TWE175..想拿5分...请各位高手批改

Louiswt

TWE175,Some students like classes where teachers lecture (do all of the  
talking) in  class. Other students prefer classes where the students do some of the  
talking. Which type of class do you prefer? Give specific reasons and  
details to support your choice.  

There has been a controversy over the issue of whether or not students should do some talking in the class. As far as I concerned, I strongly suppose that talking in the class is necessary for at lease two reasons. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to suppose my viewpoint.

To begin with, teaching needs communication. Talking in the class helps students study more efficient. Education, one of the most important social systems, helps students to learn more. If on the class, teachers always keep talking without communication with students, the efficiency maybe very low. Only when the students can communicate with teachers smoothly, the efficiency of education would raise. Students are the future of our country, not the ducks, which are filled with what they do not want to eat. Asking questions, discussing with classmates,that will be the ways how thy learn in the classes.

Next, the main purpose of teaching is to help students handle more knowledge faster. If lack of communication, the teachers will not know how much the students understand, so they cannot make the class more efficient. Futhermore, without discussion, the class will become boring. Without positive atmosphere, the teachers may have no mood to teach, and the students will have no mood to learn. In the bad circle of that, neither students nor teachers can work well.

However, dissenters may argue that without talking in the class, there will be much quieter, both students and teachers will not be disturbed by noise, so the efficiency will raise. But from my perspective, quiet does not mean listen to the teachers carefully, but means sleep. Students cannot enjoy the class without communication, and boring might be the biggest cause of sleeping.

To sum up, taking into account above mentioned reasons, which are adequate and persuasive, the conclusion is obvious: after extremely examined all aspects of this question, student should do some talking in the class, not only to themsleves, but also to the teachers.

awakening

I recommend you remeber some basic framework and typical sentences. going to new oriental and taking some courses about writing is a good idea. frame example:

Although some students perfer to the class where the techer do the lectures, I am convinced that ......

the best choice of the majority of the students. In this artical, i will elaborate my view as follows.

first & foremost, .......

another reason for my view is that.............

last but not least,...........

In a final analysis/ in summary, based on the three reasons i presented above, i believe that.......

................

In addition, there're several skills about how to write middle three paragraphs.  

how to use example

how to use comparing

how to use 说理:  one the one hand, .. . on the other hand,..., Both of them vivid present that,.....

how to use 反写: To begin with, .....,  other than that,  ...., on the top of that...,

what you write is great, but a little big unusual, the words you used, the frame you selected! i am sure you will understand you will finish the topic in 30 minutes. if you won't remember some typical sentences and frames. how can you finish your writing in 30 minutes???

so I suggest you 3 things as follows.

first and foremost, remember frameworks and try to finish framework in 5 minutes when you in the test.

sencondly, master at least 3 methods about how to write middle paragraphs, finish each paragraph in 5 minutes.

last but not least, analyze 185 topics and remember the supporting reason in advance.

to include, you will get at least 5 if you do the above three well. good luck.

Louiswt

受教~~谢谢awakening

那我这篇文章有没有什么语法错误.....有什么可以改改的...希望帮我指出/

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-1-2 11:48:32编辑过]

tomato

以下是引用Louiswt在2005-1-1 22:55:00的发言：

TWE175,Some students like classes where teachers lecture (do all of the  
talking) in  class. Other students prefer classes where the students do some of the  
talking. Which type of class do you prefer? Give specific reasons and  
details to support your choice.  

There has been a controversy over the issue of whether or not students should do some talking in the class. As far as I concerned, I strongly suppose that talking in the class is necessary for at lease two reasons. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to suppose my viewpoint.

To begin with, teaching needs communication. Talking in the class helps students study more efficient. Education, one of the most important social systems, helps students to learn more. If on the class, teachers always keep talking without communication with students, the efficiency maybe very low. Only when the students can communicate with teachers smoothly, the efficiency of education would raise. Students are the future of our country, not the ducks, which are filled with what they do not want to eat. Asking questions, discussing with classmates,that will be the ways how thy learn in the classes.

Next, the main purpose of teaching is to help students handle more knowledge faster. If lack of communication, the teachers will not know how much the students understand, so they cannot make the class more efficient. Futhermore, without discussion, the class will become boring. Without positive atmosphere, the teachers may have no mood to teach, and the students will have no mood to learn. In the bad circle of that, neither students nor teachers can work well.

However, dissenters may argue that without talking in the class, there will be much quieter, both students and teachers will not be disturbed by noise, so the efficiency will raise. But from my perspective, quiet does not mean listen to the teachers carefully, but means sleep. Students cannot enjoy the class without communication, and boring might be the biggest cause of sleeping.

To sum up, taking into account above mentioned reasons, which are adequate and persuasive, the conclusion is obvious: after extremely examined all aspects of this question, student should do some talking in the class, not only to themsleves, but also to the teachers.

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