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TPO24 6.16

Both of the author and the lecturer discuss the appearance of organic tissues in the leg bone fossil of T. rex. The writer gives three possible identifications to support the opinion that organic tissues do exist. The speaker casts doubts on that statement and believes that they are skeptical.

First, the professor insists that the soft substance is not necessarily the residence of blood vessels. It could be something else, he states, when bacteria colonies hollows, empty area like bones, left by the dead tissues, they often leave behind trace of organic material. Therefore, the soft substances tested in the leg bone fossil might just be soft moisture residues of bacteria. And this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the speaker contends that spheres origin from the red blood cells is not exact. Because reddish spheres were found in other animals' tissues around the same time, which contains primitive animals that do not have red blood cells. If there is no red blood cells, spheres cannot be examined either. A different origin might be a good explanation-they are just reddish mineral. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that no collagen can be found in the tissue older than 100 000 years old, which means the finding in a 70- million- year -old T. rex fossil contradicts with the idea about how long collagen can last. It does not come from T. rex, says the professor, it comes from a recent resources like human skin of a researcher who was handling the bone, which strengthens the opinion raised by the lecturer. Consequently, the last evidence is also rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the passage and convincingly shows that the arguments in the reading material are incorrect.

包子不包子

6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Have you ever seen a bunch of young students rushing to the cinema just for a one hour comedy? Have you ever noticed that the youngest child in the family prefers to watch TV all day alone rather than hang out with friends? Have you ever discovered that coach potatoes tend to appear among the young? If so. It is evident that movies and television have more negative effects on the way young people behave.

To begin with, there is too much information in movies nowadays that are not suitable for the young. Extremely violate scene, actors’ smoking and cheating selfishly for personal interests gradually impress deeply into the young’s heart. They are too immature to distinguish right from wrong. Maybe they smoke for showing their brave. Maybe they fight with each other for exhibiting their sense of unity. Maybe they cheat on others' feelings merely for fun. However, no matter what the initiate of those behaviors are, movies produce negative influence on the young's actions and health. Can people pretend to be okay when they see the strong and active young people wondering on streets smoking and fighting with others and have nothing to do? In this way, movies indeed produce more negative effects over the young's behavior.

Another equally significant view is that watching TV impairs the communicating skill of the young. Coach potatoes are the best examples. They stay at home from day to night. Except staring at the screen, nowhere else do they give a single glance. Moreover, seldom do they step out of home, seldom do they talk to another person.. Consequently, coach potatoes lose all their friends and what is worse they will experience great difficulty in communicating with others because they seldom open their mouth. Besides, their health conditions are declining and all kinds of diseases can appear at each second. For the young people, there is no exception for them if they watch too much TV and become addicted as a coach potato. No social communication, have no idea about how to communication with others and even possibly be caught by mental disease. All the results are likely to happen with the increasingly stronger influence of TV. Accordingly, TV produce more negative influence over the young people's behave as movies do.

Admittedly, some people may against my point by insisting that the young can learn the latest information form TV in all fields and movie is the most efficient way for the young to relax. However, compared with the negative effects they produce. Do people what a health and positive generation or a generation that is inner going and cleaver but do not use their talent in the right place? I guess it is the former. So the negative effects produced by movies and TV overweigh its positive influence.

To sum up, under some situation, movies and TV could provide people with a relax environment. Whereas, in other situation they generate too many negative influence over the young people's behave and their future.

包子不包子

刚刚把6.15独立写完的几篇浏览了一下，发表些许感慨哇><

包子亲，现在用英文写文章绝对是信手拈来哇^^

这篇首先立意特别高，站在全球的视角。行文气势磅礴，波涛汹涌，看完直觉心胸开阔有木有！

再次，遣词造句也相当完美华丽，直接可当例文参考。So wonderful，全文下来，精彩不断。膜拜之！

最后，指出一小点错误：
1. Therefore,it is too harsh to jump to the conclusion thatmodern world definitely provides people with clear background in identifying career.
2. To sum up,changes produced by globalization and competition pressure created by growing population leads people to great difficulty in identifying their career to ensure a secure and successful future.

