TWE179 考试在即，请大家帮忙看一下，我的essay 大概能的几分。。非常感谢！！

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179. What are some of the qualities of a good parent? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

It is said that parents are the best teachers in our lives. Therefore, parents who have good qulities are very important to children. However, what qualities should they have if they want to be good parents? In my opinion, good parents should have patience, acute insight, kind and warm hearts.

The most impotant quality that good parents should have is patience. The mind of kid is like a piece of white paper. They should learn everything. At the beginning, kids will probably make several mistakes. If parents have no patience and give up teaching them, kids will lose their ways. However, if parents taught them step by step, kids will gain knowledge little by little. Finally, they can master lots of knowledge.

Acute insight also plays a pivotal role in good parents’ quality. Different children have different personalities and characters. For example, some children like dancing, while some of them like drawing. Parents should find their children’s preferences and strong points. If parents can find out, and teach them, children have more chance to acess succeed. On the other hand, if parents can not find their children’s favorite things, and force them to learn what they don’t like, children can miss chance to do what they like and they can not do the thing well enough.

Last but not least, having a kind and warm heart can affect children a lot. People should learn loving our world and other people; at the same time, they also have rights to feel beloved when they are little kids. Loved by parents, children can feel comfortable and pround. It is very important to set up children’s confidence. Moreover, if children learn how to love others, the world will be full of warm atmosphere which leads us a better life.

In conclusion, children always copy what their parents do, having good parents is a weath to children. Children can learn a lot from their parents when they are growing up. To be good parents, people should be patient when they teach their children; they should have good insights; in addition, parents’ kind personality is also a asset to children.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-1-31 1:52:26编辑过]

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作文一向我的弱项，加上听说作文分对总分影响很大，马上就要考试了，心中十分着急。。。所以请大家帮忙指点一下。。谢谢！

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以下是引用baby_knee在2005-1-30 12:25:00的发言：

qualities of good parents

It is said that parents are the best teachers in our lives. Therefore, parents who have good qulities are very important to children. However, what qualities should they have if they want to be good parents? In my opinion, good parents should have patience, acute insight, kind and warm hearts.

The most impotant quality that good parents should have is patience. The mind of kid is like a piece of white paper. They should learn everything. At the beginning, kids will probably make several mistakes. If parents have no patience and give up teaching them, kids will lose their ways. However, if parents taught them step by step, kids will gain knowledge little by little. Finally, they can master lots of knowledge.

Acute insight also plays a pivtol role in good parents’ quality. Different children have different personalities and characters. For example, some children like dancing, while some of them like drawing. Parents should find their children’s preferences and strong points. If parents can find out, and teach them, children have more chance to acess succeed. On the other hand, if parents can not find their children’s favorite things, and force them to learn what they don’t like, children can miss chance to do what they like and they can not do the thing well enough.

Last but not least, having a kind and warm heart can affect children a lot. People should learn loving our world and other people; at the same time, they also have rights to feel beloved when they are little kids. Loved by parents, children can feel comfortable and pround. It is very important to set up children’s confidence. Moreover, if children learn how to love others, the world will be full of warm atmosphere which leads us a better life.

In conclusion, children always copy what their parents do, having good parents is a weath to children. Children can learn a lot from their parents when they are growing up. To be good parents, people should be patient when they teach their children; they should have good insights; in addition, parents’ kind personality is also a asset to children.

第一， 请您修改标题， 看发贴规定吧。

第二， 请问您这个写了多久？

baby_knee

不好意思，不过现在已经编辑过了。。

这篇是TWE179  What are some of the qualities of a good parent? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

我卡时间做的，30 分钟。。

谢谢！

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-1-31 1:48:15编辑过]

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It is said that parents are the best teachers in our lives. Therefore, parents who have good qulities are very important to children. However, what qualities should they have if they want to be good parents? In my opinion, good parents should have patience, acute insight, kind and warm hearts.

The most impotant quality that good parents should have is patience. The mind of kid is like a piece of white paper. They should learn everything. At the beginning, kids will probably make several mistakes. If parents have no patience and give up teaching them, kids will lose their ways. However, if parents taught them step by step, kids will gain knowledge little by little. Finally, they can master lots of knowledge.

Acute insight also plays a pivtol role in good parents’ quality. Different children have different personalities and characters. For example, some children like dancing, while some of them like drawing. Parents should find their children’s preferences and strong points. If parents can find out, and teach them, children have more chance to acess succeed. On the other hand, if parents can not find their children’s favorite things, and force them to learn what they don’t like, children can miss chance to do what they like and they can not do the thing well enough.

Last but not least, having a kind and warm heart can affect children a lot. People should learn loving our world and other people; at the same time, they also have rights to feel beloved when they are little kids. Loved by parents, children can feel comfortable and pround. It is very important to set up children’s confidence. Moreover, if children learn how to love others, the world will be full of warm atmosphere which leads us a better life.

In conclusion, children always copy what their parents do, having good parents is a weath to children. Children can learn a lot from their parents when they are growing up. To be good parents, people should be patient when they teach their children; they should have good insights; in addition, parents’ kind personality is also a asset to children.

我划出来的是明显的大错。 其他还有很多地方。。。非常不顺畅。

个人建议： 反复写 ，反复修改， 反复写， 17个分类， 写20－30篇， 都反复修改2－3次， 必然上5分。 您这个， 5分到不了。