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晨依Jacqueline

TPO1 综合
A new policy concentrated on a four-day work week is discussed by the reading text and the listening material. As the reading passage supports working four days a week is beneficial to company profit, economy condition and life of employees, the lecturer think it does not hold water and he gives three reasons.



In the first place, it is said by the speaker that a four-day work policy can force the company spend more. Not only do they need to put a great deal of money on training new employees, but they also have to cost more on the additional office space and computers. Another thing we cannot ignore is that the four-day work employees are in need of the same health care paid by the company as before. Hence, the saying of raising the company's profit is not supportive.



Secondly, the listening material contradicts to the idea of reading passage for the four-day work policy prevents the economy condition from turning better. According to the listening passage, employees who work only four days a week have more choices available and other options for work. Moreover, the policy may lead to the raise of the expectations of a company, which they expect an employee who works four days a week can do as much work as five days. Overall, it does not improve the job opportunities, and the current life is not happy, either.



Finally, the professor argues against the point that life of employees can be improved in a large degree. The more spare time employees have, the more risks they will take. Plus, the decreased working time may cause the four-day work employee get the risk to lose the job when economy turns down.

Crystaljoy

TPO24 综合修改

我这篇看完文章时一片茫然，还有生词，但是记录了每点的关键词。听着听着就逐渐清晰了，写之前又看看文章才算大彻大悟了。生命科学类的真是我的软肋啊。。。

What the reading material and the listening passage are both concentrating（concentrate 进行时要谨慎用吧） on the discovery of dinasour(dinosaur) fossil T-rex, a 70-million-year-old leg bone of dinasour(dinosaur). As we can learn from the reading text, the new discovery is of great value; in contrast, the lecturer regard（regards） the identification(?小别扭，这里怎么理解呢) skeptical.

To begin with, there are small branch channels on the leg bone containing blood vessel, which prove the location of the dinasour(dinosaur),（which指代？prove the location，我没有听到。） according to the reading text. But the listening content denies that point for the blood vessels may be something else. （小心deny哦~ deny soft substance, admit something else.）The lecturer says that when the organ dies, bacterium will appear（accumulate） on the leg bone, from some researches and reading statistics.(容易产生appear from 的歧义，建议把from 改成after) So it cannot be concluded that the soft vessels are rescued.(你写这点我没听到哦，但是从阅读第一段的中心句可以看出主要是哪三个观点，依次遭到教授否定thereby exposing its insides to reveal materials that seem to be remains of blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen matrix.因此我觉得是: So it cannot be concluded that the soft substance is remains of blood vessels.)


In the second place, it is said in the reading that after examining parts of the inner bone, there is presence of spheres and red blood cells which is the best description.(the presence of spheres and red blood cells is the best explanation for red blood cells. 这个There be 建议谨慎用，它表示自然存在，在G语法中很啰嗦很不受欢迎呢)While the lecturer argues against the idea. He maintains (by maintaining 可以连接起来)that fossils of primitate(primitive?) animals do not have spheres, and the identical appeared the organition(?) should not remain red blood cells. What is more, he make (makes) a brave suppose (supposition) that the so-called red blood cell is some kind of redish mirror. (haha~~这个什么东西我也没听清，像mineral)


Thirdly, the reading material supports the point of view by the containing of collagen. It describes that the collagen is find（found） in association with bone tissue. This saying is also contradicted（contradictory） to the lecturer's mind. He does not think that collagen lasts longer than 100 thousand years, not to mention a history over 70 million years. Hence, the collagen found in the T-rex is likely to be from much recent source or maybe it is discovered because the contact of people's skin（when） handling the bone.


In conclusion, the listening material strongly contradict (contradicts) with the reading passage for three reasons above concerning the T-rex.

晨依Jacqueline

O(∩_∩)O谢谢鸟儿姐姐先~
我觉得我的综合写的好没感觉啊，除了知道两个材料的关系之外其他的要点什么的都是云里雾里的。。。
我今天从网上搜了一个原文，边看边听边看看你给我修改的吧~
你的作文我都改不出什么东西来，写的太好了呀。

晨依Jacqueline

贴一篇从网上搜的TPO24 解析吧~
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阅读材料：

Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently when it appeared that a 70-million-year-old fossil of Tyrannosaurus rex (T. rex), a dinosaur, might still contain remains of the actual tissues of the animal. The discovery was made when researchers deliberately broke open the T. rex’s leg bone, thereby exposing its insides to reveal materials that seem to be remains of blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen matrix.

