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发表于 2005-3-17 15:24:00 | 只看该作者

TWE005 第一次用模版写作文,请使劲批!

When asked the problem that whether you approve a factory to be built near our community, people always face the dilemma to choose the idea of a factory to be built near our community or disapproving this idea. Quite a few people believe that building a factory near our community will bring more benefits, on the other hand, some people might choose to prohibit to build the factory. According to my personal experience, emotional concern and personality type, I prefer to support the idea that a factory will be built near our community. Because there are too many benefits that outnumbers its disadvantage.



There is numerous reasons why I choose the idea of a factory to be built near our community. And I would here explain a few of the most important ones. The essential reason can be seen by most people is that a new factory near our community will help improve living standard of people in our community. To illustrate this, there is an appropriate example that is very persuasive: the factory will employ a lot of workers; As a result, the unemployment rate will drop significantly. Many people in our community will find a job in this factory. And their income will increase rapidly. So they can buy a great deal of food, clothing and the other thing they need. And their quality of the life will be increased.







Furthermore, to speak frankly, there is one more practical reason that I choose the idea of building a factory near our community. A new factory will bring prosperity to our community. The tax collected from the factory is a important resource of revenue for our town. With the income of the people in our community increasing, income tax collected also will be increased. The town will be able to spent more money on town development. Moreover, in order to accommodate more workers, more and more house and apartment will be needed. This will boost real estate development in our community.   






Finally, As a proverb say, “everything has two sides.” Also I admit that building a factory near our community will bring some disadvantages to us, such as water pollution, smog and destroying the quality of the air. But I think it is not true problem. Modern technologies have made today’s factory technology intensive and bring the pollutions to minimum.




Taking into account all these factors, we will find that the benefits of building a factory near our community outweigh the dangers. Therefore from we have discussed, we may safely come to the conclusion that a factory to be built near our community is a rather wise decision


沙发
发表于 2005-3-18 04:15:00 | 只看该作者
板凳
发表于 2005-3-19 02:12:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用枯藤昏鸭在2005-3-17 15:24:00的发言:

When asked the problem感觉是question吧 that whether you approve a factory to be built near our community, people always face the dilemma to choose the idea of a factory to be built near our community or disapproving this idea. Quite a few people believe that building a factory near our community will bring more benefits, on the other这个地方标点不对 hand, some people might choose to prohibit to build the factory. According to my personal experience, emotional concern and personality type, I prefer to support the idea that a factory will be built near our community. Because there are too many benefits that outnumbers its disadvantage.



There is numerous reasons why I choose the idea of a factory to be built near our community. And I would here explain a few of the most important ones. The essential reason can be seen by most people is that a new factory near our community will help improve living standard of people in our community. To illustrate this, there is an appropriate example that is very persuasive: the factory will employ a lot of workers; As a result, the unemployment rate will drop significantly. Many people in our community will find a job in this factory. And their income will increase rapidly. So they can buy a great deal of food, clothing and the other thing they need. And their quality of the life will be increased.







Furthermore, to speak frankly, there is one more practical reason that I choose the idea of building a factory near our community. A new factory will bring prosperity to our community. The tax collected from the factory is a important resource of revenue for our town. With the income of the people in our community increasing, income tax collected also will be increased. The town will be able to spent more money on town development. Moreover, in order to accommodate more workers, more and more house and apartment will be needed. This will boost real estate development in our community.   






Finally, As a proverb say, “everything has two sides.” Also I admit that building a factory near our community will bring some disadvantages to us, such as water pollution, smog and destroying the quality of the air. But I think it is not true problem. Modern technologies have made today’s factory technology intensive and bring the pollutions to minimum.




Taking into account all these factors, we will find that the benefits of building a factory near our community outweigh the dangers. Therefore from we have discussed, we may safely come to the conclusion that a factory to be built near our community is a rather wise decision



地板
发表于 2005-3-21 07:50:00 | 只看该作者

When asked the problem that whether you approve a factory to be built near our community, people always face the dilemma to choose the idea of a factory to be built near our community or disapproving this idea. Quite a few people believe that building a factory near our community will bring more benefits, on the other hand, some people might choose to prohibit to build the factory. According to my personal experience, emotional concern (concerns) and personality type(huh??), I prefer to support the idea that a factory will be built near (in the community) our community. (1. I prefer the idea that….2. I would like to support he idea…) Because there are too many benefits that outnumbers its disadvantage.

There is (are) numerous reasons why I choose the idea of a factory to be built near our community. And I would here explain a few of the most important ones (most important, there’s only one. So it should be “a few of the very important ones) . The essential reason can be seen by most people is that a new factory near our community will help improve living standard of people in our community. To illustrate this, there is an appropriate example that is very persuasive: the factory will employ a lot of workers; As a result, the unemployment rate will drop significantly. Many people in our community will find a job in this factory. And their income will increase rapidly. So they can buy a great deal of food, clothing and the other thing (do not use thing, it shows your inability to use various vocabularies. Here, you may replace it “thing” with “daily needs” they need. And their quality of the life will be increased.

Furthermore, to speak frankly, there is one more practical reason that I choose the idea of building a factory near our community. A new factory will bring prosperity to our community. The tax collected from the factory is a(an) important resource of revenue for our town. With the income of the people in our community increasing, income tax collected also will be increased. The town will be able to spent more money on town development. Moreover, in order to accommodate more workers, more and more house and apartment will be needed. This will boost real estate development in our community.   

Finally, As a proverb say, “everything has two sides.” Also I admit that building a factory near our community will bring some disadvantages to us, such as water pollution, smog and destroying the quality of the air. But I think it is not true (I don’t understand this point. NOT TRUE?? False?/) problem. Modern technologies have made today’s factory technology intensive and bring the pollutions to minimum.

Taking into account all these factors, we will find that the benefits of building a factory near our community outweigh the dangers (danger means that the little town is been threatened. Find a better word to substitute) . Therefore from we have discussed, we may safely come to the conclusion that a factory to be built near our community is a rather wise (better decision) decision. (because by saying this is a wise decision, then are you applying the other side is a stupid decision?) carefully choose your word.
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