包子不包子：欢迎拍砖～～

DanielleZ

包子这篇文章总体写的还不错，逻辑挺清楚的。但是有个别细节需要注意。黄色的为精彩句子~
加油啦~~


Have you ever read about how people are educatedin the past? No electricity, only a limited time can be devoted into study.No teaching facilities, the whole class can only explore the experiments in the text book. No high efficiency(efficient) information, after long period struggling, students find they command the wrong information. Compared with peoplein modern days, no wonder it is easier to educate now.

To begin with, people can gain access to myriad ofinformation efficiently and conveniently. By simply pushing（pressing会不会好一些啊？）a tiny button on the cellphone or the computer,the most up-to-dateinformation related to every field all over the world will crowd in no matterwhere or when you are. With the assistance of those information, a betterunderstanding about the the world, like another spaceship is (has been) send to the space by China, and improvementmade in each discipline, such as scientists in the U.S. disprove theformulation aroused by Newton, can be achieved easily. All the information and knowledge arm people’sbrain. The more the information exposes to the public the better the(没有特指的意思吧？不用加the) people can command skills, which permits their(them) easier education. Moreover, thanks to thewidespread information people do not have to worry about the scarcity ofteacher resources, which can be compensated by the digesting of large amount ofinformation by people themselves. Accordingly, people are easier to be educatednow than the past indeed.


Another equally important point is that moreadvanced facilities are provided to schools andinstitutions even they are locate in the remote areas(与前面的schools & institute对应，应该为复数). No things like chemistry major students can only learn experimentsfrom reading text book will happen again. Sitting in the fully equipped lab,students are enabled（able） to practice the experiment by(with) their own hands directly. Step by step, with thesupport of the advanced equipments(我觉得实验肯定不会只用一台设备，所以用复数会好一些), a deeper and more precise understanding of the experiment is formed.Attain the knowledge readily and impressively, no wonder people are possible tobe educated easily. In institutions, with the assistance of developedfacilities, suitable environment is created for experts to research on thescientific world, which may induce a better education system's birth andfurther promote the education of people. Benefit from the modern world, how canpeople not to be easy educate?

Others may against my point by insisting thatpeople in the past are much more concentrate without the bothering ofentertainment information, computer games and TV programs, which is positivefor education. However, the absence of those significant information andfacilities can influence the progress of education research, which is theacceleration in encouraging people’s education(我觉得这个理由不太清楚，为什么会encourage people呢？类似relax，refresh mind可以说一说。而且我觉得定语从句反而不能突出这个理由，把encourage提前会好一些). Consequently, the saying cannot be convincingly explained.

In conclusion, people can get more help fromdiverse information and advanced facilities, which will makes them easier to be educated than the past

包子不包子

6.24

TPO8

Both of the writer and the lecturer explore the issue of the reliability of Chevalier's memoir. The author doubts the accuracy of the memoir deeply. The professor, however, believes that no memoir is correct in every details and this memoir is accurate overall, which is a reliable historical source.

First, the speaker insists that Chevalier is not poor. It is known that Chevalier spends lots of money on parties and gambling and he has wealth. The truth is that he has to sale first, in order to convert his asset into money. When he runs out of his wealth at some time, he has to borrow money from merchants to wait for his late coming wealth in Switzerland. Borrowing in this way does not mean poor. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the lecturer insists that Chevalier take notes about the conversation with Voltaire every night he come back immediately, which possibly rebut the evidence in the reading. The professor further explains that Chevalier has kept his notes for so many years and he refers to those notes and journals when he is writing the memoir. Also, witness who lives with Chevalier in his late days testifies the truth of the conversation. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the speaker asserts that the possibility for Chevalier's escape from the prison exists. There are prisoner who has even more political powerful friends does not bribe the freedom. Therefore, the case discussed in the passage is hardly to occur. The evidence attained from the old document in the prison shows that the celling of the prison is repaired soon after Chevalier's escape. Why should people repair the celling if there is no one able to escape? Consequently, the statement in the reading, Chevalier is bribed to free by his friends, is disputed
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In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the main idea of the reading passage, Chevalier distorts and invents his memoir, is incorrect.

包子不包子

6.25

tpo9

Both of the lecturer and the writer explore the issue about the whether hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is a suitable replacement for internal combustion engine. The writer believes that lots of advantages can be brought by the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine. The professor, on the other hand, insists that the writer is too optimistic and the new engine cannot solve any problems, although the author correctly point out the problems.

