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Agree or disagree? College or universityshould offer more preparation before students start working.

With the number of university studentsincrease, more people have a high study certificate, so the difficulty to finda satisfied job worried almost every university graduates. Last year, when oneof my friends tend to apply for a job, she met big problems exceed herimagination. Most company rejected her for she didn’t have enough work experience;her social activity background isn't strong and so on.

This makes me to think that why it is sucha tough for her to find a good job. Of course she has some responsibility, atthe same time; however, I think the school doesn’t do enough to prepare theirstudents for entering the social.

At the very beginning, university is aplace where we not only learn the knowledge about our major, but the method tolive as well. So, we must admit that it is important to have a good grade, toknow the fundamental and advanced knowledge about an area. But as for me, Ithink the most important thing is to conduct more activity to let students knowhow to learn and how to make theirselves be competitive in the social full of excellentperson. Only to say these may be abstract, I'd like to take my homeuniversity-- X university as an example. Although it is one of the top universitiesin our country, it has done little to prepare it students for further career.My friends and I all think that our school should provide some courses aboutwork manners, interview skills or something else to make us outstanding. Weeven suggest our school to provide a director for the students want to workafter graduate.

In addition, school have more recourses,some soft ones like teachers and some aluminums, and hard ones like money andequipments, which are difficult for a student to gather at a short time.Considering this disadvantage of student, I think school should give them morehelp on preparing for future jobs. Lisa, my sister, who ever got a internopportunity from her professor in her junior. This experience gave her a preciousworking experience and confirmed her a good job later.

Last but not the least, preparing studentsfor a better future will has a lot of drawbacks on the school at the same time.On one hand, if most of its graduate have got a good job, it will shows thatthe cultivation form of this school is good for students, then it will benefitits reputation. On the other hand, the students who get help will remember hismother university and maybe one day he will devote some money to construct thisplace. My university received a large amount of money from our aluminum everyyear and I think this have great relation with their appreciation of the gainhere.   

For the reason above, I think school shouldoffer students more help before they start working.

虫虫爱吃菜

每日一文之9.4哈哈
TPO 29

There is a survey shows that, 85 percent of the students has at least participate in one student organizations during their first two years at school. And when I was a freshman, all the friends I have all busy with their organization tasks and a lot of activities held inside the organizations. Is it really benefited to our university students to put so much energy to these activities even more than academic works? In my opinion, most time it is worthless to do so. In some extent as well, some kind of school organization is just a waste of our precious time.

At the very beginning, I must declaim that the most important task for our university students is to learn as much knowledge as to make us more competitive. Of course, this knowledge not only contains the courses we take, but also the books, newspapers we read and some research jobs we take. If we want to find a good job, the determinant factor of our competitiveness is these things rather than how many school activities we have taken. Even though those activities have their value, they, however, is just an accommodation of the academic skills. I have seen some of my friends failed in courses for focusing more on such activities. Then our directors got into such fairs and told them to stop all the other activities. Although it is not good enough to do so, we all think it is the most efficient way.

In addition, a large part of the student organizations just focus on conduct some activities to others and then some daily affairs left. As my experience, we can learn the key skills just after one activity. Then what we do is repeat what we have done once and once again. It is worthless after all and time consuming. Nevertheless, most students don't aware this but just happy with the identity which they can get from the organization. The identity, that is, he can feel himself a member of some organization and get praises from his 'colleagues' which he can't get when he read a book or listen to a class.   

Last but not the least, the short-term achievement that an activity gives the students will fulfill them present. But what the study can reward us is a long-run benefit, and will increase with the accumulation of our effort. Some of our aluminums have given us speeches when they came back, they all focus on the teacher here gave them important instructions, the book they have read those days make them more powerful or the research experiences here is the foundation of their further development. No one, however, said that the school organizations benefit them in some extend.

But I must admit that the experience of those activities is valuable and decrease pressure. And some organizations such as those work-oriented will help us when we get into job. They can't take the place of academic at all.

