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wakesleep2011

还请大牛及时批阅，多谢了！

晨依Jacqueline

超级无敌小鹤鹤 发表于 2013-9-25 08:18
终于把晨依这个帖子挖出来了。。。没写小分队题目但是想要互改的看过来！！！ ...

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晨依Jacqueline

wakesleep2011 发表于 2013-9-29 06:12
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抱歉，晨依近期上CD不及时，回复较晚。
希望建议对你有帮助！加油！

perfectends

晨依Jacqueline 发表于 2013-9-30 22:17
抱歉，晨依近期上CD不及时，回复较晚。
希望建议对你有帮助！加油！

认真的小晨依来啦~ 被改的孩子有福~\(≧▽≦)/~啦啦啦~ 国庆快乐

晨依Jacqueline

perfectends 发表于 2013-10-1 10:03
认真的小晨依来啦~ 被改的孩子有福~\(≧▽≦)/~啦啦啦~ 国庆快乐

P姐假期快乐~\(≧▽≦)/~
我最近正好也没啥事情忙，回报一下CD的孩纸们~

天空的颜色

自己写好改了一遍，看了一遍的。希望晨依可以帮忙改改 。不胜感激http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-781261-1-1.html

skipself

不知道这个帖子还有没有效果呢~最近写了一篇社会类的关于“是否同意政府通过提高汽油和电的价格是唯一有效鼓励人们去节能的方法”
用了两个大点去写，很久没动笔了，还请各位童鞋前辈多多指教。先谢过了
另外如果需要我去修改其他童鞋的，在下虽不才但也愿意倾力相助。
题目：
Do u agree or disagree that the only effective way for the government to encourage energy conservation is to increase the price of gasoline and electricity.

As we know, nowadays, the amount of energy consume is massive, and it is growing strikingly especially in the field of gasoline and electricity. Apparently, government wants to encourage people save the energy or stop wasting. However, I don’t think that increasing the price of gasoline and electricity is the only effective way to encourage people to conserve them.
For one reason, in order to encourage people, I think persuade or educate them is a more accessible way than request or enforce them because persuading would let people accept and follow much easier. Instead, to increase the price of daily-use energy like electricity seems like a method that push people weather to pay more money or to give up using electricity and gasoline. Additionally, if people could successfully persuaded by the government to conserve the energy, the conception of saving energy would root in the mind. It’s more effective to encourage people saving electricity and gasoline because when people were educated, they would not only stop wasting energy but also may tell others to conserve the energy together. The similar thing was happened around me that although my mother was used complain about the growing high price of petrol all the time, and she still kept driving her car to work everyday. However when I talked to her once about the serious problem caused by using fossil fuel, and the benefit of walk to work, she gave up driving immediately. Thus, I think the mild persuading is a more efficient solution of encourage people to do something.
For another reason, the increasing price of gasoline and electricity, in my opinion, is a heavy burden for average people especially for those people whose wage under the average line because the spending of resource such as electricity and gasoline is inevitable in daily life. However the rich probably won’t consider the price too much, and the evidence is that most people are not that rich among the whole society. Furthermore, there are lots of incidents showed in the past year that the growing financial burden or pressure usually lead the disturbance of society. Such as people who can’t afford the increasing tax of the governor of Qing dynasty in ancient China, they revolt and fight with the army of empire, and build the new dynasty which known as Han dynasty after a successive war and a huge sacrifice. Fortunately, financial pressure doesn’t cost a war or disturbance during the history. However it really brings lots of unnecessary burden for people also for the whole society. Therefore, gaining the price of energy won’t encourage people to save the rare energy effectively, and it perhaps will lead some negative effects.
To sum up, I deeply trust there are many better solution for encourage people to conserve the energy, and government increasing the rate of electricity and gasoline is not the only efficient way to achieve their goal of conservation.

超级无敌小鹤鹤

顶起来吧

超级无敌小鹤鹤

== 为什么那么多人没看到这个帖子。。。