issue 13 求点评

dedede1

    As is describe in this issue, author believes that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study. In my point of, what author says is not thoroughly correct because the words “require” is too extreme in this case. I think instead of require, universities should encourage students to take a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study.
    As far as I am concerned, taking a variety of courses can help us to explore the world and to find out what we truly love. A lot of students go to university with a common confusion: “what do we really like to do?” Taking a variety of courses can bring them different real feelings about different kind of fields that they might eventually devoted to. Bill gates will not devote to computer unless he used it and had feeling about it. And there are some fields that students will enjoy and they need to find that out by taking variety of courses.
    For students who have already know what they like to do, taking different courses can also help them achieve their goal. One thing students can learn from taking different courses is they can know how others think and will understand how to view a certain thing from different ways. Once they understand to view a thing from different perspectives, they can make a better analyze when they face difficulties in future and they can solve the difficulties easier. Take noble prize winner, Kroto as an example, he was inspired by an architecture so that he figured out the structure of C60. Kroto loves painting and architecture when he was a student in university and he said these hobbies helped him a lot in the later career as a scientist.
     What’s more, taking different courses can also help students make friends with people who have different hobbies, backgrounds. It can help up socialize with variety of people. Sometimes the field student chose might not finally be the job that student got, but the people they knew from different courses can end up being good friends for a life time.
       However, given all the benefits mentioned above, universities still should not require every student to take variety of courses. Education should base on student’s interest and if a students really have no interest in math, university should not require him or her to study it. A lot of great writers are poor at math, such as Chinese famous novelist qian zhong shu, who got only 9 points in the high school entrance examination. If universities force them to study math, they probably could never be such a good novelist.
      To sum up, even though taking variety of courses can help students find out their interest, broaden their horizon, socialize with different people, universities still should not require ever student to take variety of courses because education should base on the interest of students.
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普渡哥

As is describe in this issue,   一开头就是语法问题。。

竹林中人

As is described in this issue, authorbelieves that universities should require every student to take a variety ofcourses outside the student’s field of study. In my point of view, what author says is not thoroughly correctbecause the word “require” is too extreme in this case（which case？）. I think instead of requiring, universities should encourage students totake a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study.
  As far as I am concerned, taking a variety of courses can help us to（help后面的to可以不要） explorethe world and to find out what we truly love. A lot of students go touniversity with a common confusion: “what do we really like to do?” Taking avariety of courses can bring them different real feelings about different kindof fields that they might eventually devoted to.Bill gates will not devote to computer unless he usedit and had feeling about it例子不要说得这么抽象. And there are some fields that students will enjoy and they need tofind that out by taking variety of courses.
  For students who have already known whatthey like to do, taking different courses can also help them achieve theirgoal. One thing students can learn from taking different courses is they can know how others think and will understand how toview a certain thing from different ways. 这句话意思不很明确Once they understand to view a thingfrom different perspectives, they can make a better analyzewhen they face difficulties in future and they can solve the difficultieseasier. 这句话需要重新组织下比较好，显得比较啰嗦Take noble prize专有名词首字母要大写 winner, Kroto as an example, he was inspired by an architecture sothat he figured out the structure of C60. Kroto loves painting and architecturewhen he was a student in university and he said these hobbies helped him a lotin the later career as a scientist.希望举的例子能佐证你的推理过程，仅仅给出一个结果感觉太抽象，不知道你觉得如何
   What’s more, taking different courses can also help students makefriends with people who have different hobbies, backgrounds. It can help upsocialize with variety of people. Sometimes the field student chose might notfinally be the job that student got, but the peoplethey knew （一句话里面保持数的一致，前面是student，这里就应该是he or she 而不是they） fromdifferent courses can end up being good friends for a life time.
     However, given all the benefits mentioned above, universities stillshould not require every student to take variety of courses. Education shouldbase on student’s interest and if a student really has no interest in math,university should not require him or her to study it. A lot of great writersare poor at math, such as Chinese famous novelist Qian Zhongshu, who got only 9points in the high school entrance examination. If universities force them tostudy math, they probably could never be such a good novelist.
    To sum up, even though taking variety of courses can help students findout their interest, broaden their horizon, socialize with different people,universities still should not require ever student to take variety of coursesbecause education should base on the interest of students.
问题1语法错误很多，这很不必要，训练中要有意识地注意下
问题2.文章重心没把握好。中间有三段是关于好处的，只有一段简短的话提到不好，这很难让人信服你的观点。