First, the hydrogen is not as available as the writer thinks, the speaker states, its present form are not suitable for the energy source. On the other hand, it is the pure liquid state of hydrogen, an exact artificial process, that is needed. Besides, this state of hydrogen is difficult to produce and store, which the command temperature is minus 253 degrees Celsius. Moreover the storage is energy consuming. Therefore, hydrogen is not a practical form of energy that can be regarded as replacement, and this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the professor claims that hydrogen-based power co not solve the pollution problem. In fact, it creates pollution. The process that produces pure liquid hydrogen is called purification, which burns coal and oil. In this way, pollution is generated by the burning of those fossil fuels. Thus, cars do not pollute the environment, it is the production process does pollute. Accordingly, this is another place where experience the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that the fuel-cell engine actually costs a lot, which contradicts with the economically competitive theory raised by the writer, because it composes the metal-platinum-which is expensive. The professor further explains that without this metal no hydrogen can undergo the process to be in the commanded state. Also, the replace of platinum has so far been unsuccessful. Consequently, the last point is rebutted by the speaker.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the main idea of the reading, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is a good replacement of internal combustion engine, is incorrect.

kchszy061ban

baozi 童鞋你怎么不写独立了，连连打字速度也好额。

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Both of the writer and the lecturer explore the issue of the reliability of Chevalier's memoir. The author doubts the accuracy of the memoir deeply. The professor, however, believes that no memoir is correct in every details and this memoir is accurate overall, which is a reliable historical source.

First, the speaker insists that Chevalier is not poor. It is known that Chevalier spends lots of money on parties and gambling and he has wealth. The truth is that he has to sale first, in order to convert his asset into money. When he runs out of his wealth(这个改写为现金之类的好么) at some time, he has to borrow money from merchants to wait for his late coming wealth in Switzerland. Borrowing in this way does not mean poor. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the lecturer insists that Chevalier take notes about the conversation with Voltaire every night he come（其实我觉得这个应该用过去式）back immediately, which possibly rebut the evidence in the reading. The professor further explains that Chevalier has kept his notes for so many years and he refers to those notes and journals when he is writing the memoir. Also, witness who lives with Chevalier in his late days testifies the truth of the conversation（这个点好像是邻居看到他查阅笔记等，是证明谈话可靠性么）. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the speaker asserts that the possibility for Chevalier's escape from the prison exists（ed）. There are prisoner who has even more political powerful friends does not bribe （for）the freedom. Therefore, the case discussed in the passage is hardly to occur. The evidence attained from the old document in the prison shows that the celling of the prison is repaired soon after Chevalier's escape. Why should people repair the celling if there is no one able to escape? Consequently, the statement in the reading, Chevalier is bribed to free by his friends, is disputed.
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In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the main idea of the reading passage, Chevalier distorts and invents his memoir, is incorrect.



包子的综合已经很难改了，只是听力里面的小点，可能会有些不同，不过我听的不是很好，可能会有听错。还有就是时态可以一直用一般现在时么，看包子一直都是保持这个时态。

包子不包子

6.26综合

tpo10

Both of the writer and the lecturer discuss about the reason that cause the decline population in sea otter. The author insists on environmental pollution theory, chemical infection produces the dropping in sea otters' population. The professor reveals that it is more likely to be predation, predators lead to the reducing number of sea otters.

First, the speaker claims that the environmental pollution theory is weakened by the finding, no body of sea otter can be found on the shore. It is not expected if they are not dead of the infection generated by chemical pollution. However, it corresponds with the predation, predators eat the sea otters right after their death and no bodies can be found. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the professor declares that whale population is declined by human hunting and orcas cannot eat enough whales. In this way orcas have to change their die to survive. Accordingly, small mammals mentioned in the passage all come to be the food of orcas, which reasons the declining number of other sea mammals like  seals and sea lions. Consequently, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that the uneven pattern of the decreasing sea otter number is better explained by the orca theory rather than pollution and ocean currents, predation. The uneven pattern depends on the location whether orcas can access for feeding on the sea otters, further explains he professor. The fact is that, places where orca can easily approach experience the decline in population greatly. Places like shallow water and rocky location orca cannot access because of their large size remain stable in the sea otters' population. Furthermore, where there is no shallow water and rocky sea floor, there is a severe reducing in sea otters' number. Accordingly, the last point is rebutted.

To sum up, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading material, decline sea otters' population is cause by environmental pollution, is incorrect.

包子不包子

baozi 童鞋你怎么不写独立了，连连打字速度也好额。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/25 11:24:43)

嘿嘿 偷懒了两天 被发现了

包子不包子

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Both of the writer and the lecturer explore the issue of the reliability of Chevalier's memoir. The author doubts the accuracy of the memoir deeply. The professor, however, believes that no memoir is correct in every details and this memoir is accurate overall, which is a reliable historical source.

