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10. "When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Ever from our childhood, we were taught to believe that there is no free meal in the world, which completely veto for the luck in deciding whether one can succeed. It is undeniable that hard work plays a considerable role in achieving one's success. However, in some situations, luck cannot be just disregarded.

To begin with, hard work itself is really a significant factor and also the final deciding condition. Consider all the celebrities and tycoons, barely any one of them gained the big achievement and sound reputation without putting a lot of endeavor. As the old saying goes, all man borns equal. So in order to achieve a tremendous goal, one must make best use of time and improve the weaknesses.

However, hardship is not the single aspect in deciding the success. Thus luck may act as the irreplaceable alternative. Luck does not mean that one can just sit still, waiting for fame and money coming automatically.. Instead, luck can be sometimes translated as chance. While chance is not something that dooms to give you, it only occurs to someone who has preparations. Take Panasonic for example, without careful attitude and responsibility towards their customers always being bared in mind, Panasonic cannot grow from a small compliance fixing shop to a world top 500 company. It can be said that Panasonic happens to meet the lucky time when Japan's economic boosted, but without certain preparations, Panasonic cannot be it as today.

So, as a result, what we should do is to combine to two aspects into one. Firstly, we should make good endeavor. No pains, no gains. Despite ponderous burden on our shoulders and endless time which otherwise can be used to play, one can find pleasure in working and challenging the ventures especially when one finds his improvement little by little. Further, one should create conditions to find luck, which needs a strong ability of innovation, a acute sense of market and a broad interpersonal network. Owning this, you will find luck is not rare, instead, it will comes at you at any time.  

In conclusion, hard work should go on to be taught to the small children as the only factor that can make one succeed, but as a adult, one has to concede luck, itself, cannot be overlooked anyway.

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we were taught to believe that there is no free meal in the world, which completely veto for the luck in deciding whether one can succeed.

我觉得gmat语法中说,which不能指代前面一句话,只能指代某个词. it means to veto for the luck in deciding ......

So in order to achieve a tremendous goal, one must make best use of time and improve the weaknesses.

one好象有点不对, 好象没有指代, 换成 the wise people is supposed to make .....

文章写得不是很好。真的。怎么感觉像李笑来的？

我这样解释吧。

1。你观点真不明确。题目这样问：你同意不同意幸运和成功一点关系都没有？

你的回答：1段，大家平等，应该是努力才对。2段，幸运有时算机会，也很重要。举出松下的例子。3段，更像结尾。

其实写这种观点作文的方法是什么？

1。一定要观点明确。起码不是我也可以1，也可以2（1 2 代表观点）。

2。每一段都要支撑你所说出的观点。

拿这个分析你的文章，先不说语法或者用词，文章本身不是很明确。你觉得运气有用，就应该写出来。而不是在第一段中说大家都要努力。

2段中举出了一个例子，不错。可是你举出例子是干嘛阿？是为了服务你说明运气在某种情况下代表了机会。你要去诠释这个例子，而不是让读者去理解。每个读者有不同的理解，你只有例子而无解释就算是白举了。

3段更像中文议论文中的一个结尾，说我们如何理解努力和运气。可是这个不是阿。所以这么写是不合适的。可以说说还有什么情况下运气是重要的，比努力重要。

一般写都是遵循魔版，这个不是俗套的开头用什么句子，结尾怎么废话。可是一两句又说不清楚。基本都是这样。5段

1 开头 2 3 4 中间 5 结尾。

其实开头结尾很重要。很多人开头结尾和中间的文章不联系，放到哪里都能用。这种是ets 最不喜欢的。不论你是换一个词，甚至不换，只要你提到了，就比用魔版强一个登次。

2 3 4 中间部分，也像一个小作文，有开头，中间，结尾。例子很重要。例子不会自己说话，要你来说明这个例子到底证明了什么。

其实用词都不要太追求，用不好反而失分。不如先抓基本的东西。

其实这一个题目本身也不是特别好写，因为中国人对于运气的理解不太一样，就感觉是蒙。而老外可能能想的多一点。

楼上的哥们说的真好, 我觉得他说在每个例子后面加上一个注释是值得学习的, 我以后写作文时就在例子后加个注释, 说明例子的作用