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[作文互改] 第一次写issue 不是很有头绪 也不知道逻辑怎么样 希望能得到大家的帮助啊!!!!!

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发表于 2012-4-17 10:49:58 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
题库51 远大目标和短期目标
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1诚然有一个远大的现实的目标对年轻人来说能起到一定的激励作用会促使他们朝着一个正确的方向努力从而获得成功  ex:Mandela
2但是直接名誉和认可比远大的目标更能让年轻人看到实现的希望,能让人不断地获得力量去坚持并且实现目标,获得认可 ex:Jobs
3而且远大的理想实际上也是有很多的短期的目标组成的 量变才能引起质变  ex:罗马不是一天建成的
拓展:不同的人有不同的性格 可以根据自身情况来选择给自己树立长期目标还是短期目标
51.
 Withthe explosive development of science and technology, people tend to spend moretime
and energy dealing with their presentworks, in order to better live in the modern society.
When it comes to whether youngsters shouldpursue long-term goals or immediate fame and
recognition, there are always a host ofdifferent opinions held by different individuals from
different areas. Should the long-term goalsreally be encouraged than immediate fame and
recognition? Admittedly, a long-term goalabsolutely could motivate youngsters to devote
themselves into reaching the goal as wellas acquiring success. However, immediate fame and
recognition could set a more accessiblegoal than long-term mode which can continuously
give strength to young people who arepursuing their goals. More over, long-term goals are
consist of many short-term goals, only byachieving a series of short-term goals can youngster
s finally access to their long-termgoals.  
Admittedly, young people could get motivations from long-term goals thatis realistic and
significant. It could also give a right wayto youngsters who are confused to their lives
so that they may achieve significant thingswhich may influence human or society. As is
known to all, Mandela whose lifelongdedication is to fight against racial oppression in South Africa
, finally was awarded1993 Nobel Peace Prize for his efforts to antiracism and antiapartheid struggle.No one could deny that a long-term goal leading a final success.
However, immediate fame and recognition could make youngsters reallyaccess to their goals
not just dreaming for a far achievementwhich is so hard to realize. Farther more, youngsters who
have a short-term goal could constantly bemotivated by achieving each short goal. For
example, Steve Jobs who never stopdesigning new product one by one, from the ipod to ipad, every step helps himto gain fame and recognition, as the result, he has more confidence and
strength for insisting on his magnificentcareer. Consequently, pursuing immediate fame and
recognition is much beneficial than settinglong-term goal.
 Inaddition, whatever the long-term is, how great it is, it all consists ofseveral or
a large number of short-goals, unlesssucceeding in the every pieces you could reach the
final goal. "Rome
was not built in a day" is an oldproverb. just trying to seek a long-termgoal without pursuing immediate fame andrecognition is analogous with the building of Rome
in a day. Short-term plans must be stepstoward longer-term objectives. Only when
individuals succeed in achieving short-termcareer goals are they able to advance to their long-term
career goals.
 Insum, I concede the speaker's claim that long-term goals could encourage youngsterspursue
a self-realization in their lives while itis too far from fame and recognition, that may cause
individuals lose their energy andmotivation so as to abandon their original objective. additionally,
enough quantitative change causesqualitative change, accomplishing every short-term goal ensure
the success of thelong-term goal. After all, different individuals has different characters thatis the standard to choose whether pursue long-term goals or immediate fame andrecognition is more suitable.





求指点!!!!!谢谢
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沙发
发表于 2012-4-17 11:17:29 | 只看该作者
are confused to???
第一段,有必要精简下,太长了点
嗯,关于你的第三点,可以这么说,大的长远的目标必须细化具体化,成为可行的方案,才可以达到,否则就是空想,白日做梦。例子最好的一个我觉得是施瓦辛格吧
第一次写,你的提纲的思路很好,想的到位,继续努力
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-4-17 11:21:56 | 只看该作者
恩 谢谢了 因为第一次写 写的超级慢 很苦恼啊 语言也不太好 还得接着积累素材和好的语言
地板
发表于 2012-4-18 11:10:44 | 只看该作者
恩 谢谢了 因为第一次写 写的超级慢 很苦恼啊 语言也不太好 还得接着积累素材和好的语言
-- by 会员 nemonicis (2012/4/17 11:21:56)

第一次写,都会感觉很生涩,不好下笔,坚持写几篇,会慢慢找到感觉的
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