从12.19起, Liz 回来了, 这次要求很低,作文只要30分! 不要29~ 求亲们狠批~

lizchang1990

21 December
Independent Writing: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns.
Integrated Writing: TPO 16

Economic growth is like a hot hog that a variety of countries have been expecting to get. Now, here comes a thorny issue towards that which one government should select when facing environmental concerns and fast economic development. From my perspective, the former outweighs over the latter.

To begin with, it is a short sight for government to pay much attention on economic growth. From the aspect of economy, we can see that people eventually will pay off their imprudent actions- ignoring the environment factors-when they only focus on money. Since if we take expense of cozy habitat for a rich nation, several decades latter, we still need to spend much money in dealing with the negative effects we have made. To make my perspective more compelling, I would like to take America and China as examples. It is an undeniable fact that the two countries are strong in economy, but it also is an undisputed picture that they have contributed a lot to address these environmental problems in recent years. Even though speedy economic growth is tempting, in the long run it is not an efficient way for nations to win a permanent benefit.

Moreover, comfortable environment can attract more talents, who can bring huge interest to a nation and create intangible assets for a long time. When it comes to this point, I tend to believe that Netherland will be the best example. According to nationwide survey in China in 2011, Netherland has become an ideal peaceful Garden of Eden in the eyes of most Chinese young people, and they are yearning to spend their life there when they are old. Why we urge to go to Holland? Obviously, green environment plays an important role on this issue. In fact, a large group of individuals immigrate this beautiful country, including many IT elites and business tycoon. All of these outside talents are undoubtedly vital elements for the sustainable development of Holland.

Last but not least, good environment can create a harmonious circumstance, boosting residents’ happiness and reinforcing the stability of a nation. As we know, all development should rely on a stable surrounding, if people are not satisfied with their environment, the negative situations will appear and cause unexpected unrest. If this is the case, how can we talk about the promising future? Therefore, from this side we may safely state that good environment is an indispensable ingredient to the economic growth, and we should consider the factor as a top priority.


Given all these reasons I mentioned above, I firmly believe that comfortable setting can benefit not only the citizens but also the government itself from myriad aspects. If we are blind or pay less attention on environment concerns, it will be hard for us to imagine the result in the near future.

vanessa923

黄亮精彩，蓝色建议。红色错误。

Economic growth is like a hot hog that a variety of countries have been expecting to get. Now, here comes a thorny issue towards that which one governmentshould select when facing environmental concerns and fast economic development.（我一愣看成哪个政府，所以你看看这样改怎样which  to choose for government when...) From my perspective, the former outweighs over the latter.

To begin with, it is a short sight for government to pay much attention on economic growth. From the aspect of economy, we can see that people eventually will pay off their imprudent actions- ignoring the environment factors-when they only focus on money. Since if we take expense of （这个短语我表示疑问,一般都是at expense of )）cozy habitat for a rich nation, several decades latter(later), we still need to spend much money in dealing with the negative effects we have made. To make my perspective more compelling, I would like to take America and China as examples. It is an undeniable fact that the two countries are strong in economy, but it also is an undisputed picture that they have contributed a lot to address these environmental problems in recent years. Even though speedy economic growth is tempting, in the long run it is not an efficient way for nations to win a permanent benefit.(这句话表示我看的很费解）

Moreover, comfortable environment can attract more talents, who can bring huge interest to a nation and create intangible assets for a long time. When it comes to this point, I tend to believe that Netherland will be the best example. According to nationwide survey in China in 2011, Netherland has become an ideal peaceful Garden of Eden in the eyes of most Chinese young people, and they are yearning to spend their life there when they are old. Why we urge to go to Holland? Obviously, green environment plays an important role on this issue. In fact, a large group of individuals immigrate (into) this beautiful country, including many IT elites and business tycoon. All of these outside talents are undoubtedly vital elements for the sustainable development of Holland. （怎么又和可持续发展扯上关系捏。不够convincing哦。。。）

