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9.2综合

The article believes that the subject of a untitled painting is Jane Austen for three reasons. However, the lecture seriously doubts it by lists also three arguments one by one.

Firstly, the reading material illustrates that decades after Austen's death, Austen's family agreed that the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen . Nevertheless, the lecture points the problem of this reason by claiming the fact that these family members could not barely have seen Jane in person since Jane died 70 years ago. So the her family's endorsement is unconvincing.

Secondly, the author of the passage argues that the eyebrows, nose, mouth and the whole face in the portrait resembles the sketch which depicts Jane Austen. The lecturer demonstrates how that is not the case. The subject of the painting could possibly be Jane's relative who is resembles to her. Some experts even insist that the subject is a distance niece of Jane Austen.

The last lecturer's challenge to the argument in the article is about the stamp on the back of the canvas. The stamp indicates that the portrait was painted at least 27 years after Jane Austen's birth, suggesting that the subject of the painting was much older than Jane. So the style of the painting which relates Jane's teenager period may be just a coincidence.

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9.2 独立 being creative， rather than carefully planning, is more often results in better solution.

Somebody naturally are more creative than others, and there is a widespread discuss about whether this kind of people are easier to be successful and to result in better situation. Some voices say that people with creativity are definitely more possible to produce better result. However, other people, including me, think that carefully planning sometimes is more important.

Without well planning, creativity means nothing. Creativity can bring about some original ideas which may have huge positive influence on people's life, but lack of carefully planning makes the wonderful ideas unable to come true. Everybody knows that Newton is a great people with creativity. He found the gravity discipline through an apple dropping at his head. But a large proportion of people doesn't pay enough attention to the countless experiments and tests he did after he first thought up the idea about gravity discipline. What lead to the final testify of gravity are these great amount of experiments and tests, and it was well planned skills made this significant conclusion came true.


What's more, not every vocation or occupation need creativity but every job requires employee to possess well planning ability. Like accounting, it requires employee stick to the regular procedure and do the exact same thing every time. Creativity is unfortunately undesired. What can be the most impressive example is myself. Last summer, I worked in a accounting firm as an internship accountant. What I needed to do was followed the fixed regulation, writing receipt. Unfortunately, I switched the sequence of two steps of the procedure, thinking that would be more efficient. My manager really pissed off at that time and shout at me that our accountant could not change the whole procedure, even a little! Or there would be a disaster. At that time, I knew better than anyone that creativity is not always a good characteristic.

Being creative is nice but not enough. Owing to the all aspects I have mentioned above, it is more fair to say that being creative is not always more likely to result in better solution and carefully planning instead is a quality that necessary to everyone.


今天两篇字数都很少。。。有点写作文无能了怎么办TAT

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9.1 独立修改
There is a saying goes, you can never judge a book by its cover and you can't judge a person by his or her appeal. But I really held the belief that through the types of friends of a person, you can somehow tell what kind of person a man is.

Generally, people with common interests will naturally get together and become friends. It is no doubt that only when two people has the same interest, can they have a pleasure conversation. Otherwise embarrassing situation will happen. When I first came to my university, I was terrified because I did not familiar with anyone in this university. And I could not have pleasure and easy conversation with my roommates --- they were not fond of outside door activities at all, but I was a big fan of traveling. After I joined in a traveling club and bicycle club, I felt like I was in home. I could easily talk to anyone in the club for hours without noticing time went by. So if a person, like me, has a group of friends who are crazy about traveling, we can easily presume that this guy is also favor of traveling.


Moreover, friends share the same values. A kind person can not bear a friend who is selfish and mean. If kind people and selfish people come together, a intense fight and a break up are unavoidable. My father told me that when he was young, he had a roommate who showed little respect for their teachers. He could not help keeping distance with this roommate. Because in my father's eyes, teachers are the most gracious people and deserved to be respected. It is different values that drift my father and his roommate away, making them can’t be friends. Friends are like mirrors reflecting the person who you are.


What is the most important is that almost everybody in this world will be influenced by the people around him or her. "People around you can change the person who you are" is definitely a truth. I am a person who are changed by my friends. In junior school, I was afraid to talk to other people, including classmates and teachers. Like sunshine in my life, two friends of mine hold my hands and helped me defeat my fear of talking to people. Until now, I am still feeling appreciated my friends who changed my character. Hence, people who hang out together are familiar in some way.


By and large, we can not judge a person through the types of friend this person has, but owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I do think we can know more about a person by understanding his or her friends.

angla

不好意思啊。刚刚没网了，所以今天给你改晚了

稍等，呆会传上来

angla

The article believes that the subject of a untitled painting is Jane Austen for three reasons. However, the lecture seriously doubts it by lists (语法错误listing)also three arguments one by one.（three argument 含义略有不妥evidence可能更好）

Firstly（据有几本写作书说美国人不喜欢用这个词，常用frist）, the reading material illustrates that decades after Austen's death, Austen's family agreed that the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen . Nevertheless, the lecture points the problem of this reason（这个表达感觉有点awkward） by claiming the fact that these family members could not barely have seen Jane in person since Jane died 70 years ago. So the（笔误） her family's endorsement is unconvincing.