都是单复数的小问题啦！我的水平有限，实在挑不出旁的错来。值得肯定的是，这篇文章本身就很完美。

加油哦亲，看好你！认真向同志们学习！

-- by 会员 lunating (2012/6/16 10:34:13)

哈哈 谢谢指出的错误～
包子也在学习中啦 夸得那么完美都不好意思了
互相学习 互相学习恩

a273007862

6.15 独立
ML It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future

Population is soaring in every corner of the world. Revolution in technology is happening in every second. Myriad of brand new information is spreading among countries in every now and then. In all, things change so quickly. From my perspective, it is not as easy as in the past to identify the career in order to have a secure or successful future.

To begin with, every country is connected by globalization, which creates a complex environment for people to identify their career nowadays. Capital globalization, resources globalization and employee globalization, the world is an integral. Once the role of only one country changes on the global stage, unfortunate may spread out quickly to all the other countries in the world. People cannot predict what changes will appear in the next few years. Also it is hard to identify a career to secure their future success under such a complicated situation. Like the Great Depression, dark side of globalization, people with the most decent job, finical employees, end up to work as labors on the streets. Needless to discuss about their life’s secure and success in the future. Is their choice to be an accounting or investment analysts wrong? Apparently not, it is the changes on the global stage unable to assure their career success.

Another point owns the same value is that competition is even fiercer with one new life every three seconds to feed on earth. In every filed, especially in those that can ensure the success of an individual, hundreds of candidates are gathered together to compete for merely several position. People can never feel relief even they get a good job, chief or the leader of the whole medical department. There are always new and better candidates coming to compete for the job. Even the most inconspicuous mistake can be the reason for one to leave. At the first second, you though the bright future is right in your hand. The next second, you lost it. No matter what kind of difficulty and struggle you have been through when identifying a suitable job, with the soaring population and fierce competition people in modern world can never announce with confidence that they find a lifelong successful career.

Some people may argue that modern world creates thousands of new occupation for people. How can there be worry for identifying a secure job? However, please do not forget that variation of job has been increased, so does the population. Maybe there is a threefold in job variation. Population could be tenfold and competition either. Therefore, it is too harsh to jump to the conclusion that modern world definitely provide people with clear background in identifying career.

To sum up, changes produced by globalization and competition pressure created by growing population lead people to great difficulty in identifying their career to ensure a secure and successful future.

-- by 会员 包子不包子 (2012/6/15 16:42:54)

Population is soaring（我看很多文章用的都是soar up这个短语）in every corner of the world. Revolution in technology is happening in every second. Myriad of brand new information is spreading among countries in every now and then（in the future比较好吧~~）. In all, things change so quickly. From my perspective, it is not as easy as in the past to identify the career in order to have a secure or successful future.

To begin with, every （用each吧~~文章用了好多every~~）country is connected by globalization, which creates a complex environment for people to identify their career nowadays. Capital globalization, resources globalization and employee globalization, the world is an integral. Once the role of only one country changes on the global stage, unfortunate（这个词是形容词啊~~能做主语吗？用adversity怎么样~~） may spread out quickly to all the other countries in the world. People cannot predict what changes will appear in the next few years. Also it is hard to identify a career to secure their future success under such a complicated situation. Like the Great Depression, dark side of globalization, people with the most decent job, finical employees, end up to work as labors on the streets. Needless to discuss about their life’s secure and success in the future. Is their choice to be an accounting or investment analysts wrong? Apparently not, it is the changes on the global stage unable to assure their career success.

Another point owns the same value is that competition is even fiercer with one new life every three seconds to feed on earth. In every filed, especially in those that can ensure the success of an individual, hundreds of candidates are gathered together to compete for merely several position（单复数问题~~）. People can never feel relief even they get a good job, chief or the leader of the whole medical department. There are always new and better candidates coming to compete for the job. Even the most inconspicuous mistake can be the reason for one to leave. At the first second, you though the bright future is right in your hand. The next second, you lost it. No matter what kind of difficulty and struggle you have been through when identifying a suitable job, with the soaring population and fierce competition people in modern world can never announce with confidence that they find a lifelong successful career.

