11.7 独立写作,求拍砖,谢谢亲们~

lizchang1990

11.13  TPO  23 综合writing

The reading passage and the lecture hold opposite perspective toward the factors that cause the decline of yellow cedar. The professor illustrates that the several hypotheses in the article are fairly unwarranted for three reasons.

To begin with, the reading mentions that insect parasites bring damage to yellow cedar and cause trees' decline. However, the speaker points out this inaccuracy by saying that health yellow cedar can resist the insect parasites by themselves. In addition, bark and leaves of trees can release powerful chemical poison; it's impossible this insect is a candidate for the reason. In fact, the attacked trees are already ill or dead. Therefore, the first hypothesis is rejected completely.

Regarding the second argument the reading passage claims, that brown bears are responsible for the decline, is also rebutted as nonsense by the lecturer. He demonstrates that decline appears in both cold mainland and island. But there are no bears in island. So such reason toward bears is highly doubted.

Finally, the professor contradicts the statement in the article that gradual changes of climate may be to blame. He explains that many trees die in lower elevation, which is warmer for plants to grow. We can see more yellow cedar die in lower elevation than trees in higher regions. So, the blame to climate is uncorrected because roots are not sensitive to warmer weather.

lizchang1990

11月13日
独立 Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view?
综合：TPO23


When it comes to the topic that professors should take more time to do research or to educate students, people always hold different perspectives on it. Some uphold the former, while others prefer the latter. In my view, teachers in university should spend more time doing research.

First of all, only when professors themselves make clear the academic knowledge by doing researches can they teach their students well. As a saying goes, practice makes perfect. It means that people need to acquire skills or theories from real working environment. Nowadays, advances in technology have changed so fast, the change of one discipline may impact another relevant science and lead to the past knowledge in textbooks outdated. Then we are in want of more scholars engaging in experiments to provide the update knowledge. So professors can exploit their abilities to solve these problems quickly by doing researches. When teachers are familiar with such a field, their students can make huge contributions to this academic area.

In addition, prestigious researches can help a university obtain a good reputation; maybe the college will enroll more excellent students in the near future. Admittedly, most of us would like to pursue a further study in a well-known program. So, what should we do often? Generally speaking, we will search the rank of a university from US News. Such a rank is partly based on the dedication of scholars in a school. Therefore, if professors take more time to study a profound field in laboratories, and they can do it successfully, the result from experiments is not only a breakthrough of a project but also a high acknowledgement to both professors and a university. This is a virtuous cycle; it can bring much benefit to the recruit and huge potential success to a college.

Finally, doing researches can boost the development of social science, improving people’s spiritual and material life. As we know, many daily things in our life are invented by myriad experiments. From electricity to bulb, from black television to LCD television and from telephone to Internet, we can see our life has been changed so much. It is scholars’ efforts that we can have such a better and comfortable modern life. If professors in college merely educate their students about textbooks, it is hard for me to imagine what our life will be.

Taking all these factors as I mentioned above, I firmly believe that professors need to delicate more time on researches rather than only teaching students in campus because researches can benefit not only professors themselves but also our society and whole academic field.

lizchang1990

辛苦批改的同学~thanks so much !

bonnenuit

The reading passage and the lecture hold opposite perspective toward the factors that cause the decline of yellow cedar. The professor illustrates that the several hypotheses in the article are fairly unwarranted for three reasons.

To begin with, the reading mentions that insect parasites bring damage to yellow cedar and cause trees' decline. However, the speaker points out this(this很少做代词，改that it is) inaccuracy by saying that health yellow cedar can resist the insect parasites by themselves. In addition, bark and leaves of trees can release powerful chemical poison; it's impossible this insect is a candidate for the reason. In fact, the attacked trees are already ill or dead. Therefore, the first hypothesis is rejected completely.

Regarding the second argument the reading passage claims,(去掉逗号） that brown bears are responsible for the decline, is also rebutted as nonsense by the lecturer. He demonstrates that decline appears in both cold mainland and island. But there are no bears in island. So（so 没有therefore，hence，来得正是） such reason toward bears is highly doubted.

Finally, the professor contradicts the statement in the article that gradual changes of climate may be to blame. He explains that many trees die in lower elevation, which is warmer for plants to grow. We can see more yellow cedar die in lower elevation than trees in higher regions. So, the blame to climate is uncorrected because roots are not sensitive to warmer weather.

lmylacoste

When it comes to the topic that professors should take more time to do research or to educate students, people always hold different perspectives on it. Some uphold the former, while others prefer the latter. In my view, teachers in university should spend more time doing research.

