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7.1综合

tpo16

Both of the lecturer and the writer explore the twentieth century cultural artifacts studying situation of archaeologists in the United Kingdom. The writer lists three aspects that lead to the great influence of the filed. The professor, on the contrary, states that new rules was published, which helped to change the field and improved the condition in three areas mentioned in the reading.

First, all the construction site had to be examined by archaeologists before construction, which insured that the loss of valuable artifacts described in the passage would not happen again, claims the professor If it was an archaeology interest and of great value, constructers, government officials and archaeologists would gather together and plan for the preservation-built around the site or built after the needed excavation was accomplished-to protect the site from being damaged. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material that construction projects destroyed many valuable artifacts.

Moreover, the speaker declares that all the research would be paid by the construction company instead of the government. This is a whole new source of financial support. In this way, the found allowed a greater range of research that was impossible in the past. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that more paid job for archaeologists did not exist before would be provided. They would be hired at all stages of process: examine the site, draw the protection plan, do research, process data and write the report. Therefore, the number of jobs would increase as well as the number of professional archaeologists, which could be the highest ever before. Consequently, the last point is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central arguments in the reading, three areas affect the progress of studying and uncovering the artifacts, are incorrect.

包子不包子

7月1日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Rather than help their children do schoolwork, parents should encourage their children do work independently. Do you agree or disagree?

Sit with a parent side by side and start working out the solutions for schoolwork from afternoon to evening, several hours, without the absence of parents' help until the accomplishment of the schoolwork. I believe lots of students have experienced this kind of thing more or less. However, is it good for parents to help children to do schoolwork? Personally, I do not think so. Parents should encourage their children to do schoolwork independently.

To begin with, only by the independent study, can children absorb the knowledge that they really need efficiently and impressively. During the study, no one can avoid difficulties. Once the difficulties are solved by children themselves, once  they have struggled to search for the exit, once the children explore the whole journey on then own, the related knowledge can be impressed deeply in their memory, which will benefit for children's further study because they do not have to spend extra time on the same pediment again and again. What if parents help their children to find the solutions? Merely by listening to the long and monotones explanations from parents, not only can children be absent mind easily but also no focus of specific knowledge can be found to assist their further study. In this way, parents' help may address the instance problem but it is not the long term solution for children's development and study.

Another equally important point is that by the encouragement from parents children are able to develop a beneficial habit that is to deal with difficulties independently in their life. Schoolwork can be regarded as a small part of problems that children can encounter in their whole life. If every time there is question solved by parents without children's devotion, children's relay on parents may extend to other field, which will harm the health development of a child if he even does not know how to tie his shoes that is usually finished by the assistant from his parents. On the contrary, the more encouragement from parents, the merrier the children are willing overcome the difficulties by themselves, according to a recent research. Consequently, encouragement for children's independent study is of great necessity.

Admittedly, others may against my point by stating that sometimes children just need their parent's help as a kind of protection, which is also the same in solving schoolwork because they may be punished if not finish the work. In my perspective, this kind of protection cannot last forever. Sooner the children can help themselves out of trouble, happier they will feel in dealing difficulties on their own.

To sum up, by parents' encouragement on schoolwork, children can learn the knowledge impressively and efficiently. Also good habit of depending on themselves can be formed as well as the happiness in discovering the solution.

包子不包子

7.2综合

tpo17

Both of the lecturer and the writer explore about that whether birds' population will continue to decline in the future. The writer lists three factors that is believed to produce negative influence to birds' population. The professor, on the contrary, insists that none of the three factors are convincing.

First, it is true as the passage describes that urban expanding destroys habitats for birds, but not all the birds. Some birds benefit from the extent of urban areas, states the professor. In fact, some city dwellers complain that there are too many sea gulls and pigeons living in the city and even hawks, which are fed on the increasing number of pigeons. Therefore, some birds' population shrinks and others grow, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading that all birds will suffer from urban expansion.

Moreover, the speaker declares that the future cannot be assumed in the way like the reading does about agriculture. She explains that in the United States less and less land is exploited for agricultural purpose every year. This is the reason of the using of more productive crops, adds the professor, which means more food can be produced in a unit of land and there is no need to destroy wild area which is the habitat of birds. Accordingly, this is another place where experience the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that the passage incorrectly project the future of birds and pesticides. The truth is that people are aware about the influence of pest and two changes have been made to improve the situation: new and less toxic pesticides are put into use and more pest resist crops are planted which do not harm the birds at all and also can reduce the need for chemical pesticides. Therefore, the decrease of birds’ population will not appear in the future. Consequently, the last point is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, birds' population will suffer continuously in the future, is incorrect.