Some people may argue that（定冠词~~） modern world creates thousands of new occupation（单复数~~） for people. How can there be worry for identifying a secure job? However, please do not forget that variation of job has been increased, so does the population. Maybe there is a threefold in job variation. Population could be tenfold and competition either. Therefore, it is too harsh to jump to the conclusion that modern world definitely provide people with clear background in identifying career.

To sum up, changes produced by globalization and competition pressure created by growing population lead people to great difficulty in identifying their career to ensure a secure and successful future

写得好好~~

特别是用词上面，用了很多类似排比的东西啊例子啊·~

我写文章比较喜欢用身边简单的例子说事情，不像你的你的文章很深刻哦~~

印象最深是倒数第二段，基本上每句话都带个连词好好~~
黄色是好词好句型~~改你的文章好受意
你的文章很深奥 有点像g的作文 呵呵~~

kchszy061ban

Have you ever seen a bunch of young students rushing to the cinema just for a one hour comedy? Have you ever noticed that the youngest child in the family prefers to watch TV all day alone rather than hang out with friends? Have you ever discovered that coach potatoes tend to appear among the young? If so. It is evident（you can see how）that movies and television have more negative effects on the way young people behave.

To begin with, there is too much information in movies nowadays that are not suitable for the young（youth当然形容词作名字还是可以的）. Extremely violate scene（s）, actors’ smoking and cheating selfishly for personal interests gradually impress deeply into the young’s heart（brain）. They are too immature to distinguish right from wrong. Maybe they smoke for showing their brave. Maybe they fight with each other for exhibiting their sense of unity. Maybe they cheat on others' feelings merely for fun. However, no matter what the initiate of those behaviors are, movies produce negative influence on the young's actions and health（heathy development）. Can people pretend to be okay when they see the strong and active young people wondering on streets smoking and fighting with others and have nothing to do? In this way, movies indeed produce more negative effects over the young's behavior.

Another equally significant view is that watching TV impairs the communicating skill of the young. Coach potatoes are the best examples. They stay at home from day to night. Except staring at the screen, nowhere else do they give a single glance. Moreover, seldom do they step out of home, seldom do they talk to another person.. Consequently, coach potatoes lose all their friends and what is worse they will experience great difficulty in communicating with others because they seldom open their mouth. Besides, their health conditions are declining and all kinds of diseases can appear at each second. For the young people, there is no exception for them if they watch too much TV and become addicted as a coach potato. No social communication, have no idea about how to communication with others and even possibly be caught by mental disease. All the results are likely to happen with the increasingly stronger influence of TV. Accordingly, TV produce more negative influence over the young people's behave as movies do.（这个例子是不错，不过这些例子太特殊不？我觉得是不是应该把这个现象普遍化后，才能更好的支持观点）

Admittedly, some people may against my point by insisting that the young can learn the latest information form TV in all fields and movie is the most efficient way for the young to relax. However, compared with the negative effects they produce（这个貌似没写玩的样子）. Do people what a healthy and positive generation or a generation that is inner going and cleaver but do not use their talent in the right place? I guess it is the former. So the negative effects produced by movies and TV over（out是不是更合适一点）weigh its positive influence.

To sum up, under some situation, movies and TV could provide people with a relax environment. Whereas, in other situation they generate too many negative influence over the young people's behave and their future（这个future，用意就不清晰了）.

包子的作文很明显已经很好了，我是硬找错误来的，嘿嘿，不要怪我哈。

然后就是个人觉得包子的例子和例证过程显得有些不是很自然，我指的不是例子本身，而是，例子和观点之间的衔接要更自然一点。

看没人给我改啦，就改改你的，欢迎来批。

包子不包子

Have you ever seen a bunch of young students rushing to the cinema just for a one hour comedy? Have you ever noticed that the youngest child in the family prefers to watch TV all day alone rather than hang out with friends? Have you ever discovered that coach potatoes tend to appear among the young? If so. It is evident（you can see how）that movies and television have more negative effects on the way young people behave.

