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Crystaljoy

Music 怎么出现那么诡异的广告？

晨依Jacqueline

Music 怎么出现那么诡异的广告？

-- by 会员 Crystaljoy (2012/2/28 13:20:53)

That's just a joke....
Just ignore it....

晨依Jacqueline

2月28日 独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to choose friends that could have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you are in need.

As a proverb goes that a friend indeed is a friend in need, I prefer a friend that will help me when I am in troube(trouble) to the one who will have fun with me. Three reasons are listed below.

Priorily(Priorly), making friends is a process of learning good characters and qualities from others. Life is just like a mirror, a friend's behavior reflects what we lack and need ourselves. Thus, a friend who is willing to help us when we are in need is beneficial to our personal developmet(development) because we can learn some experience and good characters from such a friend. For example, the friend I treasure most, Lucy, is always giving me advice and try her best to solve my problems. And in fact, I've learned a lot from her intelligence. On the contrary, owning a friend who is reluctant to help you when you have troubles, or even blame on your fault is not worth treature(treasure).

In the second place, choosing a real friend who will give a hand when a person is in dilemma is an accumulation of one's social resource. As we all know, a well-being interpersonal relationship plays an important role in making decisions nowadays. Under this circumstance, the defination(definition) of a true friend is not only the one who is at your companion but also the one who helps you out of difficulties. From my own experience, once I needed money badly, my firend(friend) supported me a lot finacially(financially), and moreover, he helped me get my first job. I am very thankful for his help and I regard him as the best friend in my life.

Admittedly, some people argue that friendship should not be related to persuing(pursuing) one's profit, especially in the modern society. They insist that sharing interest with friends is better than helping each other. Though there are many people chasing their own goals by making use of their closest friends, what I claim for is that choosing a friend does not mean only to get profits from one's friend. Generally speaking, everyone has the responsibility to make friends in a sincere heart and it is more essential to choose a friend who is ardent when others in need.

To conclude, a friend who is willing to help when we are in trouble is more welcome than the one who only has fun with us every day. Furthermore, we can enrich ourselves by learning good qualities from them and develop a better social resource. That is to say it is more important to choose friends that could help you when you are in dilemma than choose friends that could only share common interests with.

jiaosisisisi

2月28日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to choose friends that could have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you are in need.

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/2/28 20:39:57)

我大胆猜测，你肯定要后者。。。。。。firstly，secondly，thirdly，to sum up~~~~

晨依Jacqueline

2月28日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to choose friends that could have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you are in need.

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/2/28 20:39:57)

我大胆猜测，你肯定要后者。。。。。。firstly，secondly，thirdly，to sum up~~~~

-- by 会员 jiaosisisisi (2012/2/28 20:41:47)

猜对一半，详见上文，谢谢参与。

晨依Jacqueline

2月26日作文的整理
No one would deny that one may make a large number of mistakes during his life. I totally agree with the statement that parents should allow their children to make mistakes in order to let them learn from their own mistakes. Three reasons are listed below.

At the beginning, making mistakes helps children learn more than they are taught by parents. So it is important for parents to encourage children to learn experience from their failures, and then children will hardly make the same mistake again. There's a proverb saying that failure is the mother of success. Just take the famous scientist Edison, who invented bulbs, as an example. It was the mistakes he made in the previous experiment and the constant experience that led to his final success of such outstanding invention. In contrast,he would never keep on his research any more, and thushe wouldn't get to know what materials on earth can expand the life of bulbs.


In the second place, parents' experience are not suitable for every situation their childrenmeet with, even some advice which used to be correct. Living in a fast changing society, the generation gap is becoming larger and larger. Thus,Parents' ideas are no longer the best ones for children.Once I had some difficulties in finishing my essays, my father suggested me that I make a copy from my classmates, just as what he had done in college life, and then have some details revised.However, itenraged(好词！！Thx，noarkid~) my tutorand I only got a very low mark. Not until that thing happened did I realize that the advice from parents might not be the best oneand I should obtain treasure experience from my own mistakes.

What's more, making a summary of the previous failurebenefits children by enriching their life experience.From my point of view, parents have the responsibility to instruct children's behavior, but not to prevent(stop/keep/block) them from making mistakes. My mother never gets angry about my mistake even if it has a detrimental influence. Instead, she helps me analyze problems and make a conclusion from my errors. As far as I'm concerned, looking back the mistakes we have made is the best way to avoid making new mistakes.

In sum, it is of great significance for parents to allow their children to make a few mistakes. From the previous failures, children can learn a lot of experience which is indispensable to their future development.

prodliu

As a proverb goes that a friend indeed is a friend in need, I prefer a friend that will help me when I am in troube(trouble)还是用need好吧，需要的时候不一定就是有trouble的时候 to the one （prefer to要一致prefer a friend 后面to 也要泛指不能特指the one，改成one）only aim for having fun with me. To substantiate my standpoint, three reasons are listed below.