动物化石很难帮助人们研究动物的软组织，这是因为化石里面的动物活性组织大部分都被矿物质代替了。最近，发现一个7千万年前的霸王龙化石中可能存在真正的动物软组织。这令科学家们非常兴奋。科学家小心翼翼地打开了霸王龙腿骨的时候，发现里面存在着可能为血管、血红细胞和胶原蛋白基质的物质。

First, the breaking of the fossilized leg bone revealed many small branching channels inside, which probably correspond to hollows in the bones where blood vessels were once located. The exciting finding was the presence of a soft, flexible organic substance inside the channels. This soft substance may very well represent the remains of the actual blood vessels of T. rex.

首先，打开腿骨化石之后，科学家发现了内部有一些管状分支，这些管状分支可能是骨内血管存在的地方。令人兴奋的是在这些管状分支中存在着柔软的有机物质。这些柔软的物质可能是霸王龙真正血管的遗留痕迹。

Second, microscopic examination of the various parts of the inner bone revealed the presence of spheres that could be the remains of red blood cells. Tests showed that the spheres contained iron – a material vital to the role of red blood cells in transporting oxygen to tissues. Moreover, the spheres had dark red centers (substances with iron tend to be reddish in color) and were also about the size of red blood cells.

第二，通过显微镜对骨内部多处进行详细检查之后发现了一些可能是血红细胞化石的球状体。检测发现这些球状体里面还有铁，而铁在血红细胞往组织内输送氧气的过程中扮演重要角色。而且，这些球状体中间呈红色，而含有铁元素的物质往往是红色的，同时这些球状体的大小也符合血红细胞。

Third, scientists performed a test on the dinosaur leg bone that showed that it contained collagen. Collagen is a fibrous protein that is a main component of living bone tissue, in which it forms a so-called collagen matrix. Collagen (or its chemical derivatives) is exactly the kind of biochemical material that one would expect to find in association with bone tissue.

第三，科学家的测试发现这个恐龙腿骨化石中还有胶原蛋白。胶原蛋白是一种纤维化蛋白质，是生物骨组织的重要组成部分，以胶原蛋白基质的形式存在。胶原蛋白或者其衍生物是一种存在于骨骼软组织中的生化物质。

阅读部分需要提取的观点是：

- Main point: 科学家在研究霸王龙腿骨化石的时候，发现里面存在着可能为血管、血红细胞和胶原蛋白基质的物质。

- Sub point 1: 化石中有血管

- Sub point 2: 化石中有血红细胞

- Sub point 3: 化石中有胶原蛋白



听力材料：

As much as we would like to have the remains of actual dinosaur tissue, there are sound reasons for being skeptical of the identifications made in the reading.

尽管我们都希望这些化石是真正的恐龙组织，但是还是有一些很有说服力的理由让我们怀疑阅读部分的发现。

First, the soft, flexible substance inside the bone channels isn’t necessarily the remains of blood vessels. It is much more likely to be something else. Like what? You might say. Well, long after an organism is died, bacteria sometimes colonize hollows, empty areas in bones, like the channels that once held blood vessels. When bacteria lived inside bones, they often leave behind traces of organic material. What the researchers in the reading are identifying as blood vessels might just be traces of soft and moist residue left by bacteria colonies.

首先，骨管内柔软而有延展性的物质不一定就是血管的化石。它更大的可能性是别的东西。那是什么呢？你们可能会问。恩，在有机体死亡很久之后，细菌可能会聚集在骨骼里的空洞的地方，比如那些曾经是血管存在的地方。当细菌在骨骼内部繁殖后，细菌常常会留下有机物质的痕迹。在阅读部分，研究人员鉴定为血管的物质很可能就是细菌繁殖后留下的湿软残渣的痕迹。

All right. What about the iron-filled spheres? Well, the problem is that scientists found identical reddish spheres in fossils of other animals found in the same place. That includes fossils of primitive animals that did not have any red blood cells when they were alive. Clearly, if these spheres appear in organisms that did not have any red blood cells, then the spheres cannot be the remains of red blood cells. The spheres probably have a very different origin. They are probably just pieces of reddish mineral.