To begin with, there is too much information in movies nowadays that are not suitable for the young（youth当然形容词作名字还是可以的）. Extremely violate scene（s）, actors’ smoking and cheating selfishly for personal interests gradually impress deeply into the young’s heart（brain）. They are too immature to distinguish right from wrong. Maybe they smoke for showing their brave. Maybe they fight with each other for exhibiting their sense of unity. Maybe they cheat on others' feelings merely for fun. However, no matter what the initiate of those behaviors are, movies produce negative influence on the young's actions and health（heathy development）. Can people pretend to be okay when they see the strong and active young people wondering on streets smoking and fighting with others and have nothing to do? In this way, movies indeed produce more negative effects over the young's behavior.

Another equally significant view is that watching TV impairs the communicating skill of the young. Coach potatoes are the best examples. They stay at home from day to night. Except staring at the screen, nowhere else do they give a single glance. Moreover, seldom do they step out of home, seldom do they talk to another person.. Consequently, coach potatoes lose all their friends and what is worse they will experience great difficulty in communicating with others because they seldom open their mouth. Besides, their health conditions are declining and all kinds of diseases can appear at each second. For the young people, there is no exception for them if they watch too much TV and become addicted as a coach potato. No social communication, have no idea about how to communication with others and even possibly be caught by mental disease. All the results are likely to happen with the increasingly stronger influence of TV. Accordingly, TV produce more negative influence over the young people's behave as movies do.（这个例子是不错，不过这些例子太特殊不？我觉得是不是应该把这个现象普遍化后，才能更好的支持观点）

Admittedly, some people may against my point by insisting that the young can learn the latest information form TV in all fields and movie is the most efficient way for the young to relax. However, compared with the negative effects they produce（这个貌似没写玩的样子）. Do people what a healthy and positive generation or a generation that is inner going and cleaver but do not use their talent in the right place? I guess it is the former. So the negative effects produced by movies and TV over（out是不是更合适一点）weigh its positive influence.

To sum up, under some situation, movies and TV could provide people with a relax environment. Whereas, in other situation they generate too many negative influence over the young people's behave and their future（这个future，用意就不清晰了）.

包子的作文很明显已经很好了，我是硬找错误来的，嘿嘿，不要怪我哈。

然后就是个人觉得包子的例子和例证过程显得有些不是很自然，我指的不是例子本身，而是，例子和观点之间的衔接要更自然一点。

看没人给我改啦，就改改你的，欢迎来批。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/17 17:08:44)

谢谢勤劳的ban的修改
包子的逻辑方面尤其还需要提高
其实都是有待提高的 恩恩 同努力！

包子不包子

6月17日110115 NA
写得有点多 超时了T.T
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of a university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

University professor is a special job. Not like high school teachers, they are responsible to do research, part for their career, part for the scientific field. Not like specialists, they have to give lecturers to students. It is also their duty to educate the most power and active generation of the country. Therefore, whether the main role of a university professor is educating students or doing research is hard to distinguish. Personally, I would like to say it is doing research.

To begin with, new results of the research could advance students' study in certain field; even they can change the education system in universities. As on one can assure that all the knowledge told in university and all the educational system used at schools are one hundred percent correct, doing research to modify the system and to beautify the knowledge seems to be extremely needed. Consequently, the main role of professors is clear-doing research. A education field professor can claim with the results of his research that the most popular education method is sufficient and even impairing students' cavity. An education revolution can be generated. A chemical field professor can declare with the support of his research that the outcome of most famous equation in the field is not precise and he comes up with a better one. Because of this, students have to learn all the related knowledge again. It can be seem that the power of research is unbelievable. Educational revolution, hundreds of thousands students' re-studying and maybe the findings are possible to cause another revolution in the new century. So doing research is more important that educate students for a university professor.

