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望风

Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Which one do you prefer?

People have different ways to spend most of their time. Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone; on the other hand, others like to be with friends most of the time. As far as I am concerned I prefer to spend most of my time with my friends because friends do create more funs and bring vast learning opportunities.

To begin with, it is commonly believed that friends are people where human get most happiness from. Together with our friends, we could do exciting group activities that a single person could never enjoy alone, such as soccer, football, and so on. Why group sports are more popular than solo sports? It is because people really gain funs and happiness from them. Thus, the relationship between friends would be enhanced and promoted by playing together. On the other hand, with a bunch of friends together we could solve problems easily. For instance, it is always easier to raise funds by many people than one. It is always being said that “two heads are always better than one.” With the helps from friends, people could get more chance to achieve goals.

Second, another chief reason in support of view point is that the existence of friends creates vast learning opportunities. As a young teenager, we are always learning knowledge from different people through various methods. No doubt, friends is one of the most precious group of people that we gain social experience and independent skills from. In fact, young teenagers always have brilliant imagination and creative thinking.

Admittedly, there is no denying that spend too much time with friends also have some disadvantages. The more young teenagers spend time with friends, the less time they would focus on their academic studies. For young teenagers, their main goal right now should be studying instead of spending most of time playing with friends. On the other hand, friends may give negative influence and bad attitude to people. But these disadvantages are too weak to sufficiently strengthen the viewpoint.

As discussed above, spend most time with friends could bring me happiness and learning opportunities. All the benefits we gain from our friends are unmatchable asset to our future and could create enormous influences over regular life.

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Veronica_Melody

People have different ways to spend most of their time. Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone; on the other hand, others like to be with friends most of the time. As far as I am concerned, I prefer to spend most of my time with my friends because friends do create more funs and bring vast learning opportunities. (Break up this long sentence into two)

To begin with, it is commonly believed that friends are people where human get most happiness from (Wording is awkward) . Together with our friends, we could do exciting group activities that a single person could never enjoy alone, such as soccer, football, and so on. Why group sports are more popular than solo (single) sports? ( Group sports are more popular than single sport), It is because people really gain funs (fun) and happiness from them (have fun and enjoy the happiness). Thus, the relationship between friends would (can) be enhanced, and promoted by playing together. On the other hand, with a bunch of friends together we could solve problems easily. For instance, it is always easier to raise funds by many people than one. It is always being said that (A well-known proverb is ) “two heads are always better than one.” With the helps from friends, people could get more chance (chances) to achieve goals.

Second, another (if you use second, another is not necessary) chief (main is a better word) reason in support (supporting the viewpoint) of view point is that the existence of friends creates vast learning opportunities. As a young teenager, we (keep it consistent, we and a teenager) are always learning (gaining) knowledge from different people through various methods. No doubt, friends is (friends IS??) one of the most precious group (groups, because it’s one of them) of people that we gain social experience (experiences) and independent skills from. In fact, young teenagers always have brilliant imagination and creative thinking.

Admittedly, there is no denying that spend (spends) too much time with friends also have some disadvantages. The more (time) young teenagers spend time with their friends, the less time they would (have to) focus on their academic studies. For young teenagers, their main goal right now should be (is ) studying instead of spending most of time playing with friends. On the other hand, friends may give negative influence and bad attitude to people. But these disadvantages are too weak (trivial) to sufficiently strengthen the viewpoint.

As discussed above, spending most time with friends could bring me happiness and learning opportunities. All the benefits we gain from our friends are unmatchable asset to our future and could create enormous influences over regular life.

望风

多谢 Veronica_Melody  帮助修改!!

Veronica_Melody

no problem. good luck!