【逵逵写作文17.0-TWE164】

likui

164. People do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nothing is more valuable than health. It is the foundation of one’s future success. Imagine that if a person became sick, how could he pursue his career effectively? People do various things in order to stay healthy. As to me, I take some exercise daily to maintain my healthy, and it really makes effects. In the following discussion, I will elaborate my view with examples.

Firstly of all, taking exercise is an active and effective method. There are so many kinds of exercise that people can choose, ranging from participation in sports such as ball games to running slowly in the morning. If people feel a certain kind of exercise boring or too hard for themselves, they can easily jump to another. We do exercise with happiness. The fresh air, exciting competitions, to say nothing of opportunities to make new friends, all make our life better. Still, exercise not only strengthens our bodies but afford our intellectual impetus. For example, regular exercise forges our willpower.

Secondly, participating in exercise is a more convenient and economic way. Like me, some people cannot afford advanced exercise facilities and get no requirement to do exercise in gym. But even a simple morning walk can benefit us. I am glad to say hello to my neighborhoods or pedestrians mutually every morning. In addition, achieving two result though one stroke, people can learn practical skill during taking exercise. Swimming is an instance. In some dangerous situations, such swimming skill, even a little, can help one survive.

Admittedly, to maintain and enhance healthy is a matter of several influences. We cannot deny the help of nutrition and medicine. But from my experience, I certainly emphasize the importance of doing exercise. Medicine claiming to be the cure-all never exists. Meanwhile, without regular exercise, the nutrition cannot be absorbed well.

In conclusion, given the reasons above, it is not difficult for us to reach the conclusion that doing exercise is a perfect way to stay healthy. I was convinced by its effects and advantages, and recommend this standpoint of healthy to people valuing healthy.

zhoushao

以下是引用likui在2004-12-20 20:43:00的发言：

In conclusion, given the reasons above, it is not difficult for us to reach the conclusion that doing exercise is a perfect way to stay healthy. I was convinced by its effects and advantages, and recommend this standpoint of healthy to people valuing healthy.

kuikui写的越来越好啦

只是这句话given the reasons above,主语是什么呢，偶很少来TWE区，也很久没看作文了，不知是不是麻木了

dundun

我很佩服逵逵的文字功底,有些单词我还要用词典才能看到懂下面是我修改的,我是当自己在写这篇作文... 见笑了..

另外,我觉得文章太长了,我不知道逵逵是否在30分钟内完成的? 反正我是肯定不能在规定的时间内写这么多字的.建议文章再精简一些. 我觉得你的结尾句写的很好!!

Nothing is more valuable than health. It is the foundation of one’s future success. Imaging that if a person became sick, how could he pursue his career effectively? People do various things in order to stay healthy (adj.). As to me (I think “To my opinion” is better than the underline), I (would like to) take some exercises daily to maintain my healthy, and it really makes effects (they really have good effects on my body). In the following discussion, I will elaborate my view with examples.

Firstly of (in) all, taking exercise is an active and effective method. There are so many kinds of exercises that (which) people can choose, ranging from participation (participating) in sports (sport games,) such as ball games (,) to running slowly in the morning. If people feel a certain kind of exercise boring or too hard for (very difficult to) themselves, they can easily jump (shift) to another (freely). We do exercise with happiness. The fresh air, exciting competitions, to say nothing of opportunities to make new friends, all make our life better. (We do exercises with happiness. The fresh air and exciting competitions, all make our lives better.) Still, exercise not only strengthens our bodies but (also) afford our intellectual impetus (the impetus of our intellectuality/intelligence). For example, regular exercise forges our willpower.

Secondly, participating in exercise is a more convenient and economic way. Like me, some people (Some people just like me) cannot afford advanced exercise facilities and get no requirement to do exercise in gym. But even a simple morning walk can benefit us. I am glad to say hello to my neighborhoods (neighbors) or pedestrians mutually every morning. In addition, achieving two result(s) though one stroke, people can learn practical skill during taking exercise. Swimming is an instance. In some dangerous situation, such swimming skill, even a little, can help one survive.

Admittedly, to maintain and enhance healthy is a matter of several influences. We cannot deny the help of nutrition and medicine. But from (based on) my experience, I certainly emphasize the importance of doing exercise. Medicine claiming (claimed) to be the cure-all never exists. Meanwhile, without regular exercise, the nutrition cannot be absorbed well.

In conclusion, given the reasons above, it is not difficult for us to reach the conclusion that doing exercise is a perfect way to stay healthy. I was convinced by its effects and advantages, and recommend this standpoint of healthy to people valuing healthy.

likui

只是这句话given the reasons above,主语是什么呢，偶很少来TWE区，也很久没看作文了，不知是不是麻木了

这个应该没错，经常出现的。

zhoushao

那可能时偶真的有点麻木了

dna1984

achieving two results though one stroke  kuikui要说的是一举两得吗?

呵呵  怎么google上面都找不到这么用的 呵呵 是不是孤陋寡闻啦 嘻嘻

sunnyxr

People do various things in order to stay healthy. As to me, I take some exercise daily to maintain my healthy, and it really makes effects.

我觉得to maintain my healtht 和前句的to stay healthy 重复了，可否删去，使文章简洁些。

sunnyxr

People do various things in order to stay healthy. As to me, I take some exercise daily to maintain my healthy, and it really makes effects.

我觉得to maintain my healtht 和前句的to stay healthy 重复了，可否删去，使文章简洁些。

sunnyxr

很抱歉，第一次尝试修改作文，对于各种发贴技巧尚在摸索中。

   下面继续说说我的一点看法:

Firstly of all, taking exercise is an active and effective method.

First of all 似乎为更常见的用法。

Secondly, participating in exercise is a more convenient and economic way. Like me, some people cannot afford advanced exercise facilities and get no requirement to do exercise in gym. But even a simple morning walk can benefit us.

可以理解作者的意思，但是表达的不是很清楚。试着改改：Secondly, participating in exercise could be in a more convenient and economic way. It is not necessery for some people, like me, to pay advanced exercise facilities or get access to gym to do exercise.  Even a simple morning walk can benefit us.

I am glad to say hello to my neighborhoods (应为neighbors)or pedestrians mutually (此处应用形容词mutual pedestrians)every morning.

我也不太明白这句achieving two result though one stroke。是否有这样的用法？though 是否为through的笔误？

I was convinced by its effects and advantages, and recommend this standpoint of healthy to people valuing healthy.(很别扭）

likui

以下是引用dna1984在2004-12-26 23:55:00的发言：

achieving two results though one stroke  kuikui要说的是一举两得吗?

呵呵  怎么google上面都找不到这么用的 呵呵 是不是孤陋寡闻啦 嘻嘻

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