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109. “Employees should not have full access to their own personnel files. If, for example, employees were allowed to see certain confidential materials, the people supplying that information would not be likely to express their opinions candidly.” 【本月频率1，本月新題】

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

题目类型分类(概括性陈述类)：直接表明立场并给出论据进行阐述

题目专题分类─About Management and Business: (the privacy of employees) employees should not have full access to their personal files

109. “雇员不应该有权接触到所有他们自己的个人文件。比如，如果雇员可以看某些秘密(confidential)文件的话，那么提供这些信息的人将可能不会公正地(candidly)表达他们的意见。” (关于雇员)
讨论你在何种程度上赞成或不赞成上述观点。从你自身的经验，观察和阅读给出相关的原因and/or例子来支持你的观点。

Position: I would argue that companies should allow their employees to know about their performance evaluation so that they can improve their performance to better meet their companies’ expectations.

A. When personnel files are kept away from employees, these files mean no more than waste paper for the employees.

B. On the contrary, personnel files can be used as effective incentives to motivate employees to improve their performance.

C. Admittedly, there is no need to keep the names of information suppliers on the personnel files.

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40. (黄金80题)

“With the increasing emphasis on a global economy and international cooperation, people need to understand that their role as citizens of the world is more important than their role as citizens of a particular country.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

题目类型分类(两类进行比较类)

题目专题分类─About Human Beings: our role as citizens of the world

40. “随着对全球经济和跨国公司的关注增加，人们需要理解他们作为世界公民的角色比作为一个特定国家的公民的角色更重要。”

(其他社会研究)
讨论你在何种程度上赞成或不赞成上述观点。从你自身的经验，观察和阅读给出相关的原因and/or例子来支持你的观点。

Ans：I agree with the statement.

1)          It is an inevitable trend to the whole world and if we keep thinking in a constraint perspective，we will loss chance to compete with others.

2)          Take EU for example，people in EU，no matter what nationality are they，they are in one union and they suffer the same difficulties and gain the same benefit，so they should take the other countries’ perspective into consideration.

3)          As long as the American stock market fell，almost all the other countries fell,too.

4)          Like the famous ”butterfly effect” what we do may affect enormously on others and we can hardly figure out，so we should bear in mind that we have to be a world citizen not a country citizen.

Position: Our roles as national citizens are not necessarily incompatible with our rules as world citizens.

A. People are naturally more concerned with their national interests.

B. It is true that conflicts often arise between our commitment to national interests and that to international welfare.

C. However, we should see both the need for and the possibility of realizing and consciously coordinating our national citizenship and our international citizenship.

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138. “Although restricting public access can help protect national parks and historical sites, in fact there should be few, if any, such restrictions because these places were intended for everyone to use.” Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading. 【本月频率1，本月新題】

题目类型分类(两类进行比较类)
题目专题分类─Historical Sites and Archeological Treasures: how to protect historical sites: restrict vs. free

138. 一些人宣称为了保护国家公园和历史遗迹，参观它们的公众应该被严格限制。另外一些争论说因为这些地方是设计为所有人使用的，所以应该只有很少，甚至没有限制。
阐释你在这件事上的观点。从你自身的经验，观察和阅读给出相关的原因and/or例子来支持你的观点。

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87.“As technologies and the demand for certain services change, many workers will lose their jobs. The responsibility for those people to adjust to such change should belong to the individual worker, not to government or to business.”

题目类型分类(概括性陈述类)：直接表明立场并给出论据进行阐述
题目专题分类─Automation & Technology: technology and adjusting to job obsolescence

87. “当某项特定服务的技术和需求改变时，很多工人将失业。适应这种改变的责任属于每个工人而不是政府或企业。”(企业与社会)

Position: With the rapid structural changes, workers, employers and the government should share the responsibilities and pool their to deal with the problem of unemployment.
A. Workers should not and are unable to be solely responsible for their unemployment due to changes in technology and market demand.
B. Government and business shoulder an unshirkable duty to help workers to adjust to rapid changes in the realm of technology and market demand.
C. Admittedly, it is imperative to encourage workers to make personal efforts to adjust themselves to the changing job market.

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130. (黄金80题)
“When judging the qualifications of potential employees, business employers should rely primarily on objective information, such as a candidate’s résumé and education. Personal interviews are much too subjective and are therefore not a valid basis on which to judge a person’s qualifications for a job.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

题目类型分类(概括性陈述类)：直接表明立场并给出论据进行阐述
题目专题分类─About Management and Business: (recruitment) objective information vs. subjective interview

130. “当评价一个潜在雇员的条件的时候，企业雇主应该主要依赖诸如推荐信和教育程度之类的客观信息。个人鉴定太过主观因此不是评判一个人是否对一份工作称职的有效依靠。” (关于雇员)
讨论你在何种程度上赞成或不赞成上述观点。从你自身的经验，观察和阅读给出相关的原因and/or例子来支持你的观点。

Position: Experienced employers would base their judgment on both the candidates’ objective information and their personal performance in interviews.
A. No one can deny the importance of objective information when evaluating the qualification of potential employees.
B. However, it would be native to overlook the advantages of personal interviews in helping interviewers know more directly the personality and ability of potential employees.
C. A wise boss would combine both ways when deciding whether to hire a potential employees.

