5.19第一篇作文 兄弟姐妹拍拍哈,谢拉

大家最近一定看惯了考位了东东,给大家换换口味,请给意见啊,太谢谢拉(这是我一战的作文题,再来一次)

Is it more important to study in the subject with interest than the subjects which prepare you for future job?

    Some realists may confirm to their bible that all things should go to achieve the aim of getting a good job, so they always pick up the subjects with practical skills. However, from a distinctive point of view, I will definitely choose the opposite side because of my belief. There is no doubt that anyone has his own principles including me, and I will illustrate mine to you.

    The most important point I want to emphasize and let you know is that everything should go to the goal of maximizing our own value. As the bible says, there are two happy things in human life. One is to find what myself love, another is to use the interest to earn money. Using myself as an example, when I was a freshman, I was majored in economics, which is a hot course. But I cannot find any interest in it and I did quite badly. So I changed my major to math that now I want to devote my whole life to. When I am involved in the formulas and calculations, a deep enjoyment can arise. What's more, I wish I could use my mathematic knowledge to do something to change human lives.

  In addition, we can not make the assumption that the subject we are interested in is not the one that could earn our money. I cannot help thinking of the example of Bill Gates. During the school years, Bill did quite well in the computer courses because of the deep interest in it. Finally, we all know the consequences that he uses the computer technical to change the world and make himself the richest man. All facts come to the conclusion that sometimes the goal of realizing the interest and winning wealth doesn't conflict.

    Admittedly, without a good job or high salary, we cannot meet basic needs of life. We can see a lot of instances that famous artists die in poor situation. However, don't you think it is more pity to involve in the career that we don't belong to and that doesn't give us pleasure? I can still remember a famous person's saying: when young, people should spend more time to seek their true love or they will waste the whole life to invaluable things.

     In sum, maybe sometimes conflicts don’t exist when we choose the subject with interest. Even they do, we should stick to our own belief.  Remember, all roads lead to Rome and all efforts lead to your true interest.

原来这个就是你的啊，我刚有看．

觉得，开头的句子太简单了，不能体现你的水品．你想有多少人在用这种开头结尾啊？

自己总结一些好的句子吧

 I will definitely choose the opposite side because of my belief. －－你这样说太没说服力了。你的belief是什么呢？还是说明白比较好．

The most important point I want to emphasize and let you know is that －－这样的开头就很好．后面也用这种．

用Admittedly回旋一下余地很好．但是考试看具体题目，不一定都可以用上．

可以再多写一点．

结尾总结一下你的观点比较好．说In sum太单薄了．

不错，框架出来了．总结一下句子和摸班就ＯＫ了

哈哈

加油啊～

ETS对我一战作文的评价

不知道还有这个问题么？？

语言是不是太简单了？论点还不够展开？

谢谢jessieagerMM，期待你的经验哈。

能否给个摸板参照一下，毕竟我们也是一个家族的哈，谢谢拉