses is more likely to be influenced by his or her financial state rather than his or her personality or character. People can not buy fancy dresses unless they can afford them. We can not come to the conclusion that someone has a bad taste in clothing just because he is not in a proper suit, because he probably just can not afford a suit. By the same token/For the same reason, the fact that a person is well-dressed does not mean that he has fine taste.

Due to the above statements, the way a person dresses cannot be regarded as a good indication of his or her personality or character, just like the old saying goes, do not judge a book by its cover. The way a person dresses can be affected by the situation, the mood or his/her financial state.

Aaaaaaangela

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most importantproblems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime.

With the increasing development of our society, there are numerous problem occur in our daily life, such as the crisis of nuclear, the racial discrimination, the shortage of source and so on. As far as I am concerned, there is no possibility for us to solve all of the most important problems within our lifetime. But, I do believe some of them can be settled before us dead. There
are several reasons to explain my view.  

First and foremost, some problems like the limitation of sources are hard to be solved. It still has a long way to go. The shortage of water, food is hard to be solved now. Because in this area, scientists are new to the game what means we do not evolved a high efficient method. A recent survey, conducted by Sina.com, China’s largest portal website, offered a worldwide report about how many people in the world are suffering the starving now. The result really shocked me; over 69% of people are bearing the pain of lacking food. What more, there are 5% of people in the world are dying because of the starving. And only 26% of people have enough food. Accordingly, it is little possible for us to solve the problem like this within our lifetime.
On the contrary, there still exist some matters we can solve within our lifetime. The type of the problems of crisis of nuclear or the racial discrimination is totally different from the former issue I have mentioned. What the key to solve these problems is human’s thought, not connecting to the science. Only we should do is to influence the people. Advancing the comprehension among people, countries, and ethnicities is of great importance. Although there still a lot of way to go, I do believe this goal of peace can be achieved within our lifetime.
About all of the factors I have discussed above, we can comparatively draw the conclusion that we can not solve all of the problems affecting our society now, however, we can solve some of them.

daisyの小夢想

7.11
Do children should(Should children) do the similar jobs like their parents? Is it beneficial for children to choose those jobs? Can those job help children to achieve success? (If the children do take such jobs, will they have a better chance of success?)My answer is no! (I feel skeptical about such possibilities of making achievements on our career path.)

First and foremost, we can not deny that doing the resembling job make children’s career easier at the beginning and promotion faster (make children start easier at the beginning and get promotion faster). However, it is myopic(short-sighted). Only doing the interesting job(父母的job就不interesting吗?),(不能有逗号) can we have the(a) bright future, or(Otherwise) it will bring endless excruciation and torment(高端词~). I’ll take my brother Jim as an example. Jim is(was) born in a family of doctors. And when he was a child, my uncle and aunt always educated him to be a doctor like them. On the countryside, Jim was interested in Mathematics, and thought to be a doctor(being a doctor) is boring. After the college entrance examination, he was forced to choose the medicine as his discipline(major). After he graduated from university, he became a doctor. It was easy for him to find a job for the influence of his parents. However, he suffered a lot of torment both mentally and physically, as he did not like this job. As far as I am concerned, there is more possibility for people to success when they do their interested things(do the jobs that they are interested in). And there is no doubt that Jim would be more success(successful) if he choose math(math不是job呀, mathematician?) as his job at the beginning.

Furthermore, a recent survey, conducted by Sina.com, China’s largest portal website, offered a worldwide report about how many people success(suceed) through doing his interesting job. The result (greatly) shocked me a lot. Over 69% of the voters claimed that they were success(successful) because of doing their own interesting jobs which brought them passion and propulsion(motivation) (the reason why they make great achievements is that they do what they like with passion and motivation). And only 13% of the voter maintained that doing the similar jobs like parents helped them in their career, and of course it is including(includes)those similar jobs were exactly their interesting jobs(the amount includes those whose interesting jobs are exactly similar jobs with their parents). Accordingly, a bright future is not determined by the contemporary(temporary) power at the beginning, and it needs a continue(continuous) motion(motivation/efforts).

We have to facing(face) numerous choosing(decision making) in our lifetime, (and) selecting a perfect job is one of that. And from all have mentioned above, we can draw the conclusion that it is good for children to do their own interested jobs(do what interests/ captivates/appeals to them), which can bring us(them) a bright future.

第一个例子很不错，细节丰富。语言上有比较多的小错误。加油噢~~

Aaaaaaangela

Do children should do the similar jobs like their parents? Is it beneficial for children to choose those jobs? Can those job help children to achieve success? My answer is no!

First and foremost, we can not deny that doing the resembling job make children’s career easier at the beginning and promotion faster. However, it is myopic. Only doing the interesting job, can we have the bright future, or it will bring endless excruciation and torment. I’ll take my brother Jim as an example. Jim is born in a family of doctors. And when he was a child, my uncle and aunt always educated him to be a doctor like them. On the countryside, Jim was interested in Mathematics, and thought to be a doctor is boring. After the college entrance examination, he was forced to choose the medicine as his discipline. After he graduated from university, he became a doctor. It was easy for him to find a job for the influence of his parents. However, he suffered a lot of torment both mentally and physically, as he did not like this job. As far as I am concerned, there is more possibility for people to success when they do their interested things. And there is no doubt that Jim would be more success if he choose math as his job at the beginning.

Furthermore, a recent survey, conducted by Sina.com, China’s largest portal website, offered a worldwide report about how many people success through doing his interesting job. The result shocked me a lot. Over 69% of the voters claimed that they were success because of doing their own interesting jobs which brought them passion and propulsion. And only 13% of the voter maintained that doing the similar jobs like parents helped them in their career, and of course it is including those similar jobs were exactly their interesting jobs. Accordingly, a bright future is not determined by the contemporary power at the beginning, and it needs a continue motion.