First, the speaker insists that Chevalier is not poor. It is known that Chevalier spends lots of money on parties and gambling and he has wealth. The truth is that he has to sale first, in order to convert his asset into money. When he runs out of his wealth(这个改写为现金之类的好么) at some time, he has to borrow money from merchants to wait for his late coming wealth in Switzerland. Borrowing in this way does not mean poor. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the lecturer insists that Chevalier take notes about the conversation with Voltaire every night he come（其实我觉得这个应该用过去式）back immediately, which possibly rebut the evidence in the reading. The professor further explains that Chevalier has kept his notes for so many years and he refers to those notes and journals when he is writing the memoir. Also, witness who lives with Chevalier in his late days testifies the truth of the conversation（这个点好像是邻居看到他查阅笔记等，是证明谈话可靠性么）. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the speaker asserts that the possibility for Chevalier's escape from the prison exists（ed）. There are prisoner who has even more political powerful friends does not bribe （for）the freedom. Therefore, the case discussed in the passage is hardly to occur. The evidence attained from the old document in the prison shows that the celling of the prison is repaired soon after Chevalier's escape. Why should people repair the celling if there is no one able to escape? Consequently, the statement in the reading, Chevalier is bribed to free by his friends, is disputed.
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In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the main idea of the reading passage, Chevalier distorts and invents his memoir, is incorrect.



包子的综合已经很难改了，只是听力里面的小点，可能会有些不同，不过我听的不是很好，可能会有听错。还有就是时态可以一直用一般现在时么，看包子一直都是保持这个时态。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/25 20:22:50)

记得之前看到文章有只出现一般现在时的 也不是非常确定
包子对时态把握的不好 比较少变时态的

包子不包子

码太多 果断超时T.T

6月26日100206 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.

Have you ever seen exhausted high school students fall in sleep in the seat on a bus from school to home? Have you ever noticed that again and again they burn their nigh oil to study for the exams? Have you ever paid attention to their eight classes a day fully occupied schedules? If you have, you will definitely stand on my point that high school students should not take a course on basic economics.

To begin with, high school students are busy and are under great pressure of their school works if they want to enter a good university. Read all the books on the reading list, practice all the experiment covered by the text books and write essays that are well enough for them to compete in the university entry interview, and the list will go on. All these works, not only the quantity but also the quality have to be ensured by every high school students. No wonder how much effort they have to devote. No wonder how much pressure they are experiencing. No wonder how busily they are engaged. The question is there is only 24 hours a day. The time of high school students is limited. Apart from school works, students need time to spend with their families and friends, whom are the spiritual support for the students. Indeed, not much time can be left. Neither do their attention. Accordingly, high school students should not be commanded to take the basic economic course.

Another equally important point is that students should be given the right to choose the courses that they are interested in. Before entering the university, students should spend enough time in deciding the field they want to study in their further education or they want to find a job in. All the courses students tend to put attention into should be studied and draw the conclusion whether they want to pour even more endeavor into in the future, needless to say how important this period of time is to everyone. It related to a person's whole life closely to some extent. It is an approach for students to experience their love to pursue their dream. Once they are occupied by the basic economic course, which is hated by some students from the very beginning, it is like announcing the death of their dream rigidly and directly face to face. Consequently, students should not be forced to waste their precious time in study the useless course.

Admittedly, there are indeed some people do not agree with my point. They may declare that no one can know whether the knowledge of a course will help you in the future and there it is never too tired to learn. However, consider about the health condition of students, they need time to build their body much eager than study a course because of the fundamental position of one's physical health. Without a strong body, people cannot fight in the complex society. If high students must take a course, I recommend outdoor courses that can strength their bodies such as swimming, basketball and jogging.

To sum up, students should not be occupied by the basic economic course. It may become a pediment in their way to for chasing dream and even it is bad for their health.

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Both of the lecturer and the writer explore the issue about the whether hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is a suitable replacement for internal combustion engine. The writer believes that lots of advantages can be brought by the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine. The professor, on the other hand, insists that the writer is too optimistic and the new engine cannot solve any problems, although the author correctly point out the problems(them).

First, the hydrogen is not as available as the writer thinks, the speaker states, its present form are not suitable for the energy source. On the other hand, it is the pure liquid state of hydrogen, an exact artificial process, that is needed. Besides, this state of hydrogen is difficult to produce and store, which the command temperature is minus 253 degrees Celsius. Moreover, the storage is energy consuming. Therefore, hydrogen is not a practical form of energy that can be regarded as replacement, and this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the professor claims that hydrogen-based power co（an） not solve the pollution problem. In fact, it creates pollution. The process that produces pure liquid hydrogen is called purification, which burns coal and oil. In this way, pollution is generated by the burning of those fossil fuels. Thus, cars do not pollute the environment, it is the production process does pollute. Accordingly, this is another place where experience the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that the fuel-cell engine actually costs a lot, which contradicts with the economically competitive theory raised by the writer, because it composes the metal-platinum-which is expensive. The professor further explains that without this metal no hydrogen can undergo the process to be in the commanded state. Also, the replace of platinum has so far been unsuccessful. Consequently, the last point is rebutted by the speaker.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the main idea of the reading, hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is a good replacement of internal combustion engine, is incorrect.



看看就行了，嘿嘿