恩，那么那些含铁的球状体呢？问题在于科学家们在同一个地方发现了其他还有动物的还有红色球状体的化石。这些化石中有的是属于一些活着的时候没有任何血红细胞的低等动物。显然，如果这些球状体出现在那些没有任何血红细胞的动物化石组织里的话，那么这些球状物就不可能是血红细胞的残留物。这些球状体可能有完全不同的来源。它们可能只是一些红色矿物质颗粒。

Third, the collagen. The problem is that we have never found collagen in animal remains that are older than one hundred thousand years. Collagen probably cannot last longer than that. Finding collagen from an animal that lived seventy million years ago would really contradict our ideas about how long collagen can last. It is just too improbable. The most likely explanation for the presence of collagen is that it doesn’t come from the T.rex, but from another much more recent source. For example, human skin contains collagen, so the collagen may have come from the skin of the researchers who are handling the bone.

第三，胶原蛋白。问题在于我们从来没有在超过十万年的动物化石中发现胶原蛋白。胶原蛋白可能不能存在超过一万年。在生活在七千万年前的动物化石里发现胶原蛋白是同我们对于胶原蛋白存在时间的认识相矛盾的。这种可能性太低了。最为合理的解释是这些胶原蛋白不是来自于霸王龙，而是来自于其他的，更近的来源。比如，人类的皮肤中还有胶原蛋白，所以这些胶原蛋白可能来自于那些处理化石的研究人员的皮肤。

听力部分需要提取的观点是：

- Main point: 阅读部分的发现是值得怀疑的

- Sub point 1: 细菌会侵袭死亡有机体，研究人员鉴定为血管的部分可能是细菌的遗迹

- Sub point 2: 含铁红色球状物在其他没有血红细胞的动物化石中也有发现，可能是矿物颗粒

- Sub point 3: 胶原蛋白不可能存在那么长时间，很可能来自于研究人员

晨依Jacqueline

TPO2 综合
In the reading material, it is obvious to say that teamwork is the best way of approaching certain new projects as a group of people offer several advantages. On the contrary, the lecturer mentions a result on teamwork by a company to contradict the idea in the reading passage for two main points.

Initially, from the conclusion of the reading text, a group work brings wider range of knowledge, expertise and skills than individuals. More resources and more efficient in similarity. However, the team which was responsible for the planning project was found worked down on how they perform during six months, according to the research by a company mentioned by the lecturer. A few people were on "free ride", which made no contribution to the project at all. So the listening material denies the profitability of the teamwork. What's more, he thinks the jobs as whole no names were named and how the group member feel about the group process was completely opposite to the prediction in the reading.  

Moreover, it is said that a group dividing is rewarding and personal ideas can be recognized highly. But, the lecturer claims that the meeting of group members is totally of no use to move the project well because people are prone to be influenced by each other. When influenced by others, some ideas might be dropped instead of a further discussion. Substantially this moving directions prevents the work and those who are thought highly creative was ignored by others, different with the reading predicts. At the end when the project failed, group members blamed on all.

In all, the listening material puts an opposite attitude on the points mentioned in the reading.

prodliu

In the reading material, it is obvious to say thatteamwork is the best way of (while) approachingcertain new projects, as a group of people offerseveral advantages. On the contrary, the lecturer mentions a result (experiment) on teamworkconducted by a company to contradict the idea in the reading passage fortwo main points.(应该是三点吧)

Initially, from （basedon）the conclusion of（from） thereading text, a group work brings wider range of knowledge, expertise andskills than individuals（还是补充谓语动词更好，do）. More resources and more efficient in similarity（这句话我不知道你想表达的是什么意思）. However, the team which was responsible for theplanning project was found worked down on how they perform during six months, (这句我也不清楚你的意思是什么)according to the research performedby a company mentioned by the lecturer. A few people were on "freeride", which made no contribution to the project at all. So the listeningmaterial denies the profitability of the teamwork. What's more, he thinks thejobs as whole no names were named and how the group member feel about the groupprocess was completely opposite to the prediction in the reading.  

