1月26机经作文，求拍谢谢！3.8上战场

jack19870

It appears, in so many aspects, is difficult to make a certain decision whether the writing or speaking ability is more essential for us. Depending on distinctive culture background and individual experience, different people will hold varied perspectives. From my point of view , it’s more reasonable to agree with the assertion that the capacity of writing is more important than that of speaking.
The main point to be presented to develop my propensity is that an excellent ability of writing is beneficial for your study , especially in the preparation for the exam. Suppose that if you arrange the knowledge which you have assimilated in the class very carefully and elaborately , considerable confidence will be filled in your mind ,being an incentive for your performance during the test. At this circumstance , it’s obviously to draw the conclusion that writing ability takes precedence over speaking capacity.
In addition , another equally crucial aspect can be rational when the excellent writing style taken into consideration. An classic writing style can make a conception or theory more vivid and vigorous, meanwhile, people will learn the knowledge and experience comprehensively and seriously. So good case in point is <My life> , the autobiography of Hilary Cliton, a famous American political leader. In her book, she introduces many interesting tale filled with the optimistic attitude, which has a beneficial affect to lead people to have faith when they confront the dilemma. All the reasons above can demonstrate my inclination beyond any doubt.
However, I don’t want to overstate the advantages of writing ability , since the ability of speaking has its comparative merits. Firstly, it helps people express their argument briefly. What’s more, we can cultivate our sentiment through the communication with other people on the foundation of ability of speaking.
To sum up , the issue discussed above is complex , requiring subjective judgment.  From all aspects discussed above , the ability of writing is more essential on account that it provides an good opportunity to develop our temperament, though writing ability has its own merits.  

1987kevin

有些语法错误，结构不好，第一要点太少陈述，第二要点过多。句子不是很地道啊，哈哈，注重基础把，别太注重没用的结构性的词。

加油把~

还是挺有希望的

jack19870

谢谢LS

龙龙龙

不错啊,你觉得能考1.26的?很有思想阿

blueone

I did some modifications, hope it helps.

It appears, in so many aspects, difficult to make a certain decision
whether the writing or speaking ability is more essential for us.
Depending on distinctive culture background and individual life experience,
different people hold various perspectives. From my point of view ,
it’s more reasonable to agree with the assertion that the capacity of
writing is more important than that of speaking.

The
main point to be presented to develop my propensity is that an
excellent ability of writing is beneficial for your study , especially
in the preparation for the exam. Suppose that (take 'if 'out) you arrange the
information (It might be impossible to 'ARRANGE' knowedge)
            which you have assimilated in the class very carefully and
elaborately , considerable confidence will be filled in your mind
,being an incentive for your performance during the test. At this
circumstance , it’s obviously easy to draw the conclusion that writing
ability takes precedence over speaking capacity.

In
addition , it is even more crucial when the
excellent writing style taken into consideration. Good writing style (It is not correct to use 'classic writing style') makes a conception or theory more vivid and vigorous,
meanwhile, people will acquire the knowledge and experience
comprehensively and seriously. So a good case in point is <My life>
, the autobiography of Hilary Cliton, a famous American political
leader. In her book, she introduces many interesting tales filled with optimistic attitude, which encourages people
to have faith in the face of dilemma. All the reasons above can
demonstrate my inclination beyond any doubt.

However,
I don’t want to overstate the advantages of writing ability , since the
ability of speaking has its comparative merits. Firstly, it helps
people express their argument briefly. What’s more, we can cultivate
our sentiment through the communication with other people through speaking.

To
sum up , the issue discussed above is complex, requiring subjective
judgment.  From all aspects discussed above , the ability of writing is
more essential on account that it provides an good opportunity to
develop our temperament, though speaking ability has its own advantages. (It is better to use 'advantage 'instead of 'merit' for the term of SPEAKING or WRITING)


It is a good writing.
Suggestions:
Do
not say two words if you can say it in one. Also, I think it is OK to
use simple sentences and words to express your complicated idea.

[此贴子已经被作者于2008-3-4 23:02:25编辑过]

heeroyang

?难道1.26的不会出现么?原闻其详

fish1227

    

It appears（（用proves 也可以）, in so many(一上来就用many不太好，建议换个词比如varible) aspects,
is(appears重复了，删掉) difficult
to make a certain decision whether the writing or speaking ability is more
essential for us.（whether
the writing or speaking ability is more essential for us有点乱，建议改成,writing capability and speaking
cability,which one is a more critical to us）
            Depending on(considering that或 due to多 hinge upon都可以) distinctive culture background and
individual experience, different people will hold varied perspectives. From my
point of view , it’s more reasonable to agree with the assertion that the
capacity of writing is more important than that of speaking.

        The main point to be presented
to develop my propensity is that an excellent ability of writing is beneficial
for your（建议不要用you,改成my）
study , especially in the preparation for the exam. Suppose that if
            you（同前）
        arrange the knowledge which you have
assimilated in the class very carefully and elaborately , considerable
confidence will be filled in your mind ,being an incentive for your performance
during the test.(这个例子不太好，不太明白你想表达的是什么，是confidence ? 我觉得应该多说些Details,把例子写的充分点，一定要说和writing什么关系，不然看的人就不明白你想说明的是什么) At this
circumstance , it’s obviously to draw the conclusion that writing ability takes
precedence over speaking capacity.(结构是不是有点问题it is obvious that we can draw……)

    

 

    这是我的个人建议，希望对你有帮助，我也才刚开始练习作文

jack19870

太感谢了！楼上mm谢谢！