22日可耻的缺考的我！懦夫！！请大家狠批！再求个口语学习方法！！

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Agree or disagree? Children should do similar jobs with their parents?

Recently, a controversial issue has been brought into people’s eye-sights that concerns（作动词没有主语啊，作名词不能修饰children） children’s future career path. Weather should they enter the industry or take jobs similar with their parents（反问很好）? Just as the saying goes that one hundred people will have one hundred shake spear（Shakespeare） in their mind. Some individuals claim that since parents gives a tremendous influence on their children, in other words, parents may be the best teacher for kids. The job which is similar with their parents will always be the best choice for children to take. However, as a young man with freedom thing, I held the opposite view that children should find their interest by themselves. The following reason will substantiate my opinion well.

To begin with, as the modern society and technology grows, obtaining information from every possible resource via internet became a piece of cake(很好的长句), and also how well next generations use internet became a very（是不是少个形容词？） topic on education. For instance, could you image a young work goes home for asking help from his father when he faced a problem on his job? Thanks to the rapid growth of IT technology enable people to learn almost anything by just clicking mouse. Apparently, parents are not a most efficient information resources any more.（写的不错，但是父母就算不是resource，但是没有写出为甚么孩子们的工作和父母一样的问题）

Additionally, if we check this（手段开头this无法指代） issue form society growths prospective, you probably will find a varieties types of job disappeared because of the growths of civilization. New kinds of jobs entirely replaced old jobs. New industries take over traditional industries. This replace pace is becoming quicker and quicker. For example, almost 50 years ago, Japan has a very unique jobs（单复数） called grass roof maker, this workers master held a skill using grass to build tradition Japanese style roof. But currently you will have difficult *（have difficulty in doing）to find those workers, simplely because people are no longer living in this old house. Even in the existing industry, the knowledge parents（？） possessing will be outdated quickly. In one sentence, accounting on Counting on（指望的意思吧？）parents’ working experiences to choose job is too risky.（很好的论证段！）


From all aspects taken into consideration, I can draw my conclusion confidently that in the rapidly changing world today, children should discover their interest and utilize any possible resources to chase their future career path. I believe doing chose independently will satisfice they most.

22teng在成长了，比之前好太多。加油，注意小错误（虽然这次少多了）。加油！

tengawaakito

Agree or disagree? Children should do similar jobs with their parents?

Recently, a controversial issue has been brought into people’s eye-sights that concerns（作动词没有主语啊，作名词不能修饰children） children’s future career path. Weather should they enter the industry or take jobs similar with their parents（反问很好）? Just as the saying goes that one hundred people will have one hundred shake spear（Shakespeare） in their mind. Some individuals claim that since parents gives a tremendous influence on their children, in other words, parents may be the best teacher for kids. The job which is similar with their parents will always be the best choice for children to take. However, as a young man with freedom thing, I held the opposite view that children should find their interest by themselves. The following reason will substantiate my opinion well.

To begin with, as the modern society and technology grows, obtaining information from every possible resource via internet became a piece of cake(很好的长句), and also how well next generations use internet became a very（是不是少个形容词？） topic on education. For instance, could you image a young work goes home for asking help from his father when he faced a problem on his job? Thanks to the rapid growth of IT technology enable people to learn almost anything by just clicking mouse. Apparently, parents are not a most efficient information resources any more.（写的不错，但是父母就算不是resource，但是没有写出为甚么孩子们的工作和父母一样的问题）

Additionally, if we check this（手段开头this无法指代） issue form society growths prospective, you probably will find a varieties types of job disappeared because of the growths of civilization. New kinds of jobs entirely replaced old jobs. New industries take over traditional industries. This replace pace is becoming quicker and quicker. For example, almost 50 years ago, Japan has a very unique jobs（单复数） called grass roof maker, this workers master held a skill using grass to build tradition Japanese style roof. But currently you will have difficult *（have difficulty in doing）to find those workers, simplely because people are no longer living in this old house. Even in the existing industry, the knowledge parents（？） possessing will be outdated quickly. In one sentence, accounting on Counting on（指望的意思吧？）parents’ working experiences to choose job is too risky.（很好的论证段！）


From all aspects taken into consideration, I can draw my conclusion confidently that in the rapidly changing world today, children should discover their interest and utilize any possible resources to chase their future career path. I believe doing chose independently will satisfice they most.