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Both of the lecturer and the writer explore the twentieth century cultural artifacts studying situation of archaeologists in the United Kingdom. The writer lists three aspects that lead to the great （negative）influence of the filed. The professor, on the contrary, states that new rules was published, which helped to change the field and improved the condition in three areas mentioned in the reading.

First, all the construction site had to be examined by archaeologists before construction, which insured that the loss of valuable artifacts described in the passage would not happen again, claims the professor. If it was an archaeology interest and of great value, constructers, government officials and archaeologists would gather together and plan for the preservation-built around the site or built after the needed excavation was accomplished-to protect the site from being damaged. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material that construction projects destroyed many valuable artifacts.

Moreover, the speaker declares that all the researches would be paid by the construction company instead of the government. This is a whole new source of financial support. In this way, the found allowed a greater range of research that was impossible in the past. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that more paid jobs for archaeologists did not exist before would be provided. They would be hired at all stages of process: examine the site, draw the protection plan, do research, process data and write the report. Therefore, the number of jobs would increase as well as the number of professional archaeologists, which could be the highest ever before. Consequently, the last point is rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the central arguments in the reading, three areas affect the progress of studying and uncovering the artifacts, are incorrect.

我找不到错误额，包子亲

包子不包子

7月2日独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently.

Children nowadays tend to bear more pressure in finishing their work on time: doing schoolwork, practicing the piano, cleaning their own rooms and participating in the school clubs. Always, children are looking for their parents' help when difficulties come. It seems naturally that parents should protect their children form over burdening. However, does it mean that parents should help children to do their work? Personally, I do not regard it as a wise choice. What parents should do is to encourage their children to do their work independently.

To begin with, only by the practicing of children themselves, can they command knowledge or skills impressively and efficiently. In order to accomplish a chemistry experiment, for example, children may have to come through different stages of process-literature review, material collection, carry out the experiment, data collection and report writing. If children can finish all the steps on their own, no wonder a myriad of knowledge can be learnt. Besides, skills such as critical thinking, problem solving and information searching, even communication and interpersonal skills are also possible to be improved during the progress of the experiment. However, what if the anxious parents struggle to help their children out of trouble? Not only can the precious chance for children themselves to foster the spirit of dependence be taken away but also a large part of excellent knowledge will be missed. In this way, without the assistance from the parents it is more likely for children to benefit from their work. Therefore, parents should not assist their children in doing their own work.

Another equally important point is that by the encouragement from parents children are prone to achieve higher goals in life. Imagine how a toddler learn to walk, parents are standing at the destination and encouraging their children to walk to the end independently and to enjoy the warm hug from parents. By the none stopping encouragement from parents, children learn to walk, learn to dress themselves and at last they will learn to how to beat the difficulties by their own until they touch their goals, which is impossible to fulfill by the continuously assistance from the beloved parents. Moreover, according to a recent research that 78% of the children in my country following the principle that the more encouragement children receive from their parents the better the abilities they will possess in dealing with difficulties in life. That is how things processing, encouragement is like powerful support, promoting children to walk further and further, faster and faster.

Admittedly, others may against my point by stating that sometimes children are too young to figure out the problems independently. Consequently, the help from parents is necessitated. In fact, it is the instruction that they need rather than the actual help. Once they know which way to go, it cannot be a problem to walk.

To sum up, without the help but the encouragement from parents, children will learn more knowledge and skills as well as a higher goal can be achieved.

包子不包子

7月3日独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Usually, several young people gather together to spend a weekend night, what will they do? Stay at home and watch TV all night or hang out to the movie theater to enjoy the show. It seems that less and less young people can be seen jogging in the morning, exercising on the playground or simply go out shopping with their parents. Maybe the reason is that too many young people are addicted in watching movies and TV. However, movies and TV have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

To begin with, young people are likely to be less interest in going outside and also because of that their interpersonal and communication skills can be impaired. According to a recent research that 56% of coach potatoes in my country are suffering from obesity and psychological problem more or less. Put the situation onto young people, it is not difficult to understand the negative effects. Shut themselves in the house and pour all the time on staring at TV. More TV and movies means less time to spend on other things like physical exercises, going out with friend and communicate with the society. If not control, no wonder young people are tending to behave more inner going and even they may refuse to connect with the outside, which is a severe problem not only for the families but also the society. Physically or mentally they will deviate away from the lively world they should belong to. Consequently, TV and movies do produce more negative effects on young people rather than positive effects.

