829g，今天写了第一篇issue，很受打击，求指导

lopk91

之前并没有认真准备过作文部分，今天有点慌了。花了好长时间才写了1篇，也不知道是否符合要求。恳请各路大神指导一下。另外想知道如何去准备6类不同的issue要求，说实话，我不太理解如何去针对6类不同的指示去写文章，看了一些范文也没看出所以然来。

ISSUE56
Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.
政府应该更多关注当今现实问题的解决，而不是试图去解决将来可能会发生的问题

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how those examples shape your position. 


I agree with the proposal in so far as when governments facing some urgent social situations, they are supposed to solve the exigent problems at once. However, when dealing with other things, particularly environmental protection and population planning, governments have little justification to overlook the problems expected in the future.

Admittedly, under some urgent social situations, governments' promptly solution of immediate problems will contribute to the stability of the entire country. Nowadays, unemployment problem is being increasingly pervasive around us. According to a recent survey conducted by Chinese government in 2013, nearly 75 percent of low-income family are linked to unemployment. Also, the criminal motives of over a half of thieves and robbers are connected with unemployment. Thus, governments should rapidly supply more jobs to the jobless individuals so as to meet their money demand. Otherwise, those job-losers may spare no effort to find other ways, probably crime, to buttress their family which undoubtedly diminish the security of society.

By contrast, when confronting with other things like environmental protection, government can get few benefits from paying more attention on solving the current problem, not the ones of future. On account of lacking cultivated land, Chinese government reclaim land from Dongting Lake, China's second-largest freshwater lake, in 1958 which made  the area of it decline sharply from 8,000 square kilometers to 3,000 square kilometers. Governments hardly realized that the lake can not only sustain the species diversity but store water to prevent flood. Thus, Chinese government had no choice but to input a huge number of man power and material resources to control the flood after 1998.

Finally, still handling some specific problem such as population planning，governments ought to think about tomorrow, otherwise they may be frustrate with terrible consequences caused by their improvidence. During the period of Chairman Mao's leadership in China,the government encouraged families to have as many children as possible because of Mao's belief that population growth empowered the country. As a result, The population grew from around 540 million in 1949 to 940 million in 1976. Although one-child policy was announced by the government to control the population later, it still induce severe consequences nowadays like aging and gender imbalance. Due to the government's unthoughtful decision before, we all paid a heavy price.

In sum, I concede that when governments facing some urgent social situations, problems must be tackled without delay. However,in view of environment and population, it is not a good idea for government to find a quick solution before thoroughly considerate the consequence may occur in the future.

普渡哥

it is not a good idea for government to find a quick solution before thoroughly considerate the consequence may occur in the future.
这句话有问题。find a quick solution是寻找快速解决方案的意思，你可以用make a quick decision..还有，sonsiderate是不是要用动名词？

lopk91

普渡哥 发表于 2013-8-16 11:32
it is not a good idea for government to find a quick solution before thoroughly considerate the con ...

谢谢普渡哥的指点！另外，这篇文章的大方向有没有问题？ 同时还想请教一下issue的六类指示具体对于写作有什么影响？有没有相关的文章可以学习一下！！！再次感谢！！！！