Priorily(Priorly), making friends is a process of learning absorbing吸取更好一些吧 good characters and qualities from others. Life is没有is吧 just likes a mirror, a friend's behavior reflects what we lack and need ourselves. Thus, a friend who is willing to help us when we are in need is beneficial to our personal development because we can learn some experience and good characters from such a friend. For example, the friend I treasure most, Lucy, is always giving me advice and try her best to 改成spend no effort to好一些 solve my problems. And in fact, I've learned a lot from her intelligence. On the contrary, owning a friend who is reluctant to help you when you have troubles, or even blame on your fault is not worth treature(treasure).


In the second place In addition前面没有in the first place, choosing a real friend who will give a hand when a person is in dilemma is an accumulation of one's social resource. As we all know, a well-being interpersonal relationship plays an important role in making decisions nowadays. Under this circumstance, the defination(definition) of a true friend is not only a person who is at your companion but also who helps you to get rid of difficulties. From my own experience, once I needed money badly, my firend(friend) supported me a lot finacially(financially), and moreover, he helped me get my first job. I am very thankful for his help and I regard him as the best friend in my life.


Admittedly, some people argue that friendship should not be related to persuing(pursuing) one's profit, especially in the modern society. They insist that sharing interest with friends is better than helping each other. Though there are many people chasing their own goals by making use of their closest friends, what I claim for is that choosing a friend does not mean only to get profits from one's删去 friend. Generally speaking, everyone has the responsibility to make friends in a sincere heart and it is more essential to choose a friend who is ardent when others in need.


To conclude, a friend who is willing to help when we are in trouble is more welcome than someone who only has fun with us every day. Furthermore, we can enrich ourselves by learning good qualities from them and develop a better social resource. That is to say it is more important to choose friends that could help you when you are in dilemma than choose friends that could only share common interests with.

prodliu

我觉得让步转折后面再写一段可以更充实些

晨依Jacqueline

我觉得让步转折后面再写一段可以更充实些

-- by 会员 prodliu (2012/2/28 22:02:58)

O(∩_∩)O谢谢prodliu 我明天综合两个一起修改~~嘻嘻嘻有劳啦

蝴蝶渡海

As a proverb goes that a friend indeed is a friend in need（此处谚语是否应当为A friend in need is a friend indeed）, I prefer a friend that will help me when I am in troube(trouble)（此处用trouble跟原文意思是否有出入呢？可否换成necessary或者直接原文的need） to the one who will have fun with me. Three reasons are listed below.

Priorily(Priorly), making friends is a process of learning good characters and qualities from others. Life is just like a mirror, a friend's behavior reflects what we lack and need ourselves. Thus, a friend who is willing to help us when we are in need is beneficial to our personal developmet(development) because we can learn some experience and good characters from such a friend. For example, the friend I treasure(是否应当为treasured，我记得不是太清楚了，看到后最好能跟我说一下） most, Lucy, is always giving me advice and try（是否为trying或者tries） her best to solve my problems. And in fact, I've learned a lot from her intelligence. On the contrary, owning a friend who is reluctant to help you when you have troubles, or even blame on your fault is not worth treature(treasure).

In the second place, choosing a real friend who will give a hand when a person is in dilemma is an accumulation of one's social resource. As we all know, a well-being interpersonal relationship plays an important（换成vital或者critical，essential个人觉得能新颖一些 ）role in making decisions nowadays. Under this circumstance, the defination(definition) of a true friend is not only the one who is at your companion but also the one who helps you out of difficulties（dilemma能更好些）. From my own experience, once I needed money badly, my firend(friend) supported me a lot finacially(financially), and moreover, he helped me get my first job. I am very thankful for his help and I regard him as the best friend in my life.

Admittedly, some people argue that friendship should not be related to persuing(pursuing) one's profit, especially in the modern society. They insist that sharing interest with friends is better than helping each other. Though there are many people chasing their own goals by making use of their closest friends, what I claim for is that choosing a friend does not mean only to get profits from one's friend. Generally speaking, everyone has the responsibility to make friends in a sincere heart and it is more essential to choose a friend who is ardent（我隐约记得这个词多用于爱情的炽热等等，是否欠妥当还应当深究） when others in need.

To conclude, a friend who is willing to help when we are in trouble is more welcome than the one who only has fun with us every day. Furthermore, we can enrich ourselves by learning good qualities from them(这里的代词是否应该与前面的a friend对应呢？) and develop a better social resource. That is to say it is more important to choose friends that could help you when you are in dilemma than choose friends that could only share common interests with.


谢谢你帮我认真的修改文章，我甚是感激。也从中学到了不少东西积累了一些词句经验。我这第一次给别人评论，限于自身的水平难能再给你特别多的经验。如能写出你这么好的英文文章已是满足。
文章整体感觉已是浑然天成了，整齐的结构，清晰的逻辑，流利的语言，合理的理据真是让我羡慕。在这些方面我确实无法给您更多的建议了。以后还可能多多麻烦你帮我修改文章了，一起进步。
PS：如何在回复栏使用不同的颜色哇，像你给我改的似地。我在word里面改完粘到这里也不行啊。有空再Q上跟你聊聊