630二战托福~~必胜~~

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-6-4 16:00:18

512一战 g+f=24
考试的时候完全就不在状态
独立给了f都嫌ets给高了~~哈哈~~ 基本全是单句啊~~
二战一定要拿下托福~~
必须100+啊~~
一个要去读博士的姐纸伤不起呢~~
一推researches要做~~
加油吧~~

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-6-4 16:06:23

今儿个贴第一篇独立~~6月4日作业~~101203NA
这是512考前写过的~~改了改发了上来~~

When it comes to the issue that the role of parents during children completing their works, some people suggest that parents should let children alone when they do their assignments, while others maintain the opposite view. To agree or disagree with it is a matter of balancing between its pros and cons. In my point of view, I agree with the statement that parents should encourage their children do work alone rather than help them.

In the first place, the children may have deep impression when they do work independently. Children may face a lot of problems in school, and the best way to overcome them is to try their best to find answers. Only when children conquer these problems by themselves, can they have impression deeply and remember them for a long period of time. There is no better example than myself when I was in an elementary school. On day, our teacher taught us about the rule of multiplication table, and then she set up our some assignments about calculations. But when I met a question which is about to count 6*8, I forgot how to calculate it. However, I did not ask my parents for help. In contrast, I reviewed the whole multiplication table again and again. Finally, I figured it out. It was 48! Although I spent a whole night to remember this multiplication table, I thought it was worth because I conquer myself and it gave me a sense of achievement.

In addition, it can help us to cultivate our personalities .With the developing of global economy, we may face more competitors and more competitions. How can we deal with it? Suppose two people, both of them are graduated from the same famous university, take part in an interview. One of them is likely to make a decision directly and independently, but the other one is prefer to ask others for help. If you are a boss to pick up an employee, which one would you like to hire? It must be the first one, I think. Obviously, the personality of independent dealing with stuff has significant meaning in our life. It can not only help us to have a good job, but also help us to complete the work by ourselves better enjoy the advanced society.

Admittedly, sometimes we need our parents help, and our parents in turn should make the best of their experiences to help us. Our parents are full of experiences ranging from academic information such as history and biology to life experiences, like how to make a decision or how to keep healthy. For example, I asked my parents’ suggestions when I chosen my college major. It was an important decision to me because it determined what I would do and what I would learn for next four years. At first, my parents hoped me to pick up a major independently. But there were two majors, computer science and geosciences, which I was interested in most and I did not know which one is better. My father figured out each field which I might face to in the future. At last, I thought computer science was suitable for me because many companies were likely to hire computer programmers.

Personally speaking, considering the positive and negative effects of this issue, I think that the capability of independence has more outweigh. In different situations, though, parents should help their children to some work, the optimal approach, for parents, is to encourage their children to overcome the problems independently.

Crystaljoy · 发表于 2012-6-4 17:18:15

小a在大本营回复一下~参加今晚的对改吧~
规则都在写作小分队大本营首页~

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-6-4 17:37:35

小a在大本营回复一下~参加今晚的对改吧~
规则都在写作小分队大本营首页~

-- by 会员 Crystaljoy (2012/6/4 17:18:15)

噢啦嘻嘻~~谢啦~~

晨依Jacqueline · 发表于 2012-6-4 22:33:26

加油加油！

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-6-15 20:45:18

0615
110514ML作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future.
政府有机构，给学生判断
网络的发展
但是不管怎么简单，我们还是要有自己的critical thinking

Have you ever found more and more people take part in the civil servant examination? Have you ever found an increasing number of people send their resumes through the internet? Have you ever unconsciously found that citizens tend to pick up the career which the educational institution recommends? If so, you might deeply stand on my point that, nowadays, for modern citizens, it is much easier to identify a brighter career.

To begin with, the government plays an important role in helping its citizens to choose jobs. An educational institution, obviously, has this function. It is set because more and more people want to get advices from the professional consultors（consulters顾问） about jobs, which allow them to easy find careers in order to have successful futures. So, every year, the educational institution publishes a set of statistics about the employment rate on various kinds of jobs, such as a computer program designer or a biology teacher. Thus, thanks to the government, we can gain more information about types of careers.

From the perspective of advent of internet, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize that the importance of internet in the global development. On the internet, we can find many things. For example, if I have to send my resume to the PHMG Company, a famous accounting firm on my country, what I need to do before sending this e-mail is to searching the evaluation about this company from other netizen网友 who may be an employee in this firm. Therefore, I can find everything from it, such as how the condition of this firm, may I have a single room if I can be the member of this venture and so on.

Admittedly, if critical and independent thinking are ignored deliberately and accidently, it cannot be a sound identify whether I be able to find a secure jobs. No matter which types of jobs would have a brighter future, I still think we must choose the job which is fit for us or gaining personal satisfaction from it. However, this consideration will not make be deliver the vital points of my address because it could not be verified that it is difficult for people to choose job today, although more jobs are provided nowadays.

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that past people are easier to identify the jobs, considering both past and today’s situation, I still think modern people could choose successful career better in terms of the setting of an educational institution and the advent of internet.

