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7. 12  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working

University is no longer a fresh word for students nowadays, especially for those who have dreams of pursuing higher education. However, when connected with working in the future, the concept of education seems to be colored with the feeling of ‘tool’, which is harnessed to earn money. In such circumstance, I totally disagree with the statement that colleges should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. The reasons are as follows.
To begin with, the majors that students are interested in have already provided them with knowledge and skills that prepared for future working, and the more courses that university offers will certainly not be attractive. For instance, a student whose major is mathematics is busy enough studying his own lectures, which will fulfill his curiosity for knowledge. Working in the future for him is doing research, deploring further in this area. Therefore, there is no need for them to have extra courses specifically for future working. What’s more, even though there are students with various interests, they are offered proficiently with numerous courses in other fields that can be chosen from. Obviously, the extra courses will be nothing but a waste of university’s money.
In addition, the more courses may bring great pressure to students, which will have negative effects on their career in the future. The heavy burden that university students take now is obviously not a secret anymore. They have to finish a great number of papers, assignments, prepare for class discussions and exams to keep up with the professors’ steps. Therefore, if more courses are placed on their shoulders, terrible result may come out. Students will have a great tendency to mislead the college purpose, abhor the new courses strongly, and finally lose their mere interest and favor for it. The whole plan that university makes will backfire absolutely.
I concede that the argument is on the correct philosophical side of this issue. After all, more courses certainly expand students’ view and broad their horizon. The extra choices might evoke the students’ truly inner interests, which will adjust their life goals and build up a wonderful life career. However, such students are limited in campus, and the opportunities that university provides can be substituted by other already existed forms, where students could feel free to solve their major problems. Hence, the idea that having more courses for future work is needless.
In sum, I disagree with the statement that students should accept more courses preparing for future work, because of the already-existing complete education regulation, the extra heavy burden that it may bring about, and the huge amount of money and education sources it may waste.

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University is no longer a fresh word for students nowadays, especially for those who have dreams of pursuing higher education.开头这句话怎么读起来那么奇怪呢？读不懂 However, when connected with working in the future, the concept of education seems to be colored with the feeling of ‘tool’, which is harnessed to earn money. In such circumstance, I totally disagree with the statement that colleges should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. The reasons are as follows.
To begin with, the majors that students are interested in have already provided them with knowledge and skills that prepared for future working, and the more courses that university offers will certainly not be attractive. For instance, a student whose major is mathematics is busy enough studying his own lectures, which will fulfill his curiosity for knowledge. Working in the future for him is doing research, deploring further in this area这句话表述简练一些，很难读懂. Therefore, there is no need for them to have extra courses specifically for future working. What’s more, even though there are students with various interests, they are offered proficiently with numerous courses in other fields that can be chosen from. Obviously, the extra courses will be nothing but a waste of university’s money(budget).
In addition, the more courses may bring great pressure to students, which will have negative effects on their career in the future.(这里因果条件不明确，压力会给职场生活带来消极影响？应改为 on their major courses) The heavy burden that university students take now is obviously not a secret anymore. They have to finish a great number of papers, assignments, prepare for class discussions and exams to keep up with the professors’ steps. Therefore, if more courses are placed on their shoulders, terrible result may come out. Students will have a great tendency to mislead the college purpose, abhor the new courses strongly, and finally lose their mere interest and favor for it. The whole plan that university makes will backfire absolutely.
I concede that the argument is on the correct philosophical side of this issue. After all, more courses certainly expand students’ view and broaden their horizon.(expand view 太中式表达了) The extra choices might evoke the students’ truly inner interests, which will adjust their life goals and build up a wonderful life career. However, such students are limited in campus, and the opportunities that university provides can be substituted by other already existed forms, where students could feel free to solve their major problems. Hence, the idea that having more courses for future work is needless.
In sum, I disagree with(oppose)词语多样化一些 the statement that students should accept more courses preparing for future work, because of the already-existing complete education regulation, the extra heavy burden that it may bring about, and the huge amount of money and education sources it may waste.结尾不错~

文章条理清晰，很熟悉的好处+好处+让步but better的作文结构
LZ用11个定语从句，希望运用diverse的方式表达

huluhulufei

谢谢！你的建议真好~我以后会语句diverse一些，说实话若非你提醒我真没发现自己如此热衷于定语从句。。。欢迎以后狠拍！！

huluhulufei

综合 TPO 4

The reading passage holds the point that dinosaurs should be endotherms. However, the professor in the lecture claims that the evidence in the reading is untenable. She uses three specific points to support her idea.
Firstly, even though the passage asserts that polar dinosaurs must maintain their body temperature in order to fight against the cold polar climate, the professor points out that the polar climate was much warmer than nowadays. Even during the cold month, the dinosaurs could migrate or hibernate to evade the climate. Obviously, the professor’s statement disproves its counterpart in the passage.
Secondly, in spite of the statement that dinosaurs evolve legs which locate underneath their bodies, indicating their high energy for running, the professor in the lecture maintains that the position of legs could also be explained as supports for their huge weight, which is advantageous for their evolution. In other words, the legs are prepared for supporting their large size, nothing to do with running.
Thirdly, the reading holds the statement that the Haversian canals found in the fossils of dinosaurs indicate that they’re endotherms, because the canals means growing quickly, which has only been found in endotherms. The professor proves this statement indefensible by the fact that there are also grow rings found in the fossil, which means stop growing in cooling period. Therefore, dinosaurs grow slowly and rapidly by turn. What’s more, only endotherms grow rapidly during cooling period.