First of all, only when professors themselves make clear the academic knowledge by doing researches can they teach their students well. As a saying goes, practice makes perfect. It means that people need to acquire skills or theories from real working environment. Nowadays, advances(“axioms” would be more suitable to be blended in the sentence) in technology have changed so fast, the change of one discipline may impact another relevant science and lead to the past knowledge in textbooks (to be) outdated. Then we are in want of more scholars engaging in experiments to provide the update(updated) knowledge. So professors can exploit(not concise I thinkàtake advantage of) their abilities to solve these problems quickly by doing researches. When teachers are familiar with such a field, their students can make huge contributions to this academic area.

In addition, prestigious researches can help a university obtain a good reputation; maybe the college will enroll more excellent students in the near future. Admittedly, most of us would like to pursue a further study in a well-known program. So, what should we do often? Generally speaking, we will search the rank of a university from US News. Such a rank is partly based on the dedication of scholars in a school. Therefore, if professors take more time to study a profound field in laboratories, and they can do it successfully, the result from experiments is not only a breakthrough of a project but also a high acknowledgement to both professors and a university. This is a virtuous cycle; it can bring much benefit to the recruit and huge potential success to a college.

Finally, doing researches can boost the development of social science, improving people’s spiritual and material life. As we know, many daily things in our life are invented by myriad experiments. From electricity to bulb, from black television to LCD television and from telephone to Internet, we can see our life has been changed so much. It is scholars’ efforts that we can have such a better and comfortable modern life. If professors in college merely educate their students about textbooks, it is hard for me to imagine what our life will be.

Taking all these factors as I mentioned above, I firmly believe that professors need to delicate more time on researches rather than only teaching students in campus because researches can benefit not only professors themselves but also our society and whole academic field.



Excellent

Elegant language, rich content and delicate structure!

Only with very little minors

Good

lizchang1990

11月14日
独立 Contributes on an enjoyable vacation, please select one of three selection. Good food, good location and with good friends to travel.

In such a stressful and fast-paced society, many of people tend to have a trip to release their mental pressure. But what is the top priority element for us to consider when we select the contributions on an enjoyable travel? Good food? Good location or good friends? From my perspective, good friends take weighs over the formers.

Admittedly, good food and good location are indispensable and vital factors for an enjoyable journey. Local characteristic food can help us know local special diet; good location will bring us a delighted mood to experience regional culture and to see the beautiful scenery. But these extrinsic elements are not enough to ensure a satisfied vacation; we care more about intrinsic joy. For example, when we encounter problems in a trip like losing a wallet or catching a cold; can you still have a strong appetite for the food or keep a good emotion to enjoy the charming views? I don’t think so. We usually will be upset and feel disappointed about this travel. If we have good friends accompany us in this time, maybe the situation will be different. They can help us to solve such unpleasant problems and make our journey more colorful. Friends always are huge bonuses for us when we are in trouble and contribute to our travel.

In addition, good friends can augment our joy in a tour, this intangible asset which we cannot gain from good food or good location is an extra award for us to remember this vacation in the rest of our life. Taking my own experience as an example, last year I had a tour from New York to Las Vegas. My sense of direction was bad, especially when I was in a completely strange country. The crowed and dirty buildings in Chinatown made me uncomfortable; the worse weather had destroyed my strong desire to visit outside the hotel. All in all, I was totally irritable and depressed. I didn’t know why I was so sensitive about such annoying things. At that time, my friend Laura talked with me and tried her best to make me happy. After one-hour mood curing, things didn’t seem worse. Thanks for Laura, I could adjust my negative mood quickly and eventually enjoy my travel.

Taking all these reasons above, I firmly believe that good friends can contribute more to a vacation than other factors. Since they can not only help us out of dejected situations easily but also enlarge our satisfaction about our journey. So next time when you want to visit another places, why not ask a good friend accompany you?

谢谢批改的童鞋~~

lizchang1990

TPO22 综合,谢谢批改同学!

The reading passage and the lecture hold opposite opinions toward the topic whether the ethanol is a good replacement for gasoline. The speaker illustrates that ethanol is a better alternative for three reasons.

First of all, the professor contradicts the argument in the article that ethanol can’t solve the biggest environmental problems: global warming. He illustrates that ethanol is often made of plants like corns. Growing plants can absorb the carbon dioxide in air as their nutrition. Actually, the corns can remove CO2 from the atmosphere. So, the reason provided in the reading is not convincing.

Regarding the second statement in the passage, more than 60 percentages of corns have to be used for 10 percentages of fuel needs and animals haven’t enough food, the lecturer points out the inaccuracy of the reason. He explains that ethanol is produced by the cellutrice, which is a kind of cell walls and is an inedible part of trees. Therefore, by using this part to produce ethanol has nothing with the available food for animals and cannot endanger their life.