Secondly, the author of the passage argues that the eyebrows, nose, mouth and the whole face in the portrait resembles（复数） the sketch which depicts Jane Austen. The lecturer demonstrates how that is not the case. The subject of the painting could possibly be Jane's relative who is resembles to her. Some experts even insist that the subject is a distance niece of Jane Austen.

The last（，） lecturer's challenge to the argument in the article is about the stamp on the back of the canvas. The stamp indicates that the portrait was painted at least 27 years after Jane Austen's birth, suggesting that the subject of the painting was much older than Jane. So the style of the painting which relates Jane's teenager period may be just a coincidence. （这段的理由貌似和原文不符）

angla

不好意思啊，还是在word里面改了

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9.3 独立
Do you agree or disagree? The best way for a teacher to let students become interested in a subject is to help them know how to use it in lives outside schools

As students nowadays have more and more convenient accesses to obtain interesting news and knowledge by themselves, a widespread discussion about that what methods can enable teachers under current circumstance attract students’ attention and provoke their interests has raised. Many methods have been proposed. But among all this method, I agree that enabling students to know how to use knowledge in lives outside school is the best solution.

Firstly, showing students the use of a subject outside school help students grasp knowledge more quickly. And the quicker to master a subject, the more achievability students will gain. As we all know, the sense of achievement makes students more likely to interested in the subject. I have two friends who started to learned how to drive at the same time, but they had two totally different results. Mary met a coach who taught her theory about car, engine and equipment for two months without letting her even touched the car in person. With no doubt, the long and tedious lecture soon made Mary lose her interest in driving, thus she gave up continuing this learning process. On the contrary, Paul had a teacher who let him drive the first day he started to learn. His teacher taught him how engine works while let him start the engine. Only a month later, Paul not only feel excited about driving but also become a excellent driver. I really believe that it is Paul’s teacher showing him how theory works in real life that shorten the learning period and make Paul interested in learning.

In addition, knowing a subject is useful makes students more willing to learn. Everyone needs a motivation when study a specific subject. And use of a subject is absolutely an encouraging impetus for students to study. When I first learned geography in junior school, to be honest, I hated this subjects. I felt like that knowing the how tall a mountain is or how big another country is are totally useless for me. So I gave up learning geography in my high school. However, as I grown up, I realized that geography knowledge can helps me do my traveling plan, lets me understand why the sky of United Kingdom doesn’t get dark until 10 p.m. in summer when I live there, and even enables me to predict weather condition. At that time, I feel geography is the most interesting and amazing subject among all the subject I have ever learned because I find the real use of the subject in life.

All in all, I definitely support that the best methods to make students become interested in subject is letting students know the use of the subject in lives. Since this way not only save students time to learn but also give students motivations to learn.

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angla 发表于 2014-9-4 01:24
不好意思啊，还是在word里面改了

谢谢姐姐！

橙圆

改好啦啦啦啦 前方高能预警！

daisy333

橙圆 发表于 2014-9-4 22:09
改好啦啦啦啦 前方高能预警！

查了下有 provoke one's interest这个用法
谢谢橙子，每次这么细心给我找小错误，真的好感动。这篇卡时间写的又没有检查，老是那些错误我也真是醉了


修改
As students nowadays have more and more convenient accesses to interesting news and knowledge by themselves, there is a widespread discussion about methods that helps teachers attract students’ attention and provoke their interests under current circumstance.Many methods have been proposed. But among all these method , I agree that enabling students to know how to use knowledge in lives outside school is the best solution.

Firstly, showing students the use of a subject outside school helps students grasp knowledge more quickly. And the quicker to master a subject, the more achievability students will gain. As we all know, the sense of achievement makes students more likely to be interested in the subject. I have two friends who started to learned how to drive at the same time, but they had two totally different results. Mary met a coach who taught her theory about car, engine and equipment for two months without letting her even touched the car in person. With no doubt, the long and tedious lecture soon made Mary lost her interest in driving, and thus she gave up continuing this learning process. On the contrary, Paul had a teacher who let him drive the first day he started to learn. His teacher taught him how engine works while let him start the engine. Only a month later, Paul not only felt excited about driving but also become an excellent driver. I really believe that it is Paul’s teacher showing him how theory works in real life that shorten the learning period and make Paul interested in learning.

In addition, that knowing a subject is useful makes students more willing to learn. Everyone needs a motivation when study a specific subject. And use of a subject is absolutely an encouraging impetus for students to study. When I first learned geography in junior school, to be honest, I hated this subject. I felt like that knowing how tall a mountain is or how big another country is is(is or连接 就近原则) totally useless for me. So I gave up learning geography in my high school. However, as I grown up, I realized that geography knowledge can help me do my traveling plan, let me understand why the sky of United Kingdom doesn’t get dark until 10 p.m. in summer when I live there, and even enable me to predict weather condition. At that time, I felt geography was the most interesting and amazing subject among all subjects I have ever learned because I found the real use of the subject in life.

All in all, I definitely support that the best methods to make students become interested in subject is letting students know the use of the subject in lives. Since this way not only save students time to learn but also give students motivations to learn.