Another equally important point is that the some information spread by movies and TV is not proper for young people to follow, the reason is that they are too young to distinguish right from wrong. How many actors nowadays in the movies do not smoke? How many TV programs do not provide shows include violent factors in the period of time most popular for young people' watching? How many of them do not describe a complex and dark society that can cause panic easily for the young? In this way, the young are vulnerable. Maybe it is out of curiosity; they imitate the actors' actions on the TV to smoke at a young age. Even some of them try drugs simply because they want to feel the same way as their favorite character does. What they may not understand is that things they do by the instruction on TV and movies are unchangeable. It can harm other people like smoking permanently. Indeed they are actually the most influenced victim, their behavior changed, when they are hurting others unconsciously. Therefore, movies and TV bring more negative impact to young people exactly.

Admittedly, others may against my view by stating that the young can learn useful knowledge by watching TV and movies like documentaries and news program. The point is that if the young can learn enough knowledge from TV and movies, why do they still have to go to school? Accordingly, TV and movies only speak for a relatively small part of information, which is even useless.

To sum up, TV and movies can impair the young's abilities in communication. Furthermore, young people can be taught to learn harmful activities from movies and TV, which are all the negative influence generated on the behavior of the young.

DanielleZ

包子，不好意思啊~7月2号跟7月1号的作文太像了，我就没有写。麻烦你帮我看一下7月1号的作文吧。谢谢啦~
http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-727156-4-1.html#last

包子不包子

包子，不好意思啊~7月2号跟7月1号的作文太像了，我就没有写。麻烦你帮我看一下7月1号的作文吧。谢谢啦~
http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-727156-4-1.html#last

-- by 会员 DanielleZ (2012/7/3 20:02:42)

丹尼，改好了~~ 不要忘了狠拍包子的哈~

包子不包子

7月4日

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past people eat more healthy food than what people have nowadays

Fast food comes to be the modern fashion of people's life style. Super sweet ice cream and high calorie potato chips fill the shelves in the super markets. Family feast are treated by take-away from nearby restaurant. This is how people diet structure and from has changed compared with the past. No longer are people willing to devote much time in preparing for food. Besides that, other factors like the quality of food themselves in nowadays together generate the less healthy food people eat currently. Personally, I agree that people in the past enjoy much healthy food than people today.

To begin with, the balance and combination of nutrition for food has been impaired. In the past, women usually spent their whole day long time to prepare food for the entire family. They regard the family meals as a kind of family party. How can there be no wonderful food supplied on an excellent party? Therefore, women do their best to decorate the food and make the most of its nutrition combination. From picking the vegetable from family yard to considering what kind of dished should be enjoyed, woman spare no effort in mediating how to provide the nutrition balance dish and planning the method to give the family the tasty feast. In this way, people who addicted in meat cannot eat meat three meals a day. Those who love vegetable and pasta are the same. No wonder people in the past own healthier food than today.

Another equally important point is that food nowadays are made to go through so many manufacture processes that the special nutrition they contained are lost and even they can be poisonous to human. Do you always buy food once a week and store them in your fridge without spoil? Do you give your children colorful cream cake on their birthday as gifts? Do you used to eat can food when there is no feeling to cook or just because of the tiredness? If you do. Actually, you are suffering from the chemical elements put into food by human to preserve or color food. According to a recent study that 66% of the chemical elements worked as preservation of food can cause cancer, especially for can food. On the contrary, never can those things happen in the past. People have fresh food from their backyard every morning and eat all of them by the end of the day. No preservation skills. No harmful chemical elements. No colored food. It is the people live in the past that benefit from the healthier food.

Admittedly, others may against my view by stating that modern people contribute themselves in working and the unhealthy fast food insists them to accomplish work efficiently, which is the least possible thing in the past. The point that, the opinion that regards works of higher value than the individual’s health is wrong. No matter what kind of impediment can there be, health should be in the first place. Consequently people should do their best to consume the health food.