Moreover, it is said that a group dividing is rewardingand personal ideas can be recognized highly. But, the lecturer claims that themeeting of group members is totally of no use to move the project well becausepeople are prone to be influenced by each other. When influenced by others,some ideas might be dropped instead of a further discussion. Substantially thismoving directions prevents the work and those who are thought highly creativewas ignored by others, different with the reading predicts. At the end when theproject failed, group members blamed on all.

All in all, the listening material puts an opposite attitudeon the points mentioned in the reading.

我觉得首先，文章中给了三点支持，听力中肯定是三点反对，所以应该是从三方面写，上来就说two main points会一上来就让判分的人觉得你遗漏要点了。其次，我觉得综合写作还是有一个固定的模式比较好，我一般习惯上来先说听力中的观点，然后说一下细节，最后总结与阅读里的关系。文中的这两段安排有点乱，建议把观点弄清后重新安排一下。

晨依Jacqueline

To prodliu~
我是把文章粘到word里了就看的是两段，所以听听力的时候观点也感觉很混乱……然后吧你没有看懂的两句是我想弄个同义改写来着，结果写的我自己再读的时候都觉得很难理解了。。。我今天听写了一遍这个文章，大体意思都了解了，我有空的时候再整理一下谢谢你啦~~

晨依Jacqueline

TPO3 综合
It is heated discussed whether a painting was painted by Rembrandt by both of the reading and the listening. The reading text conveys the suspecious of the reality of that painting; on the contrary, the lecturer proves the painting was indeed worked by Rembrandt.



First of all, the reading material points out some details of the dressing of the woman in the portrait got wrong, However, the lecturer casts that the color was not part of what the original painting. And the color actually painted over the layer of the original painting after a hundred years because someone wanted to increase the value of the former paint. So we can conclude that doubts from the reading was based on the addition of the painting.



Secondly, as Rembrandt was a master of light and shadow, the reading passage raises the doubts on the shadow of the woman's face. But the professor explains that the painting was removed after color added to the layer, which affected the shadow and light,. The truth is, we can see from the original paint that the woman worn simple cloth and light colored on the face. The realistic painting was in good light and shadow like what we expect Rembrandt is.



Finally, the reading argues that the painting was made of several pieces of wood glued together, which is not the same with Rembrandt's style. In contrast, the lecturer says that the wood panel was enlarged and added with extra glue to made it more grand and valuable. The original painting was painted in single piece of wood, which was examined the same with the wood R used in his former paintings.



In sum, the lecturer explains the doubts raised by the reading text and proves the reality that the painting was indeed painted by Rembrandt.

晨依Jacqueline

刚才做了篇听写，才发现自己TPO3听的差太多了啊……
collar听成color，fur听成four，要点也记不全……

越人歌

It is heated discussed whether a painting was painted by Rembrandt by both of the reading and the listening. The reading text conveys the suspecioussuspicious of the reality of that painting; on the contrary, the lecturer proves the painting was indeed worked by Rembrandt.




First of all, the reading material points out some details of the dressing of the woman in the portrait got wrong. However, the lecturer casts that the color was not part of what the original painting. And the color (这里有点重复了，可以改成直接用It 代替)was actually painted over the layer of the original painting after a hundred years because someone wanted to increase the value of the former paint. So we can conclude that doubts from the reading waswere based on the addition of the painting.



Secondly, as Rembrandt was a master of light and shadow, the reading passage raises the doubts on the shadow of the woman's face. But the professor explains that the painting was removed after color added to the layer, which affected the shadow and light. The truth is, we can see from the original paint that the woman worn simple cloth and light colored on the face. The realistic painting was in good light and shadow like what we expect Rembrandt is（这句话貌似并列成分有问题，我觉得应该是the painting is like what we expect Rembrandt’s painting is ）.



Finally, the reading argues that the painting was made of several pieces of wood glued together, which is not the same with Rembrandt's style. In contrast, the lecturer says that the wood panel was enlarged and added with extra glue to mademake it more grand and valuable. The original painting was painted in single piece of wood, which was examined the same with the wood R used in his former paintings.



In sum, the lecturer explains the doubts raised by the reading text and proves the reality that the painting was indeed painted by Rembrandt.

晨依的语言越来越老练了呢，没有什么太大问题，就是有一些点没有听出来，所以解释得也比较含糊，这篇确实很让人痛苦啊，我也在纠结中呢。。。。一起加油吧