We have to facing numerous choosing in our lifetime, selecting a perfect job is one of that. And from all have mentioned above, we can draw the conclusion that it is good for children to do their own interested jobs, which can bring us a bright future.

Aaaaaaangela

前几天一直出去旅游了，所以没有看见，嘿嘿，下次有机会再一起互改吧，一起提高哦

kchszy061ban

多谢angela童鞋的辛苦修改，你在武汉我就请你吃冰镇西瓜。嘿嘿。来武汉也可以哈。

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Children are country’s future. In modern society, it is becoming a ticklish problem about how to raise a child. Parents are always holding two opposite opinions about a controversial issue of whether they should encourage their children to do their work themselves without any help. Some opponents claim that it is of necessity of parents to help their children to do their work because especially in china there are too many children need help , or they can not finish their work, while some proponents champion the rival idea that in today’s society, with the intense  competition, there is a tendency that doing work independently is a ability that everyone should have, especially for children, so parents should encourage their children to do their work independently. I definitely support the latter choice with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.

First and foremost, let’s get down the fundamental and agree that nowadays the ability of independence is one of most dominant power in a lot of realms. And we can feel that this kind of ability is of importance. Therefore, if parents have no inclination to formation the ability of independence of their children, their children will be out of date and to be failures(failed) sooner or later. At least it seems to one of my classmates, for instantce, lacks of this kind of ability. She lived with her parents before go to college to study. And her parents planned everything for her, both learning and live. And she just followed what her parents said. However, when she was admitted to a university, she left her parents; she became awkward and didn’t know how to plan her life. At the end of that semester, she even didn’t pass the courses. And now she is suspended from school because of she can’t suit the independent phenomenon situation or environment?. In all, the quantity of independence is significant.

Furthermore, not only can children acquire the method to absorb new skills but also can build the qualities, such as self-support, self-confidence and critical thinking (by what?). Perhaps during the childhood, many of the qualities that the children have can not influence their life obviously. But once children grow up and become adults, and in that new platform, all of these qualities can help them to be successful.

In conclusion, that all parents should encourage their children to do work independently. It will enhance their children both mentally and physically. It is fairly clear that the increasing number of talented person can be created in our country with the ability of independence.

整体不错的说，还好了，呵呵，字数够，段落也不错。稍加改进，会很好。另外一点就是可以的使用长句不是很好额，会造成误解。

Aaaaaaangela

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently.

Children are country’s future. In modern society, it is becoming a ticklish problem about how to raise a child. Parents are always holding two opposite opinions about a controversial issue of whether they should encourage their children to do their work themselves without any help. Some opponents claim that it is of necessity of parents to help their children to do their work because especially in china there are too many children need help , or they can not finish their work, while some proponents champion the rival idea that in today’s society, with the intense  competition, there is a tendency that doing work independently is a ability that everyone should have, especially for children, so parents should encourage their children to do their work independently. I definitely support the latter choice with the intensive purpose and substantial reasons.
First and foremost, let’s get down the fundamental and agree that nowadays the ability of independence is the one of most dominant power in a lot of realms and we can feel that this kind of ability is of importance. Therefore, if parents have no inclination to formation the ability of independence of their children, their children will be out of date and to be failures sooner or later. At least it seems to one of my classmates, for instant, lacks of this kind of ability. She lived with her parents before go to college to study. And her parents planned everything for her, both learning and live. And she just followed what her parents said. However, when she was admitted to a university, she left her parents; she became awkward and didn’t know how to plan her life. At the end of that semester, she even didn’t pass the courses. And now she is suspended from school because of she can’t suit the independent phenomenon. In all, the quantity of independence is significant.
Furthermore, not only can children acquire the method to absorb new skills but also can build the qualities, such as self-support, self-confidence and critical thinking. Perhaps during the childhood, many of the qualities that the children have can not influence obviously. But once children grow up and become adults, and in that new platform, all of these qualities can help them to be success.
In conclusion, that all parents should encourage their children to do work independently. It will enhance their children both mentally and physically. It is fairly clear that the increasing number of talented person can be created in our country with the ability of independence.

包子不包子

Since the tremendous development of modern society, the pressure of people is increasing seriously. Facing the intense competition, people have to work harder. It seems that they do not have spare time to stay with their families, without mentioning taking care of them. Compared to former, people who choose to live in countryside have more time to get on spend with their families.however Is it means that people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families? As far as I am concerned, this issuestatement is incorrect. My reasons are as follows.

First and foremost, there are two problems, which people who live in modern society concerned most. One is the live condition, the other is education. It is doesn’t exist that people who will not get sick. Moreover, it is obvious that hospitals in cities are better than which in rural areas. And because of the difference condition of hospital, people who live in cities have the stronger bodies. As for education, there is still some way for the schools which lived in countryside to go. In cities, schools are equipped with the most advanced multimedia. And myriad excellent teachers are in those schools. All of these consist of a perfect environment for children.It there is more possibility for children who graduate from these schools to success. Consequently, people who live in cities can take care of their families better.

However, there is still exist people claim that the terrible environment in cities is hard to bear, or even make people to death. Indeed, we can not ignore this point. We admit that compared with rural areas, the smell of rivers in cities are horrible smell, and the air is also not fresh. However, we are now seeking method to solve it.them We believe, all of these problem can be solved in a period of time.

Of all I have mentioned above, we can draw a conclusion that people who live in cities can take care of their families better compared to people who live in countryside.

第二段包含了两个论点 分两段展开写吧
句型在多边一些 疑问 排比 倒装什么的都用上~
其他蛮好