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1. Situation: specify what are the difficulties, uncertainties and risks

2. How did you handle/turn around this?  Address each of the issue you highlighted in the first paragraph.

3. Indicate why it is a significant achievement and the lesson learnt

try use the star model:

S = Situation - describe a situation. This is a where you will set up the plot of your story for the listener. Give a brief outline of a situation you faced and your role.

T = Task - What was the task you had to accomplish? This is your goal or the hoped outcome.

A = Action - What did you do to accomplish the task? Describe what happened and how you attacked the problem through to resolution.

R = Results - What was the result of your actions?