To sum up, people nowadays cannot enjoy the fresh food or the food with balanced nutrition. Accordingly, the health of food in today is of low level, which cannot be compared with the past.

T不死

7.4 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past people eat more healthy food than what people have nowadays

Fast food comes to be the modern fashion of people's life style. Super sweet ice cream and high calorie potato chips fill the shelves in the super marketssupermarkets. Family feasts are treated by take-away from nearby restaurant. This is how people diet structure and from form has changed compared with the past. No longer are people willing to devote much time in preparing for food. Besides that, other factors like the quality of food themselves in nowadays together generate the less healthy food people eat currently. Personally, I agree that people in the past enjoy muchhealthyhealthier food than people today.
第一段的背景介绍很好。很好反应现代人的食物的现状。Fast food, ice cream, high calorie potato chips and taken-away food这些都是典型的垃圾食品。再结合过去人们devote much time preparing food ,顺其自然得出了个人观点。


To begin with, the balance and combination of nutrition for food hashave been impaired. In the past, women usually spent their whole day long time to prepareon preparing food for the entire family. They regard the family meals as a kind of family party. How can there be no wonderful food supplied on an excellent party?建议修改成How can they miss preparing wonderful food for their excellent party理由为can 的主语一般为人或者动物。另外意思尽量直说，尽量避免用there be句型Therefore, women dowould do their best to decorate the food and make the most of its nutrition combination. From picking the vegetable from family yard to considering what kind of dished should be enjoyed, woman spare no effortin mediatingto mediate how to provide the nutrition balance dish and planningplan the method to give the family the tasty feast. In this way, people who addicted in meat cannot eat meat three meals a day. Those who love vegetable and pasta are the same. No wonder people in the past own healthier food than today.
第二段展过去的家庭主妇如何为家庭准备丰盛的食物。从而论证第一段的其中一个分论点了过去的人们更关心食物健康，吃得更健康。
Another equally important point is that food nowadays are made to go through so many manufacture processes that the special nutrition they contained are lost and even they can be poisonous to humanthey will be contaminated with poisonous chemical elements. Do you always buy food once a week and store them in your fridge without spoil? Do you give your children colorful cream cake on their birthday as gifts? Do you used to eat can food when there isyou do not haveno feeling to cook or just because of the tiredness? If you do. Actually, you are suffering from the chemical elements put into food by human to preserve or color food. According to a recent study that 66% of the chemical elements worked as preservation of food can cause cancer, especially for can food. On the contrary, never can those things happen in the past. People have fresh food from their backyard every morning and eat all of themeat up by the end of the day. No preservation skills. No harmful chemical elements. No colored food. It is the people live in the past that benefit from the healthier food. 此句重心可以改下It is the people lived in the past benefit more from the healthier food.
第三段从食品加工过程中的可能污染，食品防腐剂和色素添加剂，人们处理食品的方式等角度论证第一段的其中一个分论点了现在的人们吃的食品不健康。


Admittedly, others may againstobject(not support) rebutmy view by stating that modern people contribute themselves in working and that(两个并列宾语从句第二个一定要加that) the unhealthy fast food insistsassist them to accomplish work efficiently, which is the least possible thingimpossible意思一样，尽量简洁in the past. The point that, the opinion that regards works of higher value than the individual’s health is wrong.After all, one’s health is the principal issue that one should consider. No matter what kind of impediment can there be, health should be in the first place. Consequently people should do their best to consume the health food.
第四段的Admittedly 站在反对者的角度考虑，不健康的食品对工作效率有积极作用。作者的观点是我们要关注食品安全，关注健康，更胜工作本身。身体是革命的本钱嘛。哈哈！
考虑到托福对文章的要求逻辑要求没有GMAT的高，我认为还是可以接受的。
虽然这段没有把话题放在食品健康的本身。因为反对者也没有反对作者的观点过去的食品比现在的食品健康。
To sum up, people nowadays cannot enjoy the fresh food or the food with balanced nutrition. Accordingly, the health of food in today is of low level, which cannot be compared with the past.


整体感觉作者的两个分论点很好。每个sub-point都有例子支持。如果能注意下小的措词就很不错了。包子加油！