Last but not least, good environment can create a harmonious circumstance, boosting residents’ happiness and reinforcing the stability of a nation. As we know, all development should rely on a stable surrounding, if people are not satisfied with their environment, the negative situations will appear（你看看换成arise怎样？） and cause unexpected unrest. If this is the case, how can we talk about the promising future? Therefore, from this side we may safely state that good environment is an indispensable ingredient to the economic growth, and we should consider the factor as a top priority. （赞一个！）

Given all these reasons I mentioned above, I firmly believe that comfortable setting can benefit not only the citizens but also the government itself from myriad aspects. If we are blind or pay less attention on environment concerns, it will be hard for us to imagine the result in the near future.

MM词汇很强大的说。句式逻辑很流畅。赞一个啦！受教了！

lizchang1990

12.22 综合
The listening and the reading uphold totally opposite viewpoint towards whether archaeologists were faced with serious problems and limitations in Britain. The professor illustrates that the perspective in the article is unwarranted, and then she provides three points to support her opinion.


To begin with, the lecturer contradicts the statement in the reading, which indicates that the growth of Britain's population plays a role on the issue about destroying ancient settlement. She demonstrates that constructing companies will examine the building site first, if they are interested in the site and think it has a great value, then builders, local government, construction organization and archaeologists will get together to make a plan to preserve it. In addition, new documents will be properly made before constructing corporation started to pull down the buildings. Therefore, it is impossible that people will cause damage to the historical sites.

Moreover, the speaker also casts doubt on author's argument, which suggests that financial support is inadequate for many archaeologists because if government changes the priority, it will bring about periodic reductions in funding. She makes the points that all support are paid by a construction company rather than the government. The construction institute will pay for the examination and research. What's more, these constructing corporations have done more researchers than they do in the past, so more workers will carry out the preservation plan.

Finally, the presenter states that the reason in the passage is highly imprudent. She explains that companies hire all stages of the process, including examination, drawing a plan, doing a research and processing the date and writing report on an article. Hence, they will employ more workers. In fact, now organizations have created a large number of professional jobs for archeologists in Britain.

To conclude, the instructor successfully points out corresponding problems in the article.

cleotina

Liz,  above is just oponion, open to discuss.

brace1016

22号是我该你的，我今天下午补上哦。我21号的没有写。写完再改你的哦。不然我的综合不知道怎么改哈。

lizchang1990

22 December
Independent Writing: Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends. a. joing a sports team, b. participate in community activities, or traveling。
Integrated Writing: TPO17

Friend is an intangible asset in our whole life, and a great many individuals have been expecting to make new friends as many as possible. Now, here comes a thorny issue towards which way is the best for students to make new friends. Different people from various backgrounds uphold totally different viewpoint, such as joining a sports team, participating in community activities or travelling. From my perspective, travelling outweighs over the former two factors.

First of all, we should make a general consideration about what element is vital for making a new friend. Then we will analyze why human beings are more likely to be close to others. My opinion will be supported by detailed illustrations as following.

Leisure time is a good time for us to release our mental stress, and we also will feel free to talk or discuss some intriguing topics. I believe nobody will have a trip when he or she is very busy, travelling generally will be planed during the short or long holidays when they feel less stressed. In fact, in such a relaxed situation, people usually like to share or chat something with strangers. Since people don’t need to care about the tedious or heavy work in their daily schedule, the only thing they need to consider is to enjoy the beautiful day. Therefore, it is no wonder that a variety of individuals can make lovely friends during their journey. These extrinsic and objective ingredients create a basic platform to make friends.