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9.Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace.

9. “雇员应该保持他们的私人生活和个人行为尽量远离工作场所。”(关于雇员)
讨论你在何种程度上赞成或不赞成上述观点。从你自身的经验，观察和阅读给出相关的原因and/or例子来支持你的观点。

(excellent)
雇员的确不应该在工作时过多的讨论私人生活的话题或长时间的用电话聊天，因为过多的这样做既会影响到自己的工作效率和工作成绩，又会妨碍到其他员工的正常工作，进而导致企业的利润下降。

但是，如果要求员工们在工作时尽量的远离私人话题和个人行为也会负面影响到员工们的工作效率和工作凝聚力。大家在一种只有压力而没有沟通、没有舒缓、没有激情的环境中工作，工作成效怎会有多大呢？

Agree: It influences the qualities of workplace and mentalities of employees and decreases work efficiency.
ex1. Listening music in the workplace, it makes them abstractedly.
ex2. Talking private businesses, it decreases achieved percentages of scheduled progress.
ex3. Some employees do individual businesses in the workplace, like stock exchange.
ex4. To work lately and to leave early are bad habits.

Disagree: Employees work with no stress can increase work efficiency.
ex1. Listening music in the workplace, it relaxes their minds.
ex2. Talking private businesses, it makes cooperators closely.
ex3. Employees can use flexibly their time to decrease working stress.
ex4. It can take care of work and life.

Ans: Agree
     1.in terms of working efficiency, if people keep their private lives and personal activities from the workplace, they would more concentrate on their work.   
     2.in terms of the quality of private lives, if employees keep the private lives from the workplace, they would have better personal lives. Because their private lives will not disturb by their work.

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Eva, you've done much better than me!

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Thanks,小西. I'am still at the foot of the mountain.

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Part I: Analysis of Issue: Structure and Template

Structure is the most important part of your essay. Your essay must be written in a standard format with the standard logical transitions. The E-rater will scan your essay to identify if it has a standard structure.
· Introduction/Conclusion- These elements will provide the structure for your essay and keep you on track.
· Number of Paragraphs. To satisfy the E-rater, your essay should be 4 to 5 paragraphs: an introduction, a conclusion, and three "body" paragraphs. Each paragraph should have 2 to 5 sentences (total essay about 300-400 words).

Note: You should skip a line between paragraphs since the TAB key does not function in the essay section.

Essay Template
The template is just a guideline. You do not have to adhere to it. Often you will have to make
changes to suit your argument.
· The numbers of sentences indicated for each paragraph is a guideline that varies depending on how much content you have.
· The transitional phrases we use in the Template are intentionally simplistic. This is not a

simple approach where you can "fill-in-the-blanks." Flesh out the template somewhat and use it as a guideline to write a disciplined and focused essay.

Template
1) Introductory Paragraph (2-4 sentences)
Make sure to keep your introductory paragraph concise, strong and effective.
What the introductory paragraph should accomplish:
· Explain the issue (briefly).
· Show that you understand the full complexities of the issue (for example, by recognizing competing interests or various factors).
· State your position on the issue (without the details yet).
Sample template for introductory paragraph (2 sentences):
a) Whether ________________________ depends on _____________________.
b) (insert your opinion), __________________________.

2) First Body Paragraph (3-5 sentences)
Begin to develop your position with your most important reason. Use one or two examples to back up

your main point:
a) The chief reason for my view is ___________________________________.

b) For example, ____________________________________.
c) Moreover, ______________________________.
d) Finally, ________________________.

3) Second Body Paragraph
Expand your position with a "secondary" reason. Support your rationale further with at least one

example.
· State your second reason (one only).
· Provide rationale and/or evidence to support it.

Here's a sample template for the second body paragraph that accomplishes these objectives:
a) Another reason for my view is_____________________________.
b) Specifically,________________.
c) The result is,__________________.


4) Optional Third Body Paragraph
In this paragraph (optional) you acknowledge a competing viewpoint or counter-argument (and rationale and/or examples that support it), and then provide rebuttals to further support your

position. In this paragraph you walk a tightrope, you must acknowledge the counter-argument, but yet deny it immediately in the next sentence and use that denial to strengthen your own argument.

· Acknowledge a different viewpoint or a counter-argument.
· Provide rationale and/or examples that support it.
· Provide a rebuttal.
Here's a sample template for the third body paragraph that accomplishes the objectives indicated above:

a) Some might argue,_____________________________.
b) Yet,____________________
c) Others might cite, __________________.
d) However,_____________________.

5) Conclusion Paragraph
In this paragraph you write a summary of your position in 1 to 3 sentences:
· State the thrust of your position.
· Restate the main points from the body of your essay.
The concluding paragraph is not the place for new information or reasons. It is not a place to draw

new conclusions.
a) In sum, I concur that ________________________.
b) However,_________________; on the whole______________.

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