第一篇的修改No.16,guandream 多指教

Emilyhua

guandream

Emilyhua,

for the sake of progress, it is good idea to rewrite your essy. in this respect, you did a good job. but this website provides visitors with plateform to communicate and learn from each other, so it is not a good idea to mention specific ID to do so, because there are a lot of NN here, and they are willing to help.

Enjoying food in restaurant is one of my favorite hobbies.In my hometown,Shanghai,the metropolitan city of China,there are a lot of restaurants,(.)I like having dinner in the restaurant with family to enjoy my favorite food rather than cooking food at home.( no comma)Because of the features of restaurant such as convinience and enviorment.However,in this case( which case?),I fully disagree if a new restaurant may be built in my neighborhood.(it is excellent try for your introduction, although the idea was not well-organized.)

Obviously,building a new restaurant means taking additional noise to the daily lives of neighborhood.Neighborhood is the place where people enjoy lives with their family,and also It is the community that provide peaceful and beautiful environment .I can not imagine, when you sit at home after a whole day's work, that you still hear the noisy music ,the laughts and speaking come from the restaurant nearby.

Besides the noise polution,the pollution of the air is the another problemt (it is a very excellent linking sentence).Not only can restaurant provide the delicious cuisine but the polluted water ,cooking smoke and litter from the kitchen;Moreover all of this break the biologic balance  which exist in the community formerly and lead to the unstable changes with unexpected consequence.For example,once a famous chinese restaurant opened in my neighborhood,thought the owner invited many celebrities to join the opening ceremony,it can not prevend the people nearby writing complain letters about the pollution to Municiple Government.

In addition,security problem could be expected if there is a restaurant in your neighborhood.wherever  a restaurant is located,Many people with different backgrounds such as gang memebers will be attracted to it.from different places. the crowd may result to theft or other crimes.Finally,the problem could lead to conflics among neighborhood.

Although,There is no denying   the fact that you can easily get to the restaurant and enjoy the delicious food at the restaurant near your nighborhood.As far as I am concerned,building a restaurant in my neighborhood has more disadvantages than advantages.Therefore,based on the above dicussion,i disagree with the opinion.

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