Strangers can leave more mysterious impressions on persons. As a result, new comers will be more attractive for counterparts. This element also makes a crucial contribution to develop friendship each other. To make my view more compelling, I would like to take my own experience as an example. Last year, when I was travelling in Las Vegas, I was curious about every thing, including the new surroundings and travelers around me. At that time, I met a senior couple in a public bus who came from Liaoniang, China. After I talked with them, I found them knew many things in the world, and they also shared feelings in the tour. In addition, since we had different standpoints and experiences in our own life, I was extremely glad to discuss those I didn’t know. The man had rich knowledge and profound insights, which attracted me so much. I think that maybe the magic magnetism among strangers, so we are more easily to accept this kind of friends.

Plight can also create favorable situation for us to know each other better and cut down the destination between two unfamiliar hearts. When we are taking a vacation, it is an inevitable case that we will meet some problems, for example, lost in a metropolis or wallet is stolen. In this situation, we always look forward to receiving others’ help immediately. It is true that the solid wall in our heart will be broken by others’ kind-hearted assistance. Meanwhile, new friendship can be built up as well.

Given all these reasons I mentioned above, I firmly believe that traveling is a top priority for us to make new partners. It is undeniable that both extrinsic and intrinsic elements facilitate the communication and strength the relationships among strangers. Hence, next time, why not take a journey to enlarge our social networks?

lizchang1990

TPO 17 综合:
The listening and the reading uphold totally opposite perspectives toward the impacts which accompany with the steady growth of the human population and corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use. The professor illustrates that the argument in the article is completely unconvincing. Then she lists three points to support her standpoints.

To begin with, the lecturer contradicts the statement in the passage, which indicates that birds' natural habitat will continue to disappear as human population expand. She demonstrates that even though urban growth has bad influence on some types of animals, it will create better and larger habitat for other types. For example, animals, such as seagull, pigs, rotain(请帮忙指出这单词究竟是个啥阿,知道是一种鼠,忘拼写了,囧) and so on, will increase because predators like hocks cannot be found in the city, as we know, hocks will prey pigs and rotains. Therefore, maybe some populations will shrink, other populations will grow.

Moreover, the speaker casts doubt on the second opinion in the article, which suggests that bird populations will decline as the growing human population will cause further destruction of bird habitat. She explains that the speed of human's population will not expand soon as the reading described. In fact, Americans use less land every year now. Instead, people develop new productive crops which will produce more food per unit of land. As a result, we don't need to destroy other areas for agriculture.

Finally, the presenter points out that the author's view is unwarranted about chemical pesticides. She makes the points that it is imprudent to predicate the process of increasing pesticides in the near future. Actually, people now are aware of the damage, and there are two changes occur. First, new and less poisons are developed, this change is important for a better result. Second, there has a trend to use pest-resist crops which are genetically designed. Hence, famers reduce the use of toxic chemical pesticides. What’s more, the new way doesn’t hurt the birds at all.

vanessa923

12.22 综合
黄亮精彩，蓝色建议，红色错误。
The listening and the reading uphold totally opposite viewpoint towards whether archaeologists were faced with serious problems and limitations in Britain. The professor illustrates that the perspective in the article is unwarranted, and then she provides three points to support her opinion.


To begin with, the lecturer contradicts the statement in the reading, which indicates that the growth of Britain's population plays a role on the issue about destroying ancient settlement. She demonstrates that constructing companies will examine the building site first, if they are interested in the site and think it has a great value, then builders, local government, construction organization and archaeologists will get together to make a plan to preserve it. In addition, new documents will be properly made before constructing corporation started to pull down the buildings. Therefore, it is impossible that people will cause damage to the historical sites.

Moreover, the speaker also casts doubt on author's argument, which suggests that financial support is inadequate for many archaeologists because if government changes the priority, it will bring about periodic reductions in funding. She makes the points that all support are paid by a construction company rather than the government. The construction institute will pay for the examination and research. What's more, these constructing corporations have done more researchers than they do in the past, so more workers will carry out the preservation plan.
（这句话我没听出来。不过我觉得这句话放在这里有点鸡肋的说）
Finally, the presenter states that the reason in the passage is highly imprudent. She explains that companies hire all stages of the process, including examination, drawing a plan, doing a research and processing the date and writing report on an article. Hence, they will employ more workers. In fact, now organizations have created a large number of professional jobs for archeologists in Britain.

