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高一妹纸 grace9210 的独立写作,请大家多多指教

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发表于 2013-6-18 22:14:49 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2013-6-18 22:24:39 | 只看该作者
我是现在word上写的然后粘贴到这里的,不知道为什么很多空格没了

刚才重新打了一遍空格,不知道有没有没打的。

不好意思,辛苦检查的同学啦

板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2013-6-18 22:37:32 | 只看该作者
勤勤有个问题,大作文字数有上限么?

还是字数大概是多少最好?

谢谢啦
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发表于 2013-6-19 15:26:19 | 只看该作者
grace9210 发表于 2013-6-18 22:37
勤勤有个问题,大作文字数有上限么?

还是字数大概是多少最好?

独立写作字数没有上限,不能少于300词。
我参加培训班的时候老师说想要拿高分的话一般要写过400词。。。
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-6-20 10:32:34 | 只看该作者
19 June
Independent Writing:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for government to spend money improving Internet access than improving public transportation.
Integrated Writing:
TPO25


  When it comes to Internet, the majority of people believe that it is the greatest invention .  More and more people consider that  Internet is original force that we can ignore of the development of modern society .  Many of us take into account that improving Internet access ought to be more important than improving public transportation. As for me, I don't agree with that.

  Firstly, the Internet is not popularized worldwide espcially some less developed area . In these indigent districts , computers are not afforded by most of the people, let alone surffing on the Internet. If the government emarked on Internet developing as the primary task,  there would be a huge amount of work such as the disseminating of the knowledge of Internet, the civilization construction of the proper use of Internet and so on. On the other hand , how nice it would be if  the public transporatation were the top priority . In this case , people in the blocking regions would have contact with the outside world  which is capatable to offer them Internet science itself. The more access they have  to the modern world, the more knowledge they'll with easy effort. Public transporation is the foundamental basis of development instead of Internet.

  Secondly , the investment of Internet will case the unfair situation for the people who don't use Internet. People seem to fail to take into account the fact that not all of us like Internet. There are still a number of people rejecting using it or using seldom. The contribution of government should be just for all the civilians in the jurisdictions. This action will probably cause unexpected situations which do harm to the harmony and unity of the society.

  Thirdly,the more improved Internet will keep us from the real world. Form the picture that you are sitting on the sofa facing to your laptop, chatting with your foreign friends. When you feel tired , you can watch the photos of yourdream place to relax yourself without paying a cent or taking a step.  No matter where you are and what you are doing, you can always order a  tasty meal online ,which keeps you from the tiredness of going the restaurant. In view of such pleasant situation, people will definitely agree to improve Internet access but not public transpotation. From my view, the content lives offered by Internet is a chronic posion. So absorbed in the convenient life we are that we are losing something more important.  Gradually you talk less to your family ,tired of hearing the local events, you become lazier that you no more want to take a journey to the dream land , satisfied by the beatiful pictures taken by others. What's worst is that you are abandoning the real pleasure of life , seeking for the fictional delight on the Internet. Maybe in the end the posion take effect  to make you lose the interest of life and give yourself up to the computer games or online chatting.  As a result , you life is destoried by Internet.

  In sum,this is a  matter of  the people's livehood and the society's progress, a matter that no government can afford to ignore and this view is accepted by more and more people . In this case , it's not hard to see that  what people need most and use generally should be the basic construct , public transportation, rather than the subsidiray product of highly developed society like the Internet.
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-6-20 10:35:54 | 只看该作者
呼呼,
昨天作业太多了没写作文,这是在微机课上写的,

写的挺仓促的会有不少错误, 大家多多包涵啦。

还请大家多多指点~
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-6-20 10:45:16 | 只看该作者
阿伦艾弗森 发表于 2013-6-19 16:15
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谢谢阿伦同学的指点~

那个so content is our attitude ti life是我们对生活过于满足,应该是我没表示明白
was修饰的是intentions.

我们学校的老师前一阵总让我们分析长难句啊什么的,天天都见不到短句子了...应该是受那个的影响吧,然后自己总是不自觉的写,然后还写不好....
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-6-20 10:47:46 | 只看该作者
louzhou 发表于 2013-6-19 16:21
红色错误,蓝色表建议,高亮表赞。
由于找不到删除线,用下划线表删除...

谢谢指点~~~嘿嘿谢谢鼓励~~

我也觉得论点我总是写不正确,偏题啊偏题。
不知道练论点这个应该怎么练,能给我写建议么~~

最后谢谢啊
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