Considering above reasons, I think academic studies is the most important thing.

jerry1610

虫虫爱吃菜 发表于 2013-9-5 10:21
每日一文之9.4哈哈
TPO 29

求作文题目。。。没搜到。。
先改一篇  在公司偷偷上网的。。。


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But I must admit that the experience of those activities is valuable and decrease单复数 pressure. And some organizations such as those work-oriented will help us when we get into job. They can't take the place of academic at all.

Considering above reasons, I think academic studies is单复数 the most important thing.


1，建议写完检查下，单复数的错误是可以避免的
2，以句子为单位，找出主谓宾，使之符合英语的结构
3，没在字典中见过的用法不要用

虫虫爱吃菜

Do you agree or disagree that the rules insocieties today are too strict for young people.

这篇写起来好费力，不太会论证而且想了半天也没找到好例子T T

With the development of technology, our lifehas changed a lot compared with that of our parents’. Books, magazines andnewspapers of other countries give us an insight into the world. And theInternet gives us a broader viewer at the same time. So I think we must admitthat young person like us are happier than that of before and the restrictionsare less.

Firstly, more knowledge about the othercountries gives us more choices when we stand at the cross of life. As most ofcollege students have done, we must determine where we want to go when graduatefrom senior school or university. Going abroad for further study or work,staying in big cities like Shanghai to find a good job or going back tohometown to live the normal life can all be one our choices. Our parents',however, at the same position of life, may only have one way to go: go to workas the government has decided. We are lucky for we can decide our future andchoose the thing we are interested, so we must appreciate that we have lessrestrictions now.

Furthermore, even we may complain the longprocess to get a Visa, we still have the chance to go abroad no only to travel,but to study or work as well. A lot of my friends have go abroad as visitingstudents, even myself have the experience to go to American for four months.Experiences like this can benefit us a lot for further day. Even my parentssaid that they envy us to have such a chance to experience different life atsuch young age. I know, it is impossible for their generation to do so.

Last but not the least, high-tech today makesus live more comfortable and easy. If I miss my friends, I can just call themand then we can speak to each other although we are thousands miles apart. Andwe I meet some difficulties of my work, I can just click a button on computerand several pages of information may help me. With the speed of globalization,people live more close to each other and we can get along easily.

Well, at the same time I must admit that wehave more rules today than before to standardize our behavior. In my opinion,they are just to normalize some bad behaviors and have no effect on our accessto the convenient of today.

That is all my reason about there is lessrestrictions for us nowadays.

wanggang0411

虫虫爱吃菜 发表于 2013-9-6 17:34
Do you agree or disagree that the rules insocieties today are too strict for young people.
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呃..... 参考了下其他同学的作文, 我觉得虫虫你这篇作为写偏了, 正反方观点是 whether the rules today are too strict or not~~~ 而你写的是 today's environment provides young people, including you, lots of opportunies to do something that older generations could not in the past.

虫虫爱吃菜

9月7日独立写作
In the past young people are more depended on their parents in making decision. Today, young people are better able to make decisions in their own lives.

When heard about the story of my mother, she always says "a lot of thing was decided by your grandfather. He thought I have no need to get a higher education, so I went to the factory he found for me." I think the experience of my mother is not the only one of that generation. Compared to them, I think our generation has a better ability and freedom to decide our future.

At the very beginning, as the social changed, our generation is the best keeper of the developing trend. At a lot of time, it is us who tell our parents how to surf the Internet, to use some high-tech equipments like Iphone, Ipad. So they have admitted that we have stronger ability to absorb information and make decision. But as for their generation, they had limit ways to acquire information, which directly result in their relying on parents to make choices. When talk with my friends, they often say that they want to do something and now make the preparation, and their parents just support their decision then seldom give some suggestions. It suits me as well, whenever I told my parents I want to go abroad or find some interns, they always support me and then find some information to help me.