Finally, the speaker demonstrates the explanation that ethanol fuel will never be able to compete with gasoline on price as nonsense by stating that tax subsidies from a government are necessary. In fact, if the productions of ethanol increase, the marginal cost will drop, then the price of ethanol will decline. Meanwhile, the professor says that if the yields are 3 times greater than they are now, the cost of ethanol will drop 40 percentages.

AnthonySummer

11月14日独立 Contributes on an enjoyable vacation, please select one of three selection. Good food, good location and with good friends to travel.


In such (啰嗦，建議刪掉） a stressful and fast-paced society, many of people tend to have a trip to release their mental pressure. But what is the top priority element for us to consider when we select the contributions on an enjoyable travel? Good food? Good location or good friends? From my perspective, good friends take the weight over the formers （複數）.


Admittedly, a good food and a good location are indispensable and vital factors for an enjoyable journey. Local characteristic (traditional） food can help us know the local special diet; good location will bring us a delighted mood to experience regional culture and to see the beautiful scenery. But these extrinsic elements are not enough to ensure a satisfactory （satisfied 是被滿意的）savacation; we care more about the intrinsic joy. For example, when we encounter problems in a trip like （語病） losing a wallet or catching a cold（這句很唐突，最好要前後過渡一下）; can you still have a strong appetite for the food or keep a good emotion to enjoy the charming views? I don’t think so. We usually will be upset and feel disappointed about this travel. If we have good friends to accompany （你原來兩個謂語了）us in this time, maybe the situation will be different. They can help us to solve such unpleasant problems and make our journey more colorful. Friends always are huge bonuses for us when we are（刪掉） in trouble and contribute （語病，主語指代不清） to our travel.


In addition, good friends can augment our joy in a tour, （not convince用在這不好) this intangible asset which we cannot gain from good food or good location is an extra award for us to remember this vacation in the rest of our life. Taking my own experience as an example, last year I had a tour from New York to Las Vegas. My sense of direction was bad, especially when I was in a completely strange country. The crowed and dirty buildings in Chinatown made me uncomfortable; the worse weather had destroyed my strong desire to visit outside the hotel. All in all, I was totally irritable and depressed. I didn’t know why I was so sensitive about such annoying things. At that time, my friend Laura talked with（to） me and tried her best to make me happy. After one-hour mood curing, things didn’t seem worse. Thanks for Laura, I could adjust my negative mood quickly and eventually enjoy my travel. （最後列子感覺一筆帶過，可以多寫些）


Taking all these reasons above, I firmly believe that good friends can contribute more to a vacation than other factors. Since they cannot only help us out of dejected situations easily but also enlarge our satisfaction about our journey. So next time when you want to visit another places, why not ask a good friend accompanies you?
感覺句式用法比較簡單，用詞不夠豐富，有些語法錯誤。貴在結構清晰，簡單易懂。加油吧！
谢谢批改的童鞋~~

pennywu20

Thereading passage and the lecture hold opposite opinions toward the topic whetherthe ethanol is a good replacement for gasoline. The speaker illustrates thatethanol is a better alternative for three reasons.

First of all, the professor contradicts the argument in the article thatethanol can’t solve the biggest environmental problems: global warming(用定语从句会不会好些呢？之前看过的冒号后一般接句子~拙见). He illustrates that ethanol is often made of plants like（最好用such as，考过G的同学懂得~）corns.Growing plants can absorb the carbon dioxide in air as their nutrition. Actually,the corns（plants更好？） can remove CO2 from the atmosphere. So, the reason provided in thereading is not convincing.

Regarding the second statement in the passage, more than 60 percentages ofcorns have to be used for 10 percentages of fuel needs and animals haven’tenough food, the lecturer points out the inaccuracy of the reason. He explainsthat ethanol is produced by the cellutrice（介个我当时也没听懂是啥植物）, which is a kind of cell walls andis an inedible part of trees. Therefore, by using this part（再修饰一下part？） to produce ethanolhas nothing with the available food for animals and cannot endanger their life.（nothing to do with, 最后一句觉得最好修改一下表达的可能更准确些~）

Finally, the speaker demonstrates the explanation that ethanol fuel will neverbe able to compete with gasoline on price as nonsense by stating that taxsubsidies from a government are necessary. (意思好像和lecture里的不同？）In fact, if the productions ofethanol increase, the marginal cost will drop, then the price of ethanol willdecline. Meanwhile（这个衔接的好~）, the professor says that if the yields are 3 times（觉得欠妥？直接three times？） greaterthan they are now, the cost of ethanol will drop 40 percentages.

除了third point第一句有点问题，看下来表达什么的还是不错~比较喜欢。差点改迟了？多多包涵

lizchang1990

呵呵,不迟,谢谢  penny 哦!   O(∩_∩)O哈哈~