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Thefollowing was written as a part of an application for a small-business loan bya group of developers in the city of Monroe.
　　"A jazz music club inMonroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearestjazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, theC-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popularin Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival lastsummer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-ratedradio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M.Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to$1,000 per year on jazz entertainment."
Write a response in which you discusswhat specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how theevidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.



In thisargument, the arguer concludesthat a jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise.Although the argument sounds reasonable and theauthor's plan appears alluring诱人的 at first glance, its author fails to provide sufficient evidence topermit a proper evaluation of the argument's reasoning. Each point ofdeficiency is discussed separately below.  To strengthen his argument, the author mustprovide more evidence.

One ofthe argument's deficiencies isthat the author provides no specific evidence thatcurrently the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away, thus, the proposed new jazzclub in Monroe, the c-note, would have the local market all to itself.  First of all, if Monroe residents love jazz,there will have a club earlier.  Second,except competitor, decoration, the lead singer, advertisement, and more are aclub success factors. It would be helpful to obtaininformation about will jazz fans like the new club?  If the nearest jazz club is famous and thereare many famous singer and the new club just a small, dirty, and doesn’t followthe trend club, the Monroe people wouldn’t like it and give up the originalone.  There isneed more information about the nearest jazz club is 65miles away then thenew club will have the local market all to itself

Anotherweakness of the argument is that it provides no information about a nationwide studyindicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment." It would be useful to know whether jazz fan willing tospend money to join in club.  Even ifjazz fan willing to spend money, they wouldn’t willing to spend money to joinin c-note.  They can spend money onbuying many CDs or going to their favorite singer’s concert.

Yetanother of the editorial's shortcomings has to do with over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazzfestival last summer which would require detailedinformation about 100,000 people Monroe residents account how much. Thereare over 100,000 people don’t mean they all are Monroe residents.  In addition, several well-known jazz musicianslive in Monroe and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,'which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M doesn’t mean Monroe people love jazz.  

In view of the above, it can be said that the conclusion presentedin the argument sounds unconvincing due to lack of substantial evidence as a jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendouslyprofitable enterprise. In a nutshell, then, a proper evaluation of the editorial requiresmore information about openinga jazz club in Monroe will attract local residents come.
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普渡哥

its author fails to provide sufficient evidence to permit a proper evaluation of the argument's reasoning.

its 用the 代替 我觉得更好。

普渡哥

it can be said that the conclusion presented in the argument sounds unconvincing due to lack of substantial evidence as a jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise.

lack前加the, as换成of

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额，弱弱问一下为什么lack前面要加the.....