Furthermore, the thought we have are different from that of our parents when they were young. At that time, they know little about the world and just want a stable life, and they think it is more convenient if parents can decide their future for them.  When comes to us, however, we get information from the entire world every day and it makes us certain about what is good for us as well as what we want. Thus we are more independent and confident when we meet the cross in life.

Last but not the least, unlike our parents just attended the school near home; we now stay in the university thousands miles apart from home. Although we want to rely on our parents when we meet some problem, it is impossible that they are available every time. So after a long time, we gradually gain the ability to justify the situation and make choices.

At the same time, I must admit that although we are better able to make decisions, we still need the advices from parents. Because their life experiences can help us a lot.

和善大叔

虫虫爱吃菜 发表于 2013-9-7 17:54
9月7日独立写作
In the past young people are more depended on their parents in making decision. Today ...

新手路过。加油共勉~

虫虫爱吃菜

School always collect information of the teaching performance of teachers and according to it, give teacher who has efficient teaching rewards. So which is more useful: evaluation by students or by other teachers?

In short, I think the student is the best judge of the teaching performance, just as the customer of the cuisine. A study shows that a student will meet over 50 teachers in his college life, so I think he has enough ability to judge whether the teacher is good.

My first reason is that when considering the evaluation criterion, we always ask whether the class is easy to understand and interesting as well. At the situation, the student is the best qualified one to judge the performance of the teacher because all these things are what they care about an teacher. Every time when we want to choose courses of a new semester, we all like to ask the following questions to the person who has already took the course: Is the class helpful? Can the teacher deliver the class in an understandable way? Is the class interesting? So, we can see all the point we students focus on are accord with the criterion the judge the teacher. Their colleaguea, however, are not access to these standards.

Further more, the other teachers know more about the research ablitity of a teacher, but it has no direct relation with the teaching performance. Once, my friend Peter majored in Management chose a course called Human Resourse Management for the recommondation of his professor. His professor told him the teacher of that course had so many years' experiences of human resourse management in a big company, and thought Peter can learn a lot from that course. At last, Peter told me that the teacher is so boring and can't transform his work experiences into understandable words.

Last but not the least, because of the relationships one teacher has with his colleagues, they can't make an imperial judge. Maybe they stay in the same lab or will benefit from each other one day, they don't want to make bad judge as to damage their friendship. And take the school as an unit, the behavior to let teachers make judgement about each other will do harm to the corperation of the whole team-- they will no longer share teaching methods with others and the whole teaching performance will be affected. So it unwise to let the teachers judge each other.

For above reasons, I think let students to judge their teachers is better. This will not only help the teachers get a fair judgement but also let them willing to share their teaching methods with others.

虫虫爱吃菜

综合写作~
In the reading we come up with the conclusion that some of the paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually not painted by him
While having to admit that the reasons seem cogent to some extent, the professor in the lecture presumes, nevertheless, the conclusion is specious in three crucial respects.
To begin with, according to the reading there is something inconsistent about the way the woman in the portrait is dressed. However, this claim is questionable. In the lecture, the professor states that X-rays and analysis of the pigments in the paint have shown that the fur collar wasn't part of the original painting.. Considering this, the claim that the reading proposed is highly suspected.
Furthermore, the reading also maintains that Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, but in this painting these elements do not fit together. Yet, no compelling evidence is offered to substantiate it. In fact, the professor asserts that Once the paint of the added fur collar was removed, the original could be seen. This is where the listening conflicts with the reading again.
Ultimately, the professor also throws doubt on the assertion that examination of the back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together in the reading. To illustrate this, the professor points out that It turns out that when the fur collar was added, the wood panel was also enlarged with extra wood pieces glued to the sides and the top to make the painting more grand and more valuable. Without ruling out such possibilities it is presumptuous to insist that the painting isn’t a work of Rembrandt.
In conclusion, what the professor says in his lecture objects to the conclusion of the reading.

ni_kate

虫虫爱吃菜 发表于 2013-9-9 16:19
School always collect information of the teaching performance of teachers and according to it, give  ...

独立改好了~~