这是我练的一篇AA，希望哪位考过的大牛帮忙简要看看存在神马大的问题.在神马分数段.谢

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The following appeared in anewspaper editorial.

"As violence in moviesincreases, so do crime  rates in ourcities. To combat this problem we must establish a board to censor certainmovies, or we must limit admission to persons over 21 years of age. Apparentlyour legislators are not concerned about this issue since a bill calling forsuch actions recently failed to receive a majority vote."

'Discuss how well reasoned,.etc.

The conclusion endorsed in this argument isthat the legislators of their city are not concerned about the issue of therising crime rates in their city. The line of the reasoning is that because therising crime rates coincide with the increasing violence in movies, thisseemingly relevant connection between them makes the editor insist on the pointthat to combat this problem they must establish a board to censor certainmovies or limit the admission to persons over 21 years of age. But a billcalling for such actions recently failed to receive a majority vote , therefore, theirlegislators are not concerned about this issue. Obviously, a further reflectionreveals the conclusion is based on some dubious assumptions and the reasoningis based due to the inadequacy and partiality in the nature of the evidenceprovided to justify the conclusion. A careful examination would review how groundlessthe conclusion is.

To begin with, the editor commits a fallacy thatbecause the rising crime rates coincide with the increasing violence in themovies , the former event is caused by the latter event. All we know is justthat the two events happen together but there is no more other evidence insupport of this claim. We can also think that the rising crime rates are causedby other reasons . For example, more computer games about violence which havecome into people’s life especially teenagers’ might be the most serious cause ,after all so many teenagers are addicted in them. So unless the editor providessufficient evidence in support of this problematic assumption , the whole reasoningbegins with such a erroring premise that how can it be convincing.

In addition , part of the editor’ reasoning is that aeffective measure to combat the problem is to limit the admission to personsover 21 years os age. So the editor assume that the rising crime rates arealmost due to the persons under 21 years old. Apparently there is no evidenceto support it. So there is no reason for others to believe that the measure is appropriateto be taken.

Moreover, the editor concude that because the billdoes not receive the majority note,their legislators are not concern about thisissue. Along with the reasoning problems stating above , this conclusion is reallyunwarrented. For example, maybe because most legislators have aqquired moreconcrete evidence which show that the real causes of the problem are notas the editor have thought , as a result , they would not support the bill.

To conclude, the conclusion is not persuasive as itstands. Accordingly, it is imprudent for the editor to make such an argumentfull of flaws. To make the argument logically acceptable, the editor would haveto show that the increasing violence in the movies is the only or the mostimportant reasons for the rising claim rates and the other potential reasonscan not make a difference .To silidify the conclusion , the editor shouldprovide evidence as well to denmonstrate that the logislators are really notconcerned about the issue although they understand the bill can be effective. Ina word, only with more concrete evidence could the conclusion become more thanjust an emotional appeal.