22teng在成长了，比之前好太多。加油，注意小错误（虽然这次少多了）。加油！

-- by 会员 45573asdasd (2012/12/15 23:17:05)

谢谢你的建议和鼓励啊！我这两天练习口语呢
要是你有什么好的模板的话能否法我一些？




ps：一百个人眼中应该是有一百个 哈姆雷特吧！！！！！！！！！！！我们好像犯了大错了~~~~~~~~~~~~~~正确的句子是什么啊？

tengawaakito

Agree ordisagree? The car (automobile) has had great effect on society than theairplane.

As the modern society grows, a controversial issuehas been brought into our eye-sight that whether the automobile has had more impacton society than airplane. Just as one hundred people have one hundred Hamletsin the heart. Some experts consider airplane great changed our civilization,since airplane can travel a large distance in several hours, making worldbecame an earth village. But as an individual, I prefer the idea that the car hasmore impact than plane has. The following reasons will substantiate my idea.

To begin with, the modern society is consisted bymany individuals including you and me. If you check both car and airplane, youwill definitely find that car got great influence on individual’s lifestylemore than airplane. For example, my mother as an important member in the familywho needs to drive car every day for buying food and other stuff fromsupermarket, but only took plane for 6 times by far. Obviously individuals needcar more than airplane. Without automobile, our life just cannot continue.

In addition, how developed the country depends on howwell the economy it reaches. Airplane is a mean of transporting large amountcargo from large distance. It indeed helps to enhance international treading. Howeverthe car is more important for particular industry growth. For example, in Philippe,banana famers need to transport their cargo-banana-to the harbor for exporting.If they do not have the car to complete this task, the banana will either berotted on the tree or became too expansive because they have to use someuneconomical ways to transport. This case shows without the help of automobile,airplane just have nothing to carry, therefore, and developing local economywill be impossible.

From all aspects taken into considerationcarefully, I can draw the conclusion confidently that the automobile is a moreimportant invention in terms of changing our world than airplane.

tengawaakito

今天的话题吐槽点很难找的样子，我都说服不了自己。。。字数少了点。。。不知道乱凑的论点算不算啊？

1369179610

Agree ordisagree? The car (automobile) has had great effect on society than the airplane.

As the modern society grows, a controversial issue has been brought into our eye-sight that whether the automobile has had more impact on society than airplane. Just as one hundred people have one hundred Hamlets in the heart. （There are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes.
）Some experts consider airplane great changing our civilization(consider sth adj +doing),since airplane can travel a large(long) distance in several hours, making world became an earth village. while others...(加一句，好照应那个格言~)But as an individual, I prefer the idea that the car has more impact than plane has. The following reasons will substantiate my idea.
To begin with, the modern society is consisted by many individuals including you and me. If you check both car and airplane, youwill definitely find that car got great influence on individual’s lifestylemore than airplane. For example, my mother as an important member in the familywho needs to drive car every day for buying food and other stuff fromsupermarket, but only took plane for 6 times by far. Obviously individuals need（use）car more frequently than airplane. Without automobile, our life just cannot continue.

In addition, how developed the country is depends on how well the economy level it reaches.（which degree of economic development it has attained） Airplane is a mean of transporting large amounts of cargo from large during long distance. It indeed helps to enhance international treading. However the car is more important for particular industry growth. For example, in Philippine,banana famers need to transport their cargo-banana-to the harbor for exporting.If they do not have the car to complete this task, the banana will either be rotted on the tree or became too expensive because they have to use some uneconomical ways to transport. This case shows without the help of automobile,airplane just have nothing to carry, therefore, and developing local economywill be impossible.(这个想法很新颖嘛~~)

From all aspects taken into consideration carefully, I can draw the conclusion confidently that the automobile is a more important invention in terms of changing our world than airplane.（结尾紧扣主题，不错哦~）


总体来说，本文是切合题意的。个人意见是本文可以从宏观和微观两个角度写，宏观：经济发展，微观：日常生活。加油~~

tengawaakito

Agree ordisagree? The car (automobile) has had great effect on society than the airplane.

