还有20天~！沈小面不要一直面~~~！求狠拍!

9.2 : It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Do you agree?

In modern society, the pace of modern life has been increasingly quick. People have to struggle to find their position in their lives, which means they will have a strong feeling of pressure. How will they deal with that? In which way they choose to relax? Well, some of them point that watching movie or reading a book is better than doing physical exercise. And I totally agree with them.

Relaxing by a movie or reading a book is a more effective way to help people get away from the pressure work life. If people watch an interesting movie or a book, all their attention will be on the plot or the story. They will imagine how the story develops and what the ending will be like. They will be so interested in it and have no time to think anything about your work, such as whether the project will be completed on time, or if the solutions they came up with are effective.

Another advantage of relaxing by a movie or reading a book is that they will not affected by the weather conditions and more safe. When it rains, they cannot have physical exercise outdoors, such as hiking, running or riding. But they can still stay in home and watch a movie or read a book.  In addition, they will not get hurt. According to Jilin Daily, a newspaper, 17 percent of people get hurt during physical exercise. It is really bad that they get hurt and cause the company loss profit. The boss will certainly get angry.

Last but not the least, watching a movie or reading a book helps people develop their skills as the same time they relax. There are a large amount of book or movies they can choose. If they want to improve their social ability, they can read a book or a movie on how to social with other, such as how to be generous, how to show kindness to coworkers. Relaxing doesn’t mean doing something meaningless, they can improve themselves in order to be more successful.

Obviously, all analysis supports my idea that relaxing by a movie or reading a book is better. Therefore, it is strongly recommended that people should relax themselves by reading a book or watching a movie.
写的时候比较困惑~一段里面写两个小的好处，A+1，A+2可不可以啊~ 第二段里面就写了两个小的优点~以为一个优点展开木有那么多~
而且这篇大的结构写的就是A的3点大的好处~是不是应该再最后一段写一些对立面B的不好之处~或者好的地方~这样会显得作者分析的比较全面？~

In modern society, the pace of modern life has been increasingly quick. People have to struggle to find their position in their lives, which means they will have a strong feeling of pressure. How will they deal with that? In which way they choose to relax? Well, the majority of people choose to do physical exercise, however other people think watching a movie or reading a book is a better approach. Personally, I agree with the latter.



Relaxing by a movie or reading a book is a more effective way to help people get away from the pressure of work life. If people watch an interesting movie or a book, all their attention will be on the plots or the story. They will imagine how the story develops and what the ending will be like while watching or reading it. They will be so absorbed in it and won't have time thinking anything about their works, for instance, whether the project will be completed on time, or if the solutions they came up with are productive.



Another advantage of relaxing by a movie or reading a book is that they will not affect by the weather conditions and they prevent themselves from injuries.When it rains, they cannot have physical exercises outdoors, for example, hiking, running or riding. But they can still stay in the home and watch a movie or read a book. In addition, they will not get hurt. According to Jilin Daily, a newspaper, 17 percent of people get hurt during physical exercise. It is really bad that they get hurt which causes the loss profit of companies. The boss will certainly get angry.



Last but not the least, watching a movie or reading a book helps people develop their skills at the same time they relax. There is a large amount of books or movies they can choose from. If they want to improve their social ability, they can read a book or a movie on how to socialize with other, such as how to be generous and how to show kindness to coworkers. Relaxing doesn't mean doing something meaningless. They can improve themselves in order to be more productive.



Obviously, all analysis supports my idea that relaxing with a movie or a book is better. Therefore, it is strongly recommended that people should relax themselves by reading a book or watching a movie.


弱弱的问了一下~是不是写的很烂......要肿么提高呢~貌似词汇太低级了~句子也不好~啊~~~~~~~~




Thank you ~!辛苦的给我改了一下~嘿嘿~