Another point is equally significant is a university will become famous and professional due to the results of several researches. Every now and then, people can watch on the TV that a new equation in physics is found by professors in certain university, people can read in the newspaper that a fresh human organ for medical study is produced by a group of professors in another university. Even on the advertisement board in the streets and moving cars rushing on the roads, people can see information for promoting the research result of universities. How can people not be influenced by the research made by universities? University with more research results gradually becomes familiar with the public. Parents are willing to send their children to these schools and skillful professors are eager to work with those who work in such kind of university. No wonder, a university can make a great leap with the assistance of merely several research results. Accordingly, it is of great importance for professors to contribute them more in doing research.

Admittedly, some people may argue that educating students is teachers' nature. Why should they throw that away? Imagine there is no research for a long time, and students just keep learning. Once a new discovery in a research comes out and pointing out the mistake that all the students is studying. What will happen? All the working is in vain. There is no fault to say that professors should pay more attention in doing research.

To sum up, for the development of the university and the efficient studying of students, doing research outweighs the importance of educating students.

bestshanshan

6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
 
     On contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T effects on the way young people, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.
     Basic to personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, the children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme,such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”
    In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota. Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale.
   Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them, I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for young generation.

包子不包子

6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

     On contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T effects on the way young people, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.
     Basic to personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, the children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme,such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”
    In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota. Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale.
   Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them, I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for young generation.

-- by 会员 bestshanshan (2012/6/17 21:36:28)

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

On in contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive explosion era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T首次缩写要有全称说明 effects on the way young people behave, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.


Basic to based on ?personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that which? brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, the children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme programs, such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”

可以对bad habit展开一下显得更有力段尾可以加上一句话总结点题


In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota.

这一段的topic观点很好表述也非常好但是少支持论点的论据少细节分析



Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale. So 再次陈述强调观点让步段可以重起一段



Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons reasons mentioned above, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them,表述很好但是包子没看懂是要说明什么…I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for the young generation.



文章整体的措辞句型都没的说结构明晰

但是段落内缺少细例证节支持论点这点很重要啊要有说服力

包子不包子

6月18日101017 大陆

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.



Looking at people around you, how many of them do not stay up in order to approach the project? How many of them do not rush to the bus station every morning? How many of them do not eat fast food as lunch for squeezing more time to studying or working. People are under gradually increasing pressure. Relax becomes the most popular among people naturally. Personally, I would like to say that doing physical exercises is better for relaxation.



To begin with, doing physical exercise like basketball and soccer is a kind of communication and a way of making new friends who may share the same interest with you. By several people playing basketball together outdoor, people need the spirit of team work. Not only players gain the opportunities to exercises in the open air, strengthening their bodies and relaxing their mind, but also they obtain the chance to communicate other player in the same team, understanding new people and even realizing your boss outside work in their normal daily life. No boss will criticize their employees when playing hockey, with such kind of cooperation and assistance, I have to say that relaxation is not the only benefit you have gotten. Kill birds with one stone. How can people not enjoy physical exercises as their method to relax?



Another equally important point is that doing physical exercise helps people to build good physical condition of their body no matter what is their initiate. Life's meaning lies in motion, the saying is not coming from nowhere. If one is tired and sad, he can go running. By reaching the same goal in a shorter time compared with before, feelings of satisfaction and achievement will emerge. In this way, the purpose of relaxation has accomplished, sadness has gone and the body's physical condition has be improved, which is a kind of insurance in people' further studying and working. Can sick people complete the same amount of work in a limited time as a health people do? Apparently, they cannot. Accordingly, it is better to relax by doing physical exercises.



Some people may argue that by reading books and watching movies, people are capable to learn knowledge. After a whole day of busy work, no wonder learning new knowledge becomes a tough question for people because of the over using of brain in the day. Anyway, doing physical exercises looks like a wise choice.



To sum up, doing physical exercises can fulfill people's aim in relaxing and also it is possible to benefit people in other kinds of approach. Why should people not chose do physical exercises a good way to relax?