huluhulufei

7.14Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that the advices from our grandparents have no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 50 years





People nowadays have a great tendency to overlook the past, and make every effort to strive for higher social standards in this highly competitive society. Even though the world pace is stepping forward, pursing prosperity and success, the inner principle and regulation is unchangeable, all of which can be fully reflected by the old generation. Therefore, I could hardly agree with the statement that there is no use for grandchildren to take the advices from their grandparents due to changes in the past 50 years.

To begin with, there remains terrible history that young people shouldn’t overlook, the experience of which can be vividly portrayed by our grandparents. No one would forget the world war in the past. The death, poverty, and evil power that pervaded during the dark period in 1910s and 1930s in the world can never be effaced in the past generations. New generations should be told about the terrible scene about the war, in order to evade new world wars in the future. Luckily, the nuclear power was not available during that time. Otherwise, if the world war happened nowadays, the earth would be destroyed totally. Therefore, it’s absolutely meaningful to learn from grandparents.

What’s more, it’s human feeling that is the authentic treasure in this world, which is unchangeable. From grandparents, we’ll learn the true love among people, the way to communicate with others and the family affairs in the past. The strong seed of kind and love will be cultivated in the heart of the new generation, which will surely result in a harmonious society in the future. In addition, by listening to the experiences of the skills dealing with people, young men will evade the same errors that their grandparents had, which in turn benefits themselves.

I concede that highly-developed technology has brought the world into a new era, waiting for the energetic young men to explore deeply. However, the statement unnecessarily asserts that the advices from our grandparents are of ‘no use’. The absolute word is untenable when face the following example. Hardly could anyone forget the Great Depression in the 1927 in the U.S. It was the financial bubble that boomed, leading to thousands of hundreds of unemployment and the homeless. However, it couldn’t have been happened. When compare it with the famous Holland tulip bubble in the 17th century, people will find their surprising similarities. It’s kind of dramatic scarcity that it backslid. If the young had learned the lesson from their predecessor, the eternal prosperity may have been there waiting for them.

In sum, the statement that the advices of grandparents are of no use for grandchildren begs the question, for the sere reason that there’re numerous treasure experiences for both healthy social life and correct world trends from our old generation.

kchszy061ban

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People nowadays have a great tendency to overlook the past, and make every effort to strive for higher social standards in this highly competitive society. Even though（用although就行吧） the world pace is stepping forward, pursing prosperity and success,这里断下句额 the inner principle and regulation is unchangeable, all of which can be fully reflected by the old generation. Therefore, I could hardly agree with the statement that there is no use for grandchildren to take the advices from their grandparents due to changes in the past 50 years.

To begin with, there remains terrible history that young people shouldn’t overlook, the experience of（这个的主语是history？）which can be vividly portrayed by our grandparents. No one would forget the world war in the past. The death, poverty, and evil power that pervaded during the dark period in 1910s and 1930s in the world can never be effaced in the past generations’ (memory or brain). New generations should be told about the terrible scene about the war, in order to evade new world wars in the future. Luckily, the nuclear power was not available during that time. Otherwise, if the world war happened nowadays, the earth would be destroyed totally. Therefore, it’s absolutely(避免用绝对词汇) meaningful to learn from grandparents.

What’s more, it’s human feeling that is the authentic treasure in this world, which is unchangeable. From grandparents, we’ll（can） learn the true love among people, the way to communicate with others and the family affairs in the past. The strong seed of kind and love will be cultivated in the heart of the new generation, which will surely result in a harmonious society in the future. In addition, by listening to the experiences of the skills（这个可以去掉） dealing with people, young men will evade the same errors that their grandparents had, which in turn benefits themselves.

I concede that highly-developed technology has brought the world into a new era, waiting for the energetic young men to explore deeply. However, the statement unnecessarily asserts that the advices from our grandparents are of ‘no use’. The absolute word is untenable when face the following example. Hardly could anyone forget the Great Depression in the 1927 in the U.S. It was the financial bubble that boomed, leading to thousands of hundreds of unemployment and thehomeless. However, it couldn’t have been happened（这个貌似没写完？）. When comparing it with the famous Holland tulip bubble in the 17th century, people will find their surprising similarities. It’s kind of dramatic scarcity that it backslid. If the young had learned the lesson from their predecessor, the eternal prosperity may have been there waiting for them.

In sum, the statement that the advices of grandparents are of no use for grandchildren begs the question, for the sere reason that there’re numerous treasure experiences for both healthy social life and correct world trends from our old generation.