As the modern society grows, a controversial issue has been brought into our eye-sight that whether the automobile has had more impact on society than airplane. Just as one hundred people have one hundred Hamlets in the heart. （There are a thousand Hamlets in a thousand people's eyes.
）Some experts consider airplane great changing our civilization(consider sth adj +doing),since airplane can travel a large(long) distance in several hours, making world became an earth village. while others...(加一句，好照应那个格言~)But as an individual, I prefer the idea that the car has more impact than plane has. The following reasons will substantiate my idea.
To begin with, the modern society is consisted by many individuals including you and me. If you check both car and airplane, youwill definitely find that car got great influence on individual’s lifestylemore than airplane. For example, my mother as an important member in the familywho needs to drive car every day for buying food and other stuff fromsupermarket, but only took plane for 6 times by far. Obviously individuals need（use）car more frequently than airplane. Without automobile, our life just cannot continue.

In addition, how developed the country is depends on how well the economy level it reaches.（which degree of economic development it has attained） Airplane is a mean of transporting large amounts of cargo from large during long distance. It indeed helps to enhance international treading. However the car is more important for particular industry growth. For example, in Philippine,banana famers need to transport their cargo-banana-to the harbor for exporting.If they do not have the car to complete this task, the banana will either be rotted on the tree or became too expensive because they have to use some uneconomical ways to transport. This case shows without the help of automobile,airplane just have nothing to carry, therefore, and developing local economywill be impossible.(这个想法很新颖嘛~~)

From all aspects taken into consideration carefully, I can draw the conclusion confidently that the automobile is a more important invention in terms of changing our world than airplane.（结尾紧扣主题，不错哦~）


总体来说，本文是切合题意的。个人意见是本文可以从宏观和微观两个角度写，宏观：经济发展，微观：日常生活。加油~~

-- by 会员 1369179610 (2012/12/17 0:41:26)

谢谢猫猫的宝贵意见，我有个问题，请问一样的字数比如380， 支持的理由是三个比较好吗？好像欧美人有找三个理由的习惯。

tengawaakito

independent writing.
should we lesten to other group member’s advice in our work?

Recently, a controversial issue has been brought to our eye-sights that should we lesten to other group member’s advice during our work? Just as the saying goes that there are one thousand Hamlets in one thousand people’s mind. some individuals consider one group should only have one direction, which could make  the term more unified, therefore they tend to not listening other’s opinion. However, as a member in a Japanese company, too many cases show me the the power of listening to others. This fact makes me to support the idea of always considering member’s proposals. the reasons following will substantiate my choice.

To begin with, according to some surveys made by Japanese government. The more proposals members in the company make the more successful and delicate the business plan will be. Since individual’s understanding of the conditions will always been limited. but a business analysis gaven by a well-functioned group will always be more delicate than the one from individual.
The reason is quite simple, just like the old Chinese saying-one chopstick is easy to break but 100 chopsticks bound together will be unbreakable.  More member’s are making research in your organization  means the company can access to more resources and  aspect to analysis the question. This methodology right now is widely used by many organizations in the world.

Additionally, since the reason why people go to work is not as simple as for getting their salary. everyone wants to be valued by the company, which makes they fell their are more important. Please do not underestimate this thinking, because this will relate to the job satisfaction directly. For example, a staff in our university who use to be not very active. people do not pay much attention on him, but things totally changed after his proposal for gathering more students accepted by the Dean, since then he looks like a different person who is willing to interact with school affairs much more. So next time, if you had a problem to motivate your employees, may be listening to them well be the most cheap therapy.

