作文想拿6分的请过来

Snazzy

Hey, guys, I am looking for those who want to purpue highest score in AWA to practise writting long and difficult sentences, which use diverse structures rather than simple sentences to express a complecated idea,  to prepare us to be able to use 30 minutes to write a comparatively good article which， without the template as long as 200 words,  is of course worth 6.

I just had an AWA lesson yesterday and got a wonderful idea that 6 is only awarded to those articles which are well structured, articulately organized, beautifully worded and most of all, not least, difficultly written so that the e-rator and human-grader both have hard time to understand well given the what they say 2 minutes, resulting in the highest score, great contribution, although not the only factor, to accomplish our goal regarding getting into the schools we want.

有意参加练习长句，难句的请回复（用长句，难句）Let's improve writing and have fun together!!!

[此贴子已经被作者于2004-1-12 1:50:04编辑过]

kid

Since AWA,which is the abravity of Analitical Writing Assessment,causes me most headache in my process of preparing for gmat,I,a poor student bad at grammer(structur,as what u mentioned the most important in writing..),spelling,the prevailing flawof chinese students, and vocabulary,the base of writing an excellent artical,desiring eagerly to improve my ability to write a 6 score artical,once saw ur essay,as the 1st replier,decided in a flash to join in ur group,which throught me a light that would help me to overcome my shortcome in taking GMAT,though I don't know what should I exactly do once I join ur group and whether anyone can understand my this disgusting long and problematic sentence....forgive me...hehe~

Snazzy

Bravo~~~~ Welcome, Kid.
It's good to have you, the first one who volunteered to appeal to my suggestion to create an environment in which the participants can significantly improve writting that, as it becomes your concern, has been bothering me a lot since my English should not be that bad at all, to practise AWA in a way that we try to correct sentences for each other, a good method to help in writing, so that we know where the mistakes are, why our sentences are less effective and how we can make them better by adding some fancy words, which are rarely used in my AWA, reversing some structures and thinking and writing in an English way to achieve our goal --- to get full score in GMAT, an important part which is probably weighed 40% or even more, which we surely don't want to get screwed by,  in the process of our application.

Please see my correction for your sentence and tell me what you think.

以下是引用kid在2004-1-12 0:28:00的发言：
Since AWA,which is the abravity(it's called ACRONYM) of Analitical Writing Assessment,causes me most headache in my process of preparing for gmat,I,a poor(DO YOU MEAN YOU HAVE NO MONEY, OTHERWISE IT SHOULD BE positioned after student, parallel to BAD) student bad at grammer(structure,as(AS should be moved) what u mentioned the most important in writing..),spelling,the prevailing flaw of chinese students, and vocabulary,the base(or, FOUNDATION) of writing an excellent artical,desiring eagerly to improve my ability to write a 6 score artical(ARTICLE),once saw ur essay,as the 1st replier,decided in a flash to join in(NO NEED TO HAVE IT HERE) ur group,which throught me a light(DIDN'T UNDERSTAND) that would help me to (NO NEED)overcome my shortcome(SHORTCOMING?) in taking GMAT,though I don't know what should I(I SHOULD) exactly do once I join ur group and whether anyone can understand my this disgusting long and problematic sentence....forgive me...hehe~

kid

it's the longest(thus most disgusting) sentence i've made since born...i worried about myself a lot...what about other part?i'll start my preparation in 2 days later...
   do u really think long sentence work?!

joice

having fun already.
but:
long = 6?

kid

so as my teacher taught us:if u wanna write a longer article(not cal...hehe...thx ,snazzy,i'v been write "cal"for over 5 yrs...),just use"the United States of America " instead of "the states".it seems senseless...

Snazzy

以下是引用joice在2004-1-12 2:14:00的发言：
having fun already.
but:
long = 6?

Well, not necessarily, it may be naive to believe that long sentences, although they can  increase the chance, will guarantee to get 6 in AWA without eliminating the other factors such as a good template, some convincing examples and right spelling which could contribute to a satisfid score,  which, from my perspectives and what I heard, will be given to those which are well organized.

Anyway,  Bush will tell you next month. Ha haaaaaaaaaaaaa   ... ...

Snazzy

以下是引用kid在2004-1-12 2:56:00的发言：
so as my teacher taught us:if u wanna write a longer article(not cal...hehe...thx ,snazzy,i'v been write "cal"for over 5 yrs...),just use"the United States of America " instead of "the states".it seems senseless...

I agree with him or her. What we wrote was just a start from which we get some fun. The long sentences, I think, will have to deliver message in an articulate way. But we have to respect the fact that producing a fancy article within 30 minutes is very difficult even for those native speakers. When I looked at those what they call GRE 100 sentences, I was really amazed by the beauty of the language. Frankly, I hate the stuff I got within 30 minutes. That's why I would like to have a sort of group so that there is more fun. I found that I couldn't articulate when I didn't have so much to say. I didn't have the choice as those were the words coming out at the first place. When I had a lot to say, then I had the choice to reorganize the wording with some structure change. Not only do I want to get a good score in GMAT, but also I want to improve my writing skills.

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carawayt

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