我的几篇作文，经过美国同事改过，给大家借鉴

在ＣＤ上结识了很多朋友，我第二次考Ｔ，作文５分，第一次是４分．虽然不高，愿把几篇由美国同事改过的文章（包括改动过程）放上来供大家参考．本来又好几篇，但我电脑坏过一次就全没了，这几篇是刚从邮箱里找到的．

其实我考试时感觉特别不好，想必又会在作文上失利．虽然用了三个实例，但句子比较生硬．我想得５分的原因有：

１．篇幅比较长；

２．形头比较顺，但结尾很烂；

３．实例比较多．

正在写头疼的论文，感觉一关比一关难．努力

祝各位好运！！

it seems nobody answers me, so i have to sit the first place. I see Likui here, really thanks Likui and Guandream who helped me a lot last year when i prepared for the first exam.

I think when you read the amended paper by the American guy, you can learn the different ways of American thinking. So it really has some value to read it.

Thanks a lot!

Good luck in future!

Thanks! I appreciated you shared your composer with us.

Hopefully to have a real conversation with you soon. Good Luck!

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all other essays were lost because my computer was attached by virsus. Really sorry

Thank you for sharing.

I am worrying about TWE, which is the major reason for me to re-take TOFEL. I got 4.5 on 5T. I hope to get at least 5 on 10T, and today is my first day to start preparation.So I really appreciate your effort to help others, such as me, to improve our writing ability.