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包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-6-16 09:36:40

Have you ever found more and more people take part in the civil servant examination? Have you ever found an increasing number of people send their resumes through the internet? Have you ever unconsciously found that citizens tend to pick up the career which the educational institution recommends? If so, you might deeply stand on my point that, nowadays, for modern citizens, it is much easier to identify a brighter career.
排比很好啊found出现三次可以换一下 notice discovery pay attention
To begin with, the government plays an important role in helping its citizens to choose jobs. An educational institution, obviously, has this function. It is set because more and more people want to get advices from the professional consultors（consulters顾问） about jobs, which allow them to ~~easy~~ find careers easily in order to have successful futures. So, every year, the educational institution publishes a set of statistics about the employment rate on various kinds of jobs, such as a computer program designer or a biology teacher. Thus, thanks to the government, we can gain more information about types of careers.
段末加上一句话总结吧点题
From the perspective of adventing of internet, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize ~~that~~ the importance of internet in the global development. On the internet, we can find many things具体些吧建议改成information and convenience. For example, if I have to send my resume to the PHMG Company, a famous accounting firm on my country, what I need to do before sending this e-mail is itto searching the evaluation about this company from other netizen网友 who may be an employee in this firm. Therefore, I can find almost 不能太绝对everything from it, such as how the condition of this firm, may I have a single room if I can be the member of this venture and so on.

Admittedly, if critical and independent thinking are ignored deliberately and accidently, it cannot be a sound identify whether I be am able to find a secure jobs. No matter which types of jobs would have a brighter future没看懂啊, I still think we must choose the job which is fit for us or gaining personal satisfaction from it. However, this consideration will not make be deliver the vital points of my address because it could not be verified that it is difficult for people to choose job today, although more jobs are provided nowadays.

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that past people are easier to identify the jobs, considering both past and today’s situation, I still think modern people could choose successful career better in terms of the setting of an educational institution and the advent of internet.

让步很恰当
思路逻辑非常好的学习学习~
句型可以多样些

lunating · 发表于 2012-6-16 11:31:57

小a亲，刚膜拜完你的6.15独立

立意很新颖，论据充分，尤其是最后一段Conclusion，相当perfect！

但是跟其他文章比较起来，可能就觉得站的角度不够高，不够多。

之前上过培训班，老师建议，写作文，可以从人类文明、社会政府、再到家庭个人这个思维来拓展。虽然我也没有深得真传，但是我在努力训练培养自己的思维，将狭隘自我的思维开拓舒展(我经常习惯在文中用We think/must....I think)。

我也有出国读博的打算，咱们可以一起研讨、奋进呐

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-6-17 21:30:08

小a亲，刚膜拜完你的6.15独立

立意很新颖，论据充分，尤其是最后一段Conclusion，相当perfect！

但是跟其他文章比较起来，可能就觉得站的角度不够高，不够多。

之前上过培训班，老师建议，写作文，可以从人类文明、社会政府、再到家庭个人这个思维来拓展。虽然我也没有深得真传，但是我在努力训练培养自己的思维，将狭隘自我的思维开拓舒展(我经常习惯在文中用We think/must....I think)。

我也有出国读博的打算，咱们可以一起研讨、奋进呐

-- by 会员 lunating (2012/6/16 11:31:57)

呵呵一起努力哈~~
我没上过辅导班但是看过老外的185
我看他们没说什么特别深奥的东西
虽然考过g 不过都忘光了哈哈
很多经验贴都说要从身边的小事说就可以了哈哈~~
以后经常来我这看看哈~~
我也去看你的~~

a273007862 · 发表于 2012-6-18 19:33:19

0618
大陆20101017 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise。
看书好
看电影好
运动不好
ps：写的很差劲，没有观点，想不出来啊~~
Have you found we could get asleep quickly if we read our favorite books? Have you ever discovery watching a comedy movie can help us get rid of bad moods? Have you even feel exhausted and exciting after doing some fierce games, such as a soccer game? If so, you might stand on my point that the better way to relax is watching a movie or reading a book full of imagination rather than doing physical exercise.

From the perspective of my own experience, I tend to reading Harry Potter, an English version book, before I go to bed because I am a sort ofintroverted girl. On one hand, reading books are my habit, on the other hand, it is fit for my personality- quiet, hating competition and also disliking the smell of sweat. In the book, there are full of sophisticated plots and full of imagination. Also, I can experience the actor-little harry potter- life, which I have not suffer this forever and ever, such as attacking the evil by magic. All of these give me a sense of relaxation. Thus, reading book is one way to relax myself.

Watching movies also give us another way to relax ourselves. I am always overwhelmed by my study stuff, like preparing the presentation every Monday or biology homework every day. Thus, I like to find a way which can not only let me feel relaxed, but also allow me to attain some information and knowledge. Obviously, watching movie is this kind of thing. During the movie, I can see the beautiful scenery, know a romantic love story or even could imitate the way they speak properly. So I can kill the bird with one stone and take advantage of my time.

Even though doing some exercise, like jogging or walking, can improve my speed, strength and flexibility, the feeling of exhausted and the smell of swear always make me frustrated. I would spend more time on recovering my energy and emotion. This is needless to say it could relax myself.

Personally speaking, even though maybe everyone has its own dictionaries of relaxing ways, I, considering both the positive and negative about movies, books and physical exercise, still think reading books and watching movies are fittest way for me about relaxation in terms of personal experience and personalities.

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