AA010 ,大家看看我写的,行不?

In this argument ,the author concludes that the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.To support this opinion , the author points out that the group of students who did not protest is far more numerous.In addition, he also reasons that it is more representative of the state`s college students than are the protesters.At first glance,the argument seems somehow appealing,while a close examination reveals how groundless it is.We do not to look very far to see the invalidity of the argument.The  argument is  problematic for  the following reasons.

  In the first  place , the arguer assumes that the 12000 students who either stayed on campus or left for winter break were not concerned about their education.However,the author do not provide any evidence to support the assumption.The fact that 200 students took time and effort to traveled to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs does not have anything to do with the opinion of the remaining 12000. It is highly possible that the 12000 students are also displeased with the proposed cuts,but too busy to complain. Lacking complete information about the attitudes of all students,the recommendation is completely unfounded.

   In the second place, the evidence the author provide is insufficent to reach the conlusion that the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students. One example is logically unfounded to establish a conlusion.The fact that only 200 students from Waymarsh State College traveled to the state capitol building to protest is not a good indicator of the main trends,unless it can be shown that students  from Waymarsh State College are representitiveof all students. It is possible that students in other colleges are satisfied with the proposed cuts and do not show any resentment.In fact, in face of  such limited evidence ,the recommendation is highly suspected.

  To sum up,it is imprudent for the author to conclude that the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.Because the evidence cited in the argument is too weak to lend support to what the author claims.Tomake the argument more convincing,the author should provide evidence that the 12000 who did not travel to complain were not happy with the proposed cuts and the students from the Waymarsh college are representitive of all students in the states.Moreover,I would suspend my judument about the credibility of the recommendation,until the argument provides concrete evidence to rule out all the possibilities I mentioned.

还有差不多一个星期考,大家帮忙看看模版的痕迹是否过重.这篇只找了两个错误,好象有点短.要求好象要400个字.还有个白痴问题, 段首第一个字空几个字符啊?

文章的题目呢？？麻烦贴一下吧，大家都看起来方便，顺便标题改一下，据版规要写成argu: AAxxx或者issue: AIxxx  xxx表示题号！

嘿嘿，我以前也犯过这样贴错标题的毛病！

The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.

“This past winter, 200 students from Waymarsh State College traveled to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs. The other 12,000 Waymarsh students evidently weren’t so concerned about their education: they either stayed on campus or left for winter break. Since the group who did not protest is far more numerous, it is more representative of the state’s college students than are the protesters. Therefore the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.”

不好意思,下次一定记得

以下是引用夏麦在2005-8-11 18:25:00的发言：

The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.

“This past winter, 200 students from Waymarsh State College traveled to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs. The other 12,000 Waymarsh students evidently weren’t so concerned about their education: they either stayed on campus or left for winter break. Since the group who did not protest is far more numerous, it is more representative of the state’s college students than are the protesters. Therefore the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.”

In this argument ,the author concludes that the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.To support this opinion , the author points out that the group of students who did not protest is far more numerous.In addition, he also

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reasons that it is more representative of the state`s college students than are the protesters.At   the呢？first glance,the argument seems somehow appealing,while a close examination reveals how groundless it is.We do not   have呢？ to look very far to see the invalidity of the argument.The  argument is  problematic for  the following reasons.

  In the first  place , the arguer assumes that the 12000 students who either stayed on campus or left for winter break were not concerned about their education.However,the author do not provide any evidence to support the assumption.The fact that 200 students took time and effort to traveled to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs does not have anything to do with the opinion of the remaining 12000. It is highly possible that the 12000 students are also displeased with the proposed cuts,but too busy to complain. Lacking complete information about the attitudes of all students,the recommendation is completely unfounded.

   In the second place, the evidence the author provide is insufficent to reach the conlusion that the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students. One example is logically unfounded to establish a conlusion.The fact that only 200 students from Waymarsh State College traveled to the state capitol building to protest is not a good indicator of the main trends,unless it can be shown that students  from Waymarsh State College are representitiveof all students. It is possible that students in other colleges are satisfied with the proposed cuts and do not show any resentment.In fact, in face of  such limited evidence ,the recommendation is highly suspected.

  To sum up,it is imprudent for the author to conclude that the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.Because the evidence cited in the argument is too weak to lend support to what the author claims.Tomake the argument more convincing,the author should provide evidence that the 12000 who did not travel to complain were not happy with the proposed cuts and the students from the Waymarsh college are representitive of all students in the states.Moreover,I would suspend my judument about the credibility of the recommendation,until the argument provides concrete evidence to rule out all the possibilities I mentioned.

还有差不多一个星期考,大家帮忙看看模版的痕迹是否过重.这篇只找了两个错误,好象有点短.要求好象要400个字.还有个白痴问题, 段首第一个字空几个字符啊?

语法上的问题不给你一个一个找了因为都是很不应该错的小毛病。建议要留两三分钟检查。

结构上建议还是五段式最后一段不要写那么长把时间留出来写三个逻辑错误或者是把你的第一个逻辑错误拆成两个。可以搜索一下别人的文章，这篇写的人特别多的说。

每段开头不要空格，段和段之间空行。

谢谢JUDY JJ指点.