Taken these two aspects in to consideration carefully, I can draw my opinion confidently that in order to build a strong organization in this competitive business world. listening to each member’s voice will be a essential strategy to take. to be too confident on one person’s  choice will be fatal.

1369179610

这个我不清楚，三个理由可以的，只是我通常想不出那么多。

Yeeisstrong

independent writing.
should we lesten to other group member’s advice in our work?

Recently, a controversial issue has been brought to our eye-sights that should we listen to other group member’s advice during our work? Just as the saying goes that there are one thousand Hamlets in one thousand people’s mind.Some individuals consider one group should only have one direction, which could make the term more (and more) unified, therefore they tend to not listening other’s opinion. However, as a member in a Japanese company, too many cases show me the the power of listening to others. This fact makes me to support the idea of always considering member’s proposals. The reasons following will substantiate my choice.

To begin with, according to some surveys made by Japanese government. The more proposals members in the company make the more successful and delicate the business plan will be. Since individual’s understanding of the conditions will always been limited. but a business analysis given by a well-functioned group will always be more delicate than the one from individual.
The reason is quite simple, just like the old Chinese saying-one chopstick is easy to break but 100 chopsticks bound together will be unbreakable. More members’ are making research in your organization means the company can access to more resources and aspect to analysis the question. This methodology right now is widely used by many organizations in the world.

Additionally, since the reason why people go to work is not as simple as for getting their salary. Everyone wants to be valued by the company, which makes they fell their are more important. Please do not underestimate this thinking, because this will relate to the job satisfaction directly. For example, a staff(staff 是集体名字，an employee) in our university who used to be not very active. people do not pay much attention on(to) him, but things totally changed after his proposal for gathering more students accepted by the Dean, since then he looks like a different person who is willing to interact with school affairs much more. So next time, if you had a problem to motivate your employees, may be listening to them will be the most cheapest therapy.

Taken these two aspects in to consideration carefully, I can draw my opinion confidently that in order to build a strong organization in this competitive business world. listening to each member’s voice will be a essential strategy to take to be too confident on one person’s choice will be fatal.



文章下的细节要注意，拼写错误和大小写，积少成多了。文章的思路和我的也差不多，文章红色的谚语或者熟语用的很不错，事例也丰富。学习呢~ 其实有些表达还是汉语话廖~多看老美的文章吧~ 共同努力~

tengawaakito

Independent Writing: Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends.
a. joining a sports team,
b. participate in community activities, or traveling。
Integrated Writing: TPO17

Do you still remember the old days in the school, have you tried joining some sports team or other community activities for seeking new friends? Actually, according to some surveys, the question what is the best way to make new friends in the school is the most concerned topic in the school. Some people prefer to joining the sports team and the others would like to participate in community activities or traveling. In my point of view, participating in community activities is far way better for making friends. The following reasons will clearly prove my opinion.

To begin with, first, please imagine that what kind of situation will be best for making new friends. Some students may claim that they will choice doing sports with the others, because it is such funny. However, on the contract, many researches show that people will like to open their hearts only when the time people fell relaxed, in other words, It is much more easier for people to trust and understand each other when they are not fell nevours. this fact suggested that some events such as community activities and traveling will be a more suitable place for enhancing people ‘s social life.

Additionally, compared to sports team, members in the communities are constantly changing. Image every time you step into the group, there always some new faces that you never seen, This provide you more chances to meet different people.

Last but not the least, high competition sometimes will also be a huge obstacle for building friendship. For example, in the school’s soccer team, every member not only need to collaborate with each other, but also compete in the same team. In this kind of situation, people pay more attention on their performance, on one wants to be a burden of the team. The term- friendship, which is very popular among the member in the community, is replaced by another word-teamwork. Once you get into the team, training, exercising, and marching are almost everything. But situation is totally different in communities, people are helping each other. Apparently, people will be more open in this low competition environment.

Taken all aspects into consideration, I can draw my conclusion confidently that community group and traveling group will be a much more suitable place for you to make new friends.


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