To conclude, the instructor successfully points out corresponding problems in the article.（介个结尾不convincing啊。建议重写。）

恩恩，Liz听力不错的说。我就是记笔记太慢，打字也慢。学习啦！！！

brace1016

Economic growth is like a hot hog（这个是什么意思？hog是猪吧，连着的话hot hog是？） that a variety of countries have been expecting to get. Now, here comes a thorny issue（好词，学习下） towards that which one government should select when facing environmental concerns and fast economic development. From my perspective, the former outweighs over the latter.







To begin with, it is a short sight for government to pay much attention on economic growth.(这句中心句感觉逻辑不是很严谨，怎么说呢，政府大力发展经济是好事的啊。但是如何说政府是牺牲环境来发展经济才是短视的哦，可以再折磨下哦) From the aspect of economy, we can see that people eventually will pay off their imprudent actions- ignoring the environment factors-when they only focus on money. Since if we take expense of cozy habitat for a rich nation, several decades latter, we still need to spend much money in dealing with the negative effects we have made. To make my perspective more compelling, I would like to take America and China as examples. It is an undeniable fact that the two countries are strong in economy, but it also is（also放在be的后面吧） an undisputed picture that they have contributed a lot to address these environmental problems in recent years. Even though speedy economic growth is tempting, in the long run it is not an efficient way for nations to win a permanent benefit.（这段的论证感觉不是很有说服力，美国和中国的例子到底是想说明什么呢？如何说美国和中国是反例的话，100年前美国的环境污染很严重的，现在美国他们把很多污染的企业转移到中国来了，他们美国现在很注重环境保护。但是中国一味的发展经济然忽略的环境问题，看看那些河流之类的）







Moreover, comfortable environment can attract more talents, who can bring huge interest to a nation and create intangible assets for a long time. （这里可以加上说明这样更有利于经济的发展）When it comes to this point, I tend to believe that Netherland will be the best example. According to nationwide survey in China in 2011, Netherland has become an ideal peaceful Garden of Eden in the eyes of most Chinese young people, and they are yearning to spend their life there when they are old. Why we urge to go to Holland? Obviously, green environment plays an important role on this issue. In fact, a large group of individuals immigrate this beautiful country, including many IT elites and business tycoon. All of these outside talents are undoubtedly vital elements for the sustainable development of Holland.







Last but not least, good environment can create a harmonious circumstance, boosting residents’ happiness and reinforcing the stability of a nation.（在这里可以说社会稳定人民生活幸福了才能更好的发展经济）As we know, all development should rely on a stable surrounding, if people are not satisfied with their environment, the negative situations will appear and cause unexpected unrest. If this is the case, how can we talk about the promising future? Therefore, from this side we may safely state that good environment is an indispensable ingredient to the economic growth, and we should consider the factor as a top priority.







Given all these reasons I mentioned above, I firmly believe that comfortable setting can benefit not only the citizens but also the government itself from myriad aspects. If we are blind or pay less attention on environment concerns, it will be hard for us to imagine the result in the near future.



你的语言真的好，但是我感觉逻辑论证不是很明确，有点跳了一步去论证的感觉。题目是To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns. 你论证中说环境的重要性，但是没有明确说明环境对经济发展的重要。就是你自己知道环境重要了，那么对发展经济自己有好处，好处没有明显的说出来。要我读了之后自己领悟的。我不知道我这样说对不对哦。我们可以讨论下。对了我找了别的版本的机经，题目跟这个有点出入。别的版本是这样的Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should focus its budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development. 感觉差不多，但是还是有点出入。这里是说明政府的预测在那个多点。都是经济增长和环保的问题。

lizchang1990

恩恩,谢谢brace赐教了,哎~~~加强逻辑!!!!