用词丰富，整体结构很好。小地方注意就好了。看是G的作文也在同步进行么，只是这个和issue是不同的额。

huluhulufei

谢谢！我会注意！ 托福作文题目跟Issue 大同小异， 两个作文我确实同时在准备，Kch好眼力~所以纹路上难免有互相干扰的地方。。。。托福写作就像唠家常，Issue 论述的意味更明显一些。 谢谢你的建议！！

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7.15 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that the most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime.





Though more and more people are confident about the progressing society, asserting that there will hardly be unsolved problems left in the future, I consider such statement untenable. Because of the inner regulations in various societies and different cultures in the world, there will surely be conflicts among nations and societies. The specific points and explanations are as follows.

To begin with, it is humans that bring social problems, which cannot be eradicated unless human disappear totally. No one could deny their excitement when they listen to their president’s speech, who guarantees less unemployment and more opportunities for the young. However, there have been more than 30 presidents in the American history, but does the citizens, no matter he’s old or young, see the disappearance of unemployment? The answer is absolutely no. It’s because of the social regulation, the laws, and the government rules that twists together to contribute it. Therefore, as long as humans exist, the social problem like unemployment will never be solved exactly.

In addition, even though our society is stepping forward with the developing technologies or better law drafts or even more completed regulations, the inner darkness of humanity can never be moved away. Proud, selfish, greed and lazy are the reflection of human weakness, all of which contribute to serious problems such as AIDS spread, crime, discrimination and children addicted in drugs. Unluckily, the weakness cannot be solved by lawyers, diplomats, economists and policies. As you can see, it’s due to the various humanities that make this colorful world. And also, it’s due to the various humanities that the world is filled with danger, excitement and lure.

Instead of offering the world a more glorious and harmonious future, the high-tech, that most people suppose as the key to the bright, may just in turn be the killer. For example, many people may praise physical scientists finding nuclear power source as the neat and strong source to create light. However, the atom bomb that exploded in the World War had made thousands of hundreds of people died in Japan. And the explosion of nuclear power station last year in Japan, has made it more clear to see the dangers of nuclear power. What’s more, the wonderful power of chemistry as led people find out numerous compounds for both eating and clothing. While, when we face the terrible health problems that chemistry contribute, who can say it’s absolutely of benefits without any harm?

In sum, the statement that the most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime begs the question, because we’ll never eradicate the weakness of humanity, make the best regulations that suit for all nations, and evade the harm from technologies.

huluhulufei

7.16 综合  TPO 6
The reading passage holds the point that the original printed encyclopedia is better than the communal encyclopedia online now. However, the professor in the listening part argues that the evidence the reading provides are untenable. He gives three specific reasons below.
Firstly, even though the reading asserts that the communal encyclopedia online is lack of academic credentials, the professor claims that it’s of high efficiency to evade the errors. Because the online encyclopedia gives people opportunities to update their articles, the errors will be corrected in time. To the contrary, the errors in the printed encyclopedia have to last long time due to lack of chances for correcting. What’s more, there’s no absolute accurate printed encyclopedia, no matter it’s online or not.
Secondly, in spite of the statement in the reading that the communal encyclopedia is vulnerable to hackers, the professor insists that there remain two solutions for this circumstance. One solution is that we can put the articles that no one would dispute unchangeable eternally to make it reliable. The other solution is that the editors can eliminate the articles words that may be malicious and monitor the articles. Obviously, by the two solutions, the statement that the reading asserts is indefensible.
Thirdly, despite the reading claims that the communal encyclopedia lacks the idea of what’s important or unimportant, some articles are of little significance. However, the professor proves it untenable by the fact that it’s just because of the diversity of articles contexts that bring its strong advantage. In addition, it’s the limited space that the editors of printed encyclopedia had to find out which part is important and which part is not. However, the space of the communal encyclopedia is of no limitation, and the various articles just reflect different interests. Obviously, the professor’s statement proves its counterpart in the passage inconvincible.

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7.16  综合 TPO 7  上一篇写完了才发现写错了TPO。。。。悲剧 ，赶紧补了一篇
The reading passage holds the point that there’s no need for American wood company to adopt ecocertification. However, the professor in the lecture proves the evidence untenable. He gives three specific reasons to support his idea.
Firstly, even though the reading asserts that consumers in the U.S. will not trust the ads and ignore them as usual, the professor claims in the lecture that consumers will make clear identification about whether the ads is about the company’s own products or about the claims from independent agencies. Actually, the customers have great interests supporting the wood ecologically certified for its international reputation. Obviously, the professor’s statement disproves its counterpart in the passage.
Secondly, in spite of the statement in the passage that the higher wood prices that cost of certification bring will lead to the potential consumers losing, the professor insists that price only affects the consumers’ decisions when it’s much higher or lower than the other one. Actually the higher-quality wood’s price is within 5 percent higher than the original one, which will not affect the consumers’ decisions. What’s more, the American are convinced of the value of environment more than before.
Thirdly, the author of the reading passage claims that the certification of the wood only makes sense when it’s for abroad sailing. However the American inland is the wood company’s main market. The professor proves this statement indefensible by the fact that in the competitive market, the wood with certification will gradually capture a large amount of potential customers. If the native wood company doesn’t develop ecocertified products, the foreign companies